Godh's writing Page It was possible to know that the princess was a real princess by the prince asking the princess a question.



I think the authors purpose in writing the story to teach us a moral. One detail from the passage is “And what does the moral say? "Better to crow than to be vainglorious and break down at last." Second detail from the passage is “ It's all stupid stuff," said a voice within the weather-vane. "The yard rooster does not lay eggs any more than I do, and I am too lazy” . This is the author’s purpose of writing this story.



The mother stork wanted her children to learn how to fly because so that they can get food. One detail is “ You are to learn to fly, and then we shall pay a visit to the frogs “. Second detail is “ They will bow to us in the water and sing 'Croak! croak!' and we shall eat them up, and that will be a great treat." This is why the mother stork wanted to let her children fly .



I can tell that Baron was not a good person because he pushed the girl in the muddy pool. One detail from the passage is that “ Everything in its right place," cried he. "Into the puddle with you“. This is how I can tell that the baron is not a good person.




Original: Ali baba was abled to know how to get into the cave by Baba followed them with his eyes as far as he could see them. One detail is “ Baba followed them with his eyes as far as he could see them“. This is how Ali baba was a led to know how to get into the cave .

Edits:


Ali baba was abled to know how to get into the cave by Baba followed them with his eyes as far as he could see them.

      • Edited for clarity: Ali Baba was able to know how to get into the cave by following them.


Great job! Make sure to capitalize the names of people. Ex: Ali Baba.


One detail is “ Baba followed them with his eyes as far as he could see them“

      • Edited for clarity: One detail from the text is, "Ali Baba followed them with his eyes as far as he could see them."


Make sure to cite the full sentence!


This is how Ali baba was a led to know how to get into the cave .

      • Edited for fluidity: In conclusion, this is how Ali Baba knew how to get into the cave.


Make sure to not put a space before the period. Also, end the last sentence with a concluding statement.

Final Edit:


Ali Baba was able to know how to get into the cave by following them. One detail from the text is, "Ali Baba followed them with his eyes as far as he could see them." In conclusion, this is how Ali Baba knew how to get into the cave.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware






Original: The fern singed a song because the fern knows the world yet as well as she does. One detail from the passage is that “ know the world yet as well as I do, for my sticks are knotty"; and then it sang quite mournfully”. This is the reason why the fern was singing.

Edits:


The fern singed a song because the fern knows the world yet as well as she does.

      • Edited for clarity: The fern sang a song because the fern knows the world as well as she does.


Good! Make sure you say 'sung' instead of 'singed.' Signed is not a word.


One detail from the passage is that “ know the world yet as well as I do, for my sticks are knotty"; and then it sang quite mournfully”.

      • Edited for fluidity: One detail from the passage is that "But you do not know the world yet as well as I do, for my sticks are knotty," and then it sung quite mournfully.


Make sure to all the cited words when quoting from a story!


This is the reason why the fern was singing.

      • Edited for fluidity: In conclusion, this is the reason why the fern sang.


Final Edit:

The fern sang a song because the fern knows the world as well as she does. One detail from the passage is that "But you do not know the world yet as well as I do, for my sticks are knotty," and then it sung quite mournfully. In conclusion, this is the reason why the fern sang.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware







Original: The main character of the story is the tin soldiers. One detail from the passage is that “ There was once five and twenty tin soldiers”. This is the main characters of this story.

Edits:


The main character of the story is the tin soldiers.

      • Edited for fluidity: The main characters of the story are the 25 tin soldiers.


Good! Go in-depth with how many soldiers there were.


One detail from the passage is that “ There was once five and twenty tin soldiers”.

      • Edited for fluidity: The first sentence begins with, "There were once five-and-twenty tin soldiers, who were all brothers, for they had been made out of the same old tin spoon."


Make sure to cite the whole sentence.


This is the main characters of this story.

      • Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this shows that the tin soldiers were discussed a lot throughout the story.

Final Edit:

The main characters of the story are the 25 tin soldiers. The first sentence begins with, "There were once five-and-twenty tin soldiers, who were all brothers, for they had been made out of the same old tin spoon." In conclusion, this shows that the tin soldiers were discussed a lot throughout the story.


Edited by Kelsey Eggsware





Original: The way the treasure can be gained is by whoever jumps the highest. One detail from the passage is “ I will give a great treasure to him who shall jump highest”. This is how the treasure be gained.

Edits:


The way the treasure can be gained is by whoever jumps the highest.

      • Edited for clarity: Whoever jumps the highest is the way the treasure is obtained.


