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       There are two reasons of why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland. One reason from the text is “ They come out at night for feeding.” This means that they only come at night to feed their kids or themselves. Another reason from the text is “ Too shallow, they dry out; too deep, and the sun won’t get to the egg masses. This shows that maybe Maybe is perfect for the Tiger Salamanders. In conclusion, these are two reasons of why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland.

Edits:

      • There are two reasons of why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland.


Edited for grammar: There are two reasons why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland.
Great first sentence! Take out the 'of' after reasons.

      • One reason from the text is “ They come out at night for feeding.” This means that they only come at night to feed their kids or themselves.


Edited for fluidity: One reason that is discussed from the text is that they come out at night to feed themselves and their kids.
Combine these two sentences to clarify why they come out at night. No need to quotations because you already clarified that it was from the text.

      • Another reason from the text is “ Too shallow, they dry out; too deep, and the sun won’t get to the egg masses.


Edited for clarity: The second reason that comes from the text is that if they are too shallow, they dry out and if they're too deep, the sun won't get to the egg masses.
No need for quotations. Instead of 'another reason' say the 'second reason'

      • This shows that maybe Maybe is perfect for the Tiger Salamanders. In conclusion, these are two reasons of why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland.


Edited for fluidity: In conclusion, these two reasons are great examples of why Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland.
Combined the last two sentences. Take out the two maybe's. Instead of saying 'this shows' say 'these two reasons'

Final Edit:

There are two reasons why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland. One reason that is discussed in the text is that they come out at night to feed themselves and their kids. The second reason that comes from the text is that if they are too shallow, they dry out and if they're too deep, the sun won't get to the egg masses. In conclusion, these two reasons are great examples of why Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland. 










Super moons are different from regular moons that we see. To begin with, the super moon is bigger and brighter than a average full moon. The text states “ Supermoons, which are usually about seven percent bigger and fifteen percent brighter than a average full moon.” This means that super moons can be bigger and brighter than a average full moon. Furthermore, some people think that super moons can cause natural disasters. According to the text it states “ Though some people believe that a super moons proximity results in earthquakes and tidal waves. This shows that super moons can cause natural disaster. In conclusion, this is how super moons are different from regular moons we see.
         









         There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. To begin with, one negative reason is that standing six feet apart can still spread the virus. The text states “ Even standing six feet apart from one and another, people can spread the virus though droplets from coughs and sneezes.” This means that standing six feet apart can still spread the virus. To add on, one positive reason is that social distancing can reduce the chances of getting the virus. According to the text it states “ social distancing limits the chances of that.” This shows that social distancing can help pervert the virus. In conclusion, this is the negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing.








        JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children while being in lockdown.To begin with, this will be leading to a surge of internet use and increase interest of online tools.The text states” Leading to a surge in internet use and increase interest of online tools.” This means that JK Rowling can increase more numbers of internet use and online tools.To add on, JK Rowling can help keep children amused and interested while being in lockdown.According to the text it states” parents, teachers, and cares, working to keep children amused and interested while we’re on lockdown might need a little magic.”This shows that JK Rowling can keep children busy while being in lockdown.In conclusion, this is how JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children while being in lockdown.

Edits:

      • JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children while being in lockdown.


Edited for punctuation and word choice: J.K. Rowling built a webpage that helps students keep busy during this lockdown.


J.K. needs to be separated with one period after the J and one after the K. Use the word 'believe' instead of thinks. Don’t use the word ‘think.’ Begin with,

      • To begin with, this will be leading to a surge of internet use and increase interest of online tools.


Edited for fluidity: To begin with, this will lead to a surge of internet use and increase interest of online tools.


Great second sentence. Add a space after the period of the first sentence. Instead of 'will be leading to' change it to 'will lead to.' Take out the word ‘with’ after begin.

      • The text states” Leading to a surge in internet use and increase interest of online tools.” This means that JK Rowling can increase more numbers of internet use and online tools.


Edited for fluidity and clarity: “Leading to a surge in internet use and increase interest of online tools.” This statement discusses that J.K. Rowling can increase more numbers of internet use and online tools.



Great quote from the article! Use the quotations facing the first word, ‘Leading.’

      • This means that JK Rowling can increase more numbers of internet use and online tools.

Edited for fluidity: No need to keep this sentence in because it is already stated for the sentence before.

      • To add on, JK Rowling can help keep children amused and interested while being in lockdown.


Great transition statement. No need to edit this sentence.

      • According to the text it states” parents, teachers, and cares, working to keep children amused and interested while we’re on lockdown might need a little magic.”


This is a great quote but I think it doesn’t need to be in this paragraph since you already have a great one at the beginning of this paragraph.

      • This shows that JK Rowling can keep children busy while being in lockdown.In conclusion, this is how JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children while being in lockdown.


Edited for fluidity: In conclusion, I believe J.K. Rowling’s new webpage is a great way for students to keep busy during this lockdown.


Take out the first sentence and begin with the conclusion sentence. Instead of saying, ‘this is how J.K. Rowling thinks, say ‘this is how I think.’ It gives the audience your opinion which means more.


