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Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person.
... Edited to indicate who the speaker is throughout the paragraph; Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person, as seen by her dialogue. This is a strong way to open your paragraph because it answers the question and states what you are arguing.
The text it states, "There is a place already for thee, my son; sit down and dry thy wet feet at once."
... Edited for grammar and punctuation; The text states, “‘There is a place already for thee, my son; sit down and dry thy wet feet at once.’” It is assumed that Mrs. Bhaer is the speaker, making the extra apostrophe necessary to indicate that the cited text is dialogue.
Also in the text, it states, “And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it dear?”
... Edited for fluency and punctuation; Also, in the text it states, “‘And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it dear?’” “Also” is a transition word, meaning that it is used to connect ideas or thoughts. Transitional words or phrases should be followed by a comma. The comma in between “text” and “it” isn’t needed and causes an awkward pause for the reader.
This conveys that she is thoughtful because she cares about him being sick.
...This is a strong explanation of the evidence because of the sentence’s word choice and the connection of the quote to the paragraph’s main argument. However, if the character’s name is known for “him” it should be used to provide the reader more context.
In short, this is how Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful.
... Edited for fluency, word choice and repetition; Therefore, Mrs. Bhaer is empathetic.
Original Text
Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person. The text it states, "There is a place already for thee, my son; sit down and dry thy wet feet at once." Also in the text, it states, “And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it dear?” This conveys that she is thoughtful because she cares about him being sick. In short, this is how Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful.
Edited Text
Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person, as seen by her dialogue. The text states, “‘There is a place already for thee, my son; sit down and dry thy wet feet at once.’” Also, in the text it states, “‘And try to get rid of that ugly cough. How long have you had it dear?’” This conveys that she is thoughtful because she cares about him being sick. Therefore, Mrs. Bhaer is empathetic.
Your evidence is well suited to your claim and your word choice of “convey” is strong! Make sure to put an extra apostrophe when the cited text is dialogue. Overall, nice job!
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