Good! Instead of 'gained' change the word to 'obtained'


One detail from the passage is “ I will give a great treasure to him who shall jump highest”.

      • Edited for punctuation and clarity: According to the text, "I will give a great treasure to him who shall jump the highest."


Make sure to put the period mark inside the quotations.


This is how the treasure be gained.

      • Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this is how the treasure is gained.


Instead of 'be' put 'is'

Great Job!

Final Edit:


Whoever jumps the highest is the way the treasure is obtained. According to the text, "I will give a great treasure to him who shall jump the highest." In conclusion, this is how the treasure is gained.


Edited by Kelsey Eggsware





Original: Gerda’s trip was a difficult one because had a long way to go yet Gerda must travel more than a hundred miles farther. one detail from the passage is that“ Gerda must travel more than a hundred miles farther”. This is why the trip was difficult.

Edits:


Gerda’s trip was a difficult one because had a long way to go yet Gerda must travel more than a hundred miles farther.

      • Edited for fluidity: Gerda's trip was difficult because she was freezing cold and had to travel over one hundred miles to Finland.


Good! Changed some wording around to make the sentence flow better.


one detail from the passage is that“ Gerda must travel more than a hundred miles farther”.

      • We can delete this because it is already stated in the first sentence.
      • Put in more information on the Snow Queen and maybe Gerda, as well!


This is why the trip was difficult.

      • In conclusion, this is why Gerda's trip was difficult.

Final Edit:

Gerda's trip was difficult because she was freezing cold and had to travel over one hundred miles to Finland. ** more information about Gerda and the snow queen here ** In conclusion, this is why Gerda's trip was difficult.


Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: The soapsuds were being used to destroy the Greenies. One detail from the passage is “ The human beings do not like us. They pursue and destroy us with soapsuds”. This is what the soapsuds are being used for.

Edits:


The soapsuds were being used to destroy the Greenies.

      • Good first sentence!


One detail from the passage is “ The human beings do not like us. They pursue and destroy us with soapsuds”.

      • Edited for clarity: One detail from the passage is "Human beings do not like us. They pursue and destroy us with soapsuds."


Take out 'the' in front of 'human beings'

This is what the soapsuds are being used for.

      • Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this is what the soapsuds were used for.

Final Edit:

The soapsuds were being used to destroy the Greenies. One detail from the passage is, "Human beings do not like us. They pursue and destroy us with soapsuds." In conclusion, this is what the soapsuds were used for.


Edited by Kelsey Eggsware






Original: The feather of the bird of fortune touched his forehead, became a pen in his hand, and brought him such luck that he soon became a wealthy merchant. One detail from the passage was that “ The feather of the bird of fortune touched his forehead, became a pen in his hand, and brought him such luck“ This is how the man became wealthy.

Edits:

      • The feather of the bird of fortune touched his forehead, became a pen in his hand, and brought him such luck that he soon became a wealthy merchant.


Edited for clarity: The merchant became wealthy from the golden feather of a bird by touching his forehead and soon became a pen in his hand.
Great first sentence! Changed the wording around to make the sentence flow better.

      • One detail from the passage was that “ The feather of the bird of fortune touched his forehead, became a pen in his hand, and brought him such luck“


Edited for punctuation and clarity: According to the passage, "The feather of the bird touched his forehead, became a pen in his hand, and brought him such luck."
Make sure the quotations come right before the first word in that citation. Also, make sure a period goes inside the quotations.

      • This is how the man became wealthy.


Edited for fluidity: In conclusion, this is how the man became wealthy.
Start the last sentence with 'In conclusion' to state this is the concluding sentence.


Final Edit: The merchant became wealthy from the golden feather of a bird by touching his forehead and soon became a pen in his hand. According to the passage, "The feather of the bird touched his forehead, became a pen in his hand, and brought him such luck." In conclusion, this is how the man became wealthy.


Edited by Kelsey Eggsware



Original: The tree that was the most kind was the apple or plum tree. One detail from the passage is that “here and there stood an apple tree or plum tree to serve as a kind of a token hat there had been once a garden”. This is the tree that was the most kind.

Edits:

      • The tree that was the most kind was the apple or plum tree.


Edited for fluidity: The plum and apple tree are the kindest trees in this article.
Changed the wording around to make it flow better

      • One detail from the passage is that “here and there stood an apple tree or plum tree to serve as a kind of a token hat there had been once a garden”.


