Tedh's Writing Page (2020)

Original: 


     The boy was able to get out of the Stomach of the fish by cutting of a piece of the liver, therefore, the fish vomited up the boy. According to the text,”... he became very hungry, the boy looked around and saw the fishes liver hanging right over his head. Thinking it was dried meat, he tried to cut of a piece with a muscle shell he had been playing with before and still held in his. Wile the operation sickens in the stomach it vomited the boy out. So, the boy got hungry and cut a piece of the fishes liver and the fish vomited him out. In conclusion, the boy was able to get out of the fish because it vomited him out.


Corrections: 

  The boy was able to get out of the Stomach of the fish by cutting of a piece of the liver, therefore, the fish vomited up the boy.
      • Change "the" liver to "its liver." Try: "

According to the text,”... he became very hungry, the boy looked around and saw the fishes liver hanging right over his head.

      • Edited for spelling. The plural for fish is still fish, not fishes. Additionally, the liver "belongs" to the fish, therefore it's possessive. It should be changed to: "fish's..."

Wile the operation sickens in the stomach it vomited the boy out. So, the boy got hungry and cut a piece of the fishes liver and the fish vomited him out

      • I'm not quite sure what you were trying to say here. Let's change it to: "The boy made the fish sick when his liver was cut open and it vomited the boy out."

Fully Edited Version: The boy was able to get out of the fish's stomach by cutting off a piece of its liver, which caused the fish to vomit up the boy. According to the text,”... he became very hungry. The boy looked around and saw the fish's liver hanging right over his head. Thinking it was dried meat, he tried to cut off a piece with a muscle shell he had been playing with before and still held in his hand. The boy made the fish sick when his liver was cut open and it vomited the boy out. So, the boy got hungry and cut a piece of the fishes liver and the fish vomited him out.

July 21

The monkey played the song the scarecrow on his fiddle the music was sooooo bad that the wolf admired that the fiddle was not actual his and that the bow and arrow belonged to the monkey.

July 29

In my opinion the farmer was surprised because he actually did all the work and then the crow was on the bulls head and the crow told the farmer it was a hard day and then the farmer asked why afterwards the crow said because i did all the work the farmer said really and the crow said yeah and flew of laughing.

Aug11 In my opinion I think that the police officers in the story were like not brave at all because on of the police officers like ran away like literally ran of leaving his partner behind wile his partner took out his stout I think that’s some sort of weapon oh and the robber is like way more brave than the cops because when the robber saw the cop he didn’t run of instead he took out a sword like a literal sword I think it’s like ya know the swords in the ninja movies