Final edit: J.K. Rowling built a webpage that helps students keep busy during this lockdown. To begin, this will lead to a surge of internet use and increase interest of online tools. “Leading to a surge in internet use and increase interest of online tools.” This statement discusses that J.K. Rowling can increase more numbers of internet use and online tools. To add on, JK Rowling can help keep children amused and interested while being in lockdown. In conclusion, I believe J.K. Rowling’s new webpage is a great way for students to keep busy during this lockdown. 









      Postponing the 2020 Olympics are causing two negative situations.To begin with, all 11,000 athletes have been training all these years and now all the training is becoming useless.The text states “For federations and leagues that must now adapt their schedules, and for the 11,000 athletes who had spent years training this summer.This means that all their training was useless.To add on, people have been getting headaches and heartaches because of this situation.According to the text it states “It also figures to cause headaches and heartaches across the international sports community.”This shows that people are getting sick because of this situation.In conclusion, these are the two ways that cause negative situations by postponing the 2020 Olympics.
    












     There are two activities that are the most fun to do.To begin with, indoor basketball is a great way to have fun and while getting exercise.The text states”An over-the-door basketball hoop and miniature ball is a great way for kids to get some exercise while stuck indoors.”This means that this is a great way to have fun while exercising.To add on,I think marble runs is best for kids.According to the text it states “constructing a marble run is a great way for kids to build their motor skills.”This shows that marble run is best for kids.In conclusion, these are two activities to do indoors.
    








    There are many ways for students to learn best while studying online.To begin with, you will collect more information, finish more tasks, and will have greater productivity.In the text it states “you’ll absorb more information and complete assignments with greater productivity.”This means that kids will collect more and more information and be very productive.To add on, it makes kids off the bed or sofa.According to the text it states “it separates from you from your bed or sofa.”This shows that online class can distract you from being lazy.In conclusion, these are some ways for students to learn best while studying online.






     There are many ways to prevent from the infection.One way is by washing your hands for 20 seconds about the length of the ABC song.Based on the text it states “Students and Staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds-about the length of the”alphabet  song”.This means that if you wash your hands for 20 seconds it will take all your germs away from your hands.Another way is by to cover your mouth while coughing or sneezing.According to the text it states”Coughing or sneezing into a tissue or the crook of an elbow can help reduce the spread of airborne virus drops lets.This shows that when you cover your mouth less germs spread through the air.The last way is by touching your face less often than usual.In the text it states”As much as possible,adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces “.To clarify,this shows that if you touch your face less often it will stop letting germs in your body.In conclusion,these are some ways to pervert the infection.

Comments: There are many ways to prevent from the infection.

      • edited for fluidity- There are many ways to prevent becoming infected by the COVID_19 virus.

One way is by washing your hands for 20 seconds about the length of the ABC song.Based on the text it states “Students and Staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds-about the length of the”alphabet song”.

      • edited for fluidity- Washing your hands for 20 seconds is one way to avoid infection. According to the text, "Students and Staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds-about the length of the ”alphabet song”.

This means that if you wash your hands for 20 seconds it will take all your germs away from your hands.

      • edited for fluidity and clarity- This means that taking more time to wash your hands will ensure that you are washing away all germs.

Another way is by to cover your mouth while coughing or sneezing.According to the text it states”Coughing or sneezing into a tissue or the crook of an elbow can help reduce the spread of airborne virus drops lets.

      • edited for fluidity- Another way to prevent spread of infection is to cover your mouth while coughing or sneezing. The text states ”Coughing or sneezing into a tissue or the crook of an elbow can help reduce the spread of airborne virus droplets."

This shows that when you cover your mouth less germs spread through the air.

The last way is by touching your face less often than usual.

      • edited for fluidity- The final solution offered is to avoid touching your face.

In the text it states”As much as possible,adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces “.To clarify,this shows that if you touch your face less often it will stop letting germs in your body.

      • edited for fluidity- In the text it states, ”As much as possible, adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces “. Basically, if you avoid touch your face, you can help to prevent germs from entering your body."

In conclusion, these are some ways to pervert the infection.

      • edited for spelling and fluidity- In conclusion, these are a few of the ways that you can avoid getting infected by the COVID_19 virus.

Final copy:

There are many ways to prevent becoming infected by the COVID_19 virus. Washing your hands for 20 seconds is one way to avoid infection. According to the text, "Students and Staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds-about the length of the ”alphabet song”. This means that taking more time to wash your hands will ensure that you are washing away all germs. Another way to prevent spread of infection is to cover your mouth while coughing or sneezing. The text states ”Coughing or sneezing into a tissue or the crook of an elbow can help reduce the spread of airborne virus droplets."This shows that when you cover your mouth less germs spread through the air. The final solution offered is to avoid touching your face. In the text it states, ”As much as possible, adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces “. Basically, if you avoid touch your face, you can help to prevent germs from entering your body." In conclusion, these are a few of the ways that you can avoid getting infected by the COVID_19 virus.