Edited for grammar: One detail from the passage is that "Here and there stood an apple or plum tree to serve as a kind of token that there had been once a garden."
Make sure you are using your grammar correctly but a great sentence from the article!

      • This is the tree that was the most kind.


Edited for clarity: In conclusion, these are the trees that were the most kind.
Start the ending sentence with a concluding sentence.

Final Edit:

The plum and apple trees are the kindest trees in this article. One detail from the passage is that "Here and there stood an apple or plum tree to serve as a kind of token that there had been once a garden." In conclusion, these are the trees that were the most kind.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware



Original: The difference between buckwheat and the willow-tree was that the buckwheat appears blackened and singed, as if a flame of fire had passed over it. And the willow-trees trunk has been split, and out of the crevice grass and brambles grow. One detail is that “ a field of buckwheat appears blackened and singed “. This is the difference between the willow-tree and the buckwheat.

Edits:

      • The difference between buckwheat and the willow-tree was that the buckwheat appears blackened and singed, as if a flame of fire had passed over it.


Edited for grammar and clarity: The difference between the buckwheat and the willow-tree is that the buckwheat appears blackened and singed as if a flame of fire had passed over it.
Good first sentence! No need for the comma after 'singed'

      • And the willow-trees trunk has been split, and out of the crevice grass and brambles grow.


Edited for clarity: To begin, the article states that the willow-trees trunk has been split, and out of the crevice grass and brambles grow.
Take out the 'and' at the beginning of the sentence. Instead, start with a transition phrase.

      • One detail is that “ a field of buckwheat appears blackened and singed “.


Edited for clarity: One detail from the text is "A field of buckwheat appears black and singed as if a flame of fire had passed over it."
Finish the full sentence from the article.

      • This is the difference between the willow-tree and the buckwheat.


Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this is the difference between the willow-tree and the buckwheat tree.
End the last sentence with 'In conclusion'


Final Edit: The difference between the buckwheat and the willow-tree is that the buckwheat appears blackened and singed as if a flame of fire had passed over it. To begin, the article states that the willow-trees trunk has been split, and out of the crevice grass and brambles grow. One detail from the text is "A field of buckwheat appears black and singed as if a flame of fire had passed over it." In conclusion, this is the difference between the willow-tree and the buckwheat tree.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: The youngest princess most pleasure of all things is to hear about the human world up above. One detail is “Nothing gave her greater pleasure than to hear about the world of human beings up above” This is the youngest princess pleasure of all things.

Edits:

      • The youngest princess most pleasure of all things is to hear about the human world up above.


Edited for clarity: The youngest princess's most pleasure of all things is to hear about the human word up above.
princess should be princess's

      • One detail is “Nothing gave her greater pleasure than to hear about the world of human beings up above” This is the youngest princess pleasure of all things.


Edited for clarity: One detail in the article is "Nothing gave her greater pleasure than to hear about the world of human beings up above."
Make these two sentences!

      • This is the youngest princess pleasure of all things.


Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this is why the youngest princess is the pleasure of all things.
Make this the conclusion sentence to end the paragraph.

Final Edit:

The youngest princess's most pleasure of all things is to hear about the human word up above. One detail in the article is "Nothing gave her greater pleasure than to hear about the world of human beings up above." In conclusion, this is why the youngest princess is the pleasure of all things.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: The Boston Dynamics’ robot is assisting by reduce the number of necessary medical staff at the scene. One detail from the passage is that “are able to reduce the number of necessary medical staff at the scene and conserve their limited PPE [personal protective equipment] supply.” This is how the Boston Dynamics robot is assisting during the convid 19 Pandemic.

Edits:

      • The Boston Dynamics’ robot is assisting by reduce the number of necessary medical staff at the scene.


Edited for grammar: The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting by reducing the number of necessary staff at the scene.
Reduce should be reducing

      • One detail from the passage is that “are able to reduce the number of necessary medical staff at the scene and conserve their limited PPE [personal protective equipment] supply.”


Edited for clarity: One detail from the passage is that "They are able to reduce the number of the necessary medical staff at the scene and conserve their limited PPE (Personal Protective Equipment) supply."
Changed some wording around a bit.

      • This is how the Boston Dynamics robot is assisting during the convid 19 Pandemic.


Edited for grammar: In conclusion, this is how the Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.


Final Edit: The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting by reducing the number of necessary staff at the scene. One detail from the passage is, "They are able to reduce the number of the necessary medical staff at the scene and conserve their limited PPE (Personal Protective Equipment) supply." In conclusion, this is how the Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: Your brain cleanse itself and get rid of harmful toxins. One detail from the passage is that “ Now, it appears that snoozing for an average of 8 hours daily enables the brain to cleanse itself and get rid of harmful toxins.” This is what happens to your brain 🧠 when you sleep 💤.

