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              This is one accomplishment that Williams achieved. One of the accomplishment that Williams achieved is end childhood hunger. According to the text," Williams has set up 2 little food pantries and were cleaned each Friday." This shows one accomplishment that Williams has achieved.


This is one accomplishment that Williams achieved. One of the accomplishment that Williams achieved is end childhood hunger.

      • Edited for fluidity and accuracy: One accomplishment that Williams achieved is helping end child hunger.
      • Child hunger has not ended, so you can only write that he has HELPED end child hunger. Since the first sentence is repetitive, you can combine the two sentences. "Childhood" → "child."


According to the text," Williams has set up 2 little food pantries and were cleaned each Friday."

      • Edited for spacing: According to the text, "Williams has set up 2 little food pantries and were cleaned each Friday."
      • Add space between the comma and the quotation mark. Delete space between quotation mark and "Williams."


This shows one accomplishment that Williams has achieved.

      • Good.


Final Edited Version: One accomplishment that Williams achieved is helping end child hunger. According to the text, "Williams has set up 2 little food pantries and were cleaned each Friday." This shows one accomplishment that Williams has achieved.

      • Please work on punctuation (spacing), and try to write a few more sentences next time.