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If a person wanted to become an astronaut they would need to have a master's degree in STEM. They also would need work experience especially in flying jets. This year 12,000 people signed up to be an astronaut. 12 out of 12,000 people will be chosen to become an astronaut. The 12 people who have been chosen to become an astronaut will go through two years of training learning Russian to make it easier to work with the Russian astronauts ISS. (International Space Station)


If a person wanted to become an astronaut they would need to have a master's degree in STEM.

      • Edited for grammar (comma): If a person wanted to become an astronaut, they would need to have a master's degree in STEM.
      • Comma before "they." Otherwise, good sentence!


They also would need work experience especially in flying jets.

      • Edited for grammar (comma) and fluidity: They would also need work experience, especially in flying jets.
      • "Also" shouldn't go before "would." You can write "they also need work experience," but if you add "would," then "also" goes after it. Comma before "especially."


12 out of 12,000 people will be chosen to become an astronaut.

      • Good!


The 12 people who have been chosen to become an astronaut will go through two years of training learning Russian to make it easier to work with the Russian astronauts ISS. (International Space Station)

      • Edited for fluidity and punctuation (period) and tense: The 12 people who are chosen to become an astronaut will go through two years of training and learn Russian to make it easier to work with the Russian International Space Station (ISS).
      • "have been" → "are" (this sentence is in a future tense, don't use past tense). Add "and" in between "training" and "learning" since this is a run-on sentence. You should always spell out the acronym first and then put the abbreviation in parentheses. Period goes after the parentheses.


Final Edited Version: If a person wanted to become an astronaut, they would need to have a master's degree in STEM. They would also need work experience, especially in flying jets. 12 out of 12,000 people will be chosen to become an astronaut. The 12 people who are chosen to become an astronaut will go through two years of training and learn Russian to make it easier to work with the Russian International Space Station (ISS).

      • Good job on including detailed information! Please work on your commas and avoid run-on sentences.

Edited by Ashley Leung