Edits:



Original: The boys are helping the seniors by delivering groceries and necessary supplies they need. One detail is “ by delivering groceries and supplies they need “ This is how the boys are helping the seniors.

Edits:

      • The boys are helping the seniors by delivering groceries and necessary supplies they need.


Edited for clarity: The boys are helping seniors by delivering groceries and the necessary supplies needed to survive.
Put 'the' in front of 'necessary'

      • One detail is “ by delivering groceries and supplies they need “ This is how the boys are helping the seniors.


Edited for clarity: One detail in the article is "by delivering groceries and supplies they need" which is how the boys are helping senior citizens.
This paragraph can use a bit more detail. Maybe get one more detail from the article and put it in this paragraph!

Final Edit: The boys are helping seniors by delivering groceries and the necessary supplies needed to survive. One detail in the article is "the boys are delivering groceries and supplies they need" which is how the boys are helping senior citizens.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: One of the article reports that Earth Day will be celebrated is “Celebrate The 50th Anniversary Of Earth Day Without Leaving Home” One detail is that “ Earth Day which is celebrated annually on April 22 is usually commemorated with outdoor activities demonstrating support for environmental protection.” This is one of the article reports that Earth Day will be celebrated.

Edits:

      • One of the article reports that Earth Day will be celebrated is “Celebrate The 50th Anniversary Of Earth Day Without Leaving Home”


Edited for grammar and clarity: The article reports that Earth Day will be celebrated as "Celebrate The 50th Anniversary Of Earth Day Without Leaving Home."
Instead of 'one of the article' state that it is 'The article' and also, put a period inside the quotations of the word 'Home'

      • One detail is that “ Earth Day which is celebrated annually on April 22 is usually commemorated with outdoor activities demonstrating support for environmental protection.”


Edited for clarity: One detail in the reading is that "Earth day, which is celebrated manually on April 22, is usually commemorated with outdoor activities demonstrating support for environmental protection."
Great job putting the period inside the quotations! Also, add a comma after day and 22.

      • This is one of the article reports that Earth Day will be celebrated.


Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this is an article that reports how Earth Day will be celebrated.
Changed the wording around a little to make the sentence more clear.

Final Edit: The article reports that Earth Day will be celebrated as "Celebrate The 50th Anniversary Of Earth Day Without Leaving Home." One detail in the reading is that "Earth day, which is celebrated manually on April 22, is usually commemorated with outdoor activities demonstrating support for environmental protection." In conclusion, this is an article that reports how Earth Day will be celebrated.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: One of the accomplishments that William has achieved is that he ended childhood hunger. One detail is that “ I will do whatever it takes to end childhood hunger”. Second details are “ Many children , not just William and Alexander, still help make Food Drive Kids”. This is one of the accomplishments that Willliam has achieved.

Edits:

      • One of the accomplishments that William has achieved is that he ended childhood hunger.


Edited for fluidity: One accomplishment that William has achieved is that he ended childhood hunger.
Say 'one accomplishment' instead of 'one of the accomplishments'

      • One detail is that “ I will do whatever it takes to end childhood hunger”.


Edited for punctuation and clarity: One detail in the reading is, "I will do whatever it takes to end childhood hunger."
Explain that this detail was in the reading. Make sure the period is inside the quotation marks, also!

      • Second details are “ Many children , not just William and Alexander, still help make Food Drive Kids”.


Edited for punctuation and fluidity: Another detail in the reading states, "Many children, not just William and Alexander, still help make Food Drive Kids."
The word 'details' needs to be singular and instead of 'second' state 'another detail in the reading.' Also, the period goes inside the quotations!

      • This is one of the accomplishments that Willliam has achieved.


Edited for fluidity: In conclusion, these are some of the accomplishments William has achieved.
Start the ending sentence with 'In conclusion' and instead of 'this is one' state 'these are some' because there are two accomplishments, not one.

Final Edit: One accomplishment that William has achieved is that he ended childhood hunger. One detail in the reading is, "I will do whatever it takes to end childhood hunger." Another detail in the reading states, "Many children, not just William and Alexander, still help make Food Drive Kids." In conclusion, these are some of the accomplishments William has achieved.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: All people who enter the program does not become astronaut because there are many challenging parts to the training. One detail is that “ There are many challenging parts to the astronaut training.” Seconded detail is that “ Not everyone who is accepted into the program is certain to become an astronaut.” This is why all people who enter the program does not become astronaut.

