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Original Text

Mrs Bhaer is thoughtful person. The text it states, "There is a place already for you, my son; sit down and dry your wet feet at once." Also in text, it states, “And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it deer.” This conveys that she is thoughtful cause she cares about him being sick. In short, this is how come Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful.

Corrections

Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person. 

     Remember to put a period in “Mrs.” because it is an abbreviation of the word missus. You did this in your last sentence and it was correct! Also, remember to put the article “a” before “thoughtful person.”

In the text, she says, “’There is a place already for you, my son; sit down and dry your wet feet at once.’” Also in the text, she says, “‘And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it dear?’”  

     You are right that the text states the quote you chose. However, because you are using the quote to show how Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person, I edited both sentences to include that “she says.” Also, because the quotes you chose already have quotation marks in the text, I edited your paragraph to have another set of single quotation marks (‘ ‘). Lastly, make sure to check that you have copied the text exactly. You had “deer” instead of “dear” and a period instead of a question mark.

This conveys that she is thoughtful because she cares about him being sick. 

     “Cause” is a slang word that is short for “because.” You should use the full word “because” here, because you are writing a formal paragraph. Also, I didn’t make this change, because I am not sure who Mrs. Bhaer is speaking to, but if you know the name of the “him,” then you should use his name instead of “him.”

In short, this is why Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful. 

     I included “why” instead of “how come” because “why” is more formal.

Final Draft

Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person. In the text, she says, “’There is a place already for you, my son; sit down and dry your wet feet at once.’” Also in the text, she says, “‘And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it dear?’”  This conveys that she is thoughtful because she cares about him being sick. In short, this is why Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful.


You used a great quote to support your claim that Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful! Just make sure to watch your punctuation and use formal words when writing. Good job!





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