Prda's Writing Page Eastern tiger salamander are preparing to move to Maryland. 

                                                 because they need a habitat like the wetland that are mostly in Maryland 
                                                also the Female salamanders need a pool with out fish. The text states that
                                                 Tiger salamanders can be picky about there pools the text also states 
                                                   that what stands out most to me is how  they swim through there delavier 
                                                  bay wet lands. This text states that salamanders are fast in water and picky 
                                               about there habitats that are wetland and pools.





I think Jk Rowing and her new website will help the kids while they are stuck home. One way i think it will help is the story will keep them busy, and the puzzles will entertain that watching tv.I know this because the text states that reading aloud to the stories to the kids could inspire them the text also states that the puzzles would intertain them", this means that Jk Rowing website is intreasting and intertaining .So this how i know Jk Rowing website will help kids when there stuck in there house.


Original Version: I think Jk Rowing and her new website will help the kids while they are stuck home. One way i think it will help is the story will keep them busy, and the puzzles will entertain that watching tv.I know this because the text states that reading aloud to the stories to the kids could inspire them the text also states that the puzzles would intertain them", this means that Jk Rowing website is intreasting and intertaining .So this how i know Jk Rowing website will help kids when there stuck in there house.

Corrections:

J.K Rowling Creates a Website for Kids Stuck at Home

      • You need a heading for your paragraph.


J.K. Rowling and her new website will help the kids while they are stuck home.

      • J.K. needs to be capitalized and spelt with two periods. I removed the “I” to make the sentence be written in the third person.


One way the website will help keep kids busy is the story it provides, as well as the puzzles that will entertain them instead of watching television.

      • I removed the personal pronouns so the sentence would be written in the third person. I also edited the sentence by rephrasing it and correcting the grammar. I also replaced “that” with “than” as than is used in comparative sentences.


Wizarding World states that reading aloud to the stories to the kids could inspire them the text also states that the puzzles would entertain them. This means that J.K. Rowling website is interesting and entertaining.

      • When you are paraphrasing a source, you need to credit it, but you don’t need quotation marks. I also changed the comma into a sentence, as without it the sentence is a run-on. I also corrected the spelling of the word “entertain.” J.K. Rowling needs to be capitalized and spelt with periods. The spelling of “interesting” and “entertaining” was spelt wrong as well, so I corrected those words. I also removed the extra space before the period.


This evidence proves how J.K. Rowling website will help kids when they're stuck in their house.

      • I changed the phrasing of the sentence to make it more formal. I also fixed the spelling of J.K. Rowling. Also, "there" needs to be changed to "they're" as it should be a contraction of they + are in this context. You used the wrong form of “there” when referring to the house. When you are using it to refer to a person, place, or thing, you use “their.”


Final Version: J.K Rowling Creates a Website for Kids Stuck at Home

J.K. Rowling and her new website will help the kids while they are stuck home. One way the website will help keep kids busy is the story it provides, as well as the puzzles that will entertain them instead of watching television. Wizarding World states that reading aloud to the stories to the kids could inspire them the text also states that the puzzles would entertain them. This means that J.K. Rowling website is interesting and entertaining. This evidence proves how J.K. Rowling website will help kids when they're stuck in their house.

Great work! Remember to proofread your writing for spelling mistakes.

Edited by Hayley Taylor


There are many ways students can learn in online class. like there fingers could be used to typing on there key board and help students that dont know how to type improve them on a higher level then they are.I know this because in the text it says that distractions will not be in the way of ther learing this piece of text means they wont be distracted by there classmates. This is asking me why and how online class is use full it keeps the didtractions out of the students way. Also in the text it says the students will not forget there schuelds.This means students will not be distracted or they wont forget the shuelds .the right place for students to learn.


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