Edits:

      • All people who enter the program does not become astronaut because there are many challenging parts to the training.


Edited for grammar: Everyone who enters the program does not become an astronaut because there are many challenging parts to the training.
Instead of 'all people' use 'everyone' it makes the sense flow better! Astronaut is spelled incorrectly also

      • One detail is that “ There are many challenging parts to the astronaut training.”


Edited for grammar and clarity: One detail in the reading is that "There are many challenging parts to the astronaut training and "Not everyone who is accepted into the program is certain to become an astronaut."
Combine these two sentences and say that the detail was in the reading.

      • Seconded detail is that “ Not everyone who is accepted into the program is certain to become an astronaut.”


Edited for clarity: Another detail is that not everyone who is accepted into the program is certain to become an astronaut.
Quotations do not need to be put here because you are stating it came from the reading.

      • This is why all people who enter the program does not become astronaut.


Edited for grammar and clarity: In conclusion, this is why some people who enter the program do not become astronauts.
To begin the ending sentence, start with 'In conclusion'

Final Edit: Everyone who enters the program does not become an astronaut because there are many challenging parts to the training. One detail in the reading is that "There are many challenging parts to the astronaut training." Another detail is that not everyone who is accepted into the program is certain to become an astronaut. In conclusion, this is why some people who enter the program do not become astronauts.

Edited by: Kelsey Eggsware




Original: The difference of opinion brought out by the Mayor and the Governor is that the mayor says that his opinion is to close school during this whole year. But the Governor says that his opinion is to open the school on June 26. One detail is that “ The mayor announced the school will be closed for the whole year “. This is the difference of opinion brought out by the Mayor and the Governor.

Edits:

      • The difference of opinion brought out by the Mayor and the Governor is that the mayor says that his opinion is to close school during this whole year. But the Governor says that his opinion is to open the school on June 26.


The difference of opinion between the Mayor and the Governor is that the mayor wants to close school the rest of the school year, while the Governor wants to open schools back up June 26th.
Edited for word choice and fluidity: Changed 'brought out' to between.' Great capitalization skills with the word Mayor and Governor! Combine the first two sentences.

      • One detail is that “ The mayor announced the school will be closed for the whole year “. This is the difference of opinion brought out by the Mayor and the Governor.


The Mayor concluded that he was closing the close for the whole year which is the difference between him and the Governor.
Edited for clarity: Put in the verb 'concluded' to describe what the mayor is doing. Combined the last two sentences.


Final Edit: The difference of opinion between the Mayor and the Governor is that the mayor wants to close school the rest of the school year, while the Governor wants to open schools back up June 26th. The Mayor concluded that he was closing the close for the whole year which is the difference of opinion between him and the Governor.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware


Original: The main idea of this story is about animals taking advantage of humans while the humans stay inside. The text states "The first animal to take advantage of human absence were Annie and Edward,two rockhopper penguins who reside at Chicago's Shedd Aquarium."This is what the main idea of this article is about.

Edits:

      • The main idea of this story is about animals taking advantage of humans while the humans stay inside.


No edits. Great first sentence

      • The text states "The first animal to take advantage of human absence were Annie and Edward,two rockhopper penguins who reside at Chicago's Shedd Aquarium."


The text states, "The first animal to take advantage of human absence were Annie and Edward, two rockhopper penguins who reside in Chicago's Shedd Aquarium."
Edited for fluidity and clarity: Put a comma after 'states' and a space after the comma before the word 'two.'

      • This is what the main idea of this article is about.


In conclusion, this is what the main idea of what this article is about.
Edited for word choice: Start the ending sentence with 'In conclusion.'

Original: The main idea of this story is about animals taking advantage of humans while the humans stay inside. The text states, "The first animal to take advantage of human absence were Annie and Edward, two rockhopper penguins who reside in Chicago's Shedd Aquarium." In conclusion, this is what the main idea of what this article is about.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware


Original:The positive good reasons of praticing social distancing is to limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19. One detail is "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes."This is the positive good reason for practicing social distancing.

Edits:

      • The positive good reasons of praticing social distancing is to limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19.


The positive reasons for practicing social distancing are to limit the spread of the Coronavirus.
Edited for grammar and clarity: Take out the word 'good' and change 'of' to 'for.' Change the word 'is' to 'are' because the word 'reasons' is plural. 'That causes COVID-19' can be taken out.

