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                   JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children. She thinks this could work because she will let teachers post videos of themselves reading aloud from the book of there students. According to the textJK Rowling also posted a website for fans, young and old so they can read it too. This shows how JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children.


JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children. She thinks this could work because she will let teachers post videos of themselves reading aloud from the book of there students.

      • Edited for spelling, fluidity: J.K. Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children as she will allow teachers to post videos of themselves reading the Harry Potter books aloud to their students.
      • Make sure that you write sentences in your own words (this looks very similar to another student's answer-- is it directly from the article?). "J.K. Rowling" is the correct way to spell her name (with periods). You can combine these sentences. "There" should be "their" (possessive).


According to the textJK Rowling also posted a website for fans, young and old so they can read it too.

      • Edited for punctuation (quotation mark): According to the text, "J.K. Rowling also posted a website for fans, young and old, so they can read it too."
      • There should be a comma before the quote (and add space too). Don't forget the quotation mark at the end as well.


This shows how JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children.

      • Edited for spelling: This shows how J.K. Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children.
      • "JK" → "J.K."


Final Edited Version:

J.K. Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children as she will allow teachers to post videos of themselves reading the Harry Potter books aloud to their students. According to the text, "J.K. Rowling also posted a website for fans, young and old, so they can read it too." This shows how J.K. Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children.

      • Please focus on quotation marks (punctuation). Please also write a few more sentences in the future. You can expand a bit more on why this webpage is helpful during this time.

Edited by Ashley Leung