      • One detail is "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes."


One detail in the reading was, "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus droplets from coughs and sneezes."
Edited for clarity: Insert 'in the reading' to clarify.

      • This is the positive good reason for practicing social distancing.


In conclusion, this is why it is important to practice social distancing.
End the last sentence with 'in conclusion.'

Final Edit: The positive reasons for practicing social distancing are to limit the spread of the Coronavirus. One detail in the reading was, "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus droplets from coughs and sneezes." In conclusion, this is why it is important to practice social distancing.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware




Original: The reason for the 2020 Olympics in Japan being postponed is because of COVID-19. One detail is that" The 2020 Summer Olympic Games, in Tokyo, Japan, will be postponed for about a year. This is because of the coronavirus pandemic." This is the reason why the 2020 Olympics is being postponed in Japan.

Edits:

      • The reason for the 2020 Olympics in Japan being postponed is because of COVID-19.


The 2020 Olympics in Tokyo, Japan are being postponed because of COVID-19.
Take out 'the reason' and put Tokyo in this sentence to explain where the Olympics are occuring.

      • One detail is that" The 2020 Summer Olympic Games, in Tokyo, Japan, will be postponed for about a year.


Edited for clarity: One detail in the article is that "The 2020 Summer Olympic Games in Tokyo, Japan, will be postponed for about a year." This is because of the Coronavirus pandemic.
Make sure you state that the details are within the article. No need for a comma after 'Games." Good job capitalizing Coronavirus!

      • This is the reason why the 2020 Olympics is being postponed in Japan.


Edited for clarity: In conclusion, this is the reason why the 2020 Olympics are being postponed in Japan.
Add in conclusion because it is the last sentence. Also, change 'is' to 'are'

Final Edit: The 2020 Olympics in Tokyo, Japan are being postponed because of COVID-19. One detail in the article is that "The 2020 Summer Olympic Games in Tokyo, Japan, will be postponed for about a year." This is because of the Coronavirus pandemic. In conclusion, this is the reason why the 2020 Olympics are being postponed in Japan.

Edited by Kelsey Eggsware



Original: This two activities called Board Games and Card Games seem to be more Fun in home!

I chose these two games because it is fun to play with. The reason why I chose Board Games is that the game Monopoly is a good Board Game . It is a fun way to practice math skills , while also Monopoly teaches savings. So its like learning and fun together .

The reason why I chose Card Games is that games like Uno and Go fish and Old Maid, they are cheap and are easy to find . So you can play cards whenever you want to and wherever you want to , and I promise playing cards is very good

This is why I think these two games will be fun to play with.

Edits: This two activities called Board Games and Card Games seem to be more Fun in home! I chose these two games because it is fun to play with.


Edited for clarity, grammar and fluidity: Two activities that I enjoy playing at home are board games and card games.
Even though I took out the word 'this', it should have been 'these.'

The reason why I chose Board Games is that the game Monopoly is a good Board Game . It is a fun way to practice math skills , while also Monopoly teaches savings.


Edited for punctuation, grammar and clarity: Monopoly is one of my favorite board games because it's a great way to practice math skills and also teaches me the importance of saving money.
This should be one sentence. Also, when using punctuation, do not put a space after the word.

So its like learning and fun together.


Edited for clarity, fluidity and grammar: I enjoy Monopoly because I always have fun when playing it and it also helps me learn.
'its' should be 'it's' because it is a contraction.

The reason why I chose Card Games is that games like Uno and Go fish and Old Maid, they are cheap and are easy to find .


Edited for grammar, punctuation and fluidity: I enjoy card games because some of my favorite games to play are Uno, Go Fish, and Old Maid. These games are very cheap and super easy to find in stores.
Remember, no space before a punctuation.

So you can play cards whenever you want to and wherever you want to , and I promise playing cards is very good.


Edited for fluidity, punctuation and grammar: Having cards handy makes it very easy to play whenever I want, wherever I want which is why I enjoy these two types of games.

Final Edit: Two activities that I enjoy playing at home are board games and card games. Monopoly is one of my favorite board games because it’s a great way to practice math skills and also teaches me the importance of saving money. I enjoy Monopoly because I always have fun playing it and also helps me learn. I enjoy card games because some of my favorite games to play are Uno, Go Fish, and Old Maid. These games are very cheap and super easy to find in stores. Having cards handy makes it very easy to play whenever I want, wherever I want which why I enjoy these two types of games.

Edited by: Kelsey Eggsware