Bubba Smith was a football star and famous actor that had died in 2011 because of repeated head trauma. Not only that, he also had C.T.E. C.T.E(chronic traumatic encephalopathy) is a disease of the brain with constant brain trauma. For example, you can get repetitive concussions from this. Smith is one of the many N.F.L players who has/had C.T.E. C.T.E is still a disease that has some unknown details scientists can't figure out yet. Bubba Smith’s concussions were grave enough to kill him. Football is a very dangerous sport
***Be sure to add a catchy title! Something like: The Concussions of Late Football Star Bubba Smith
Bubba Smith was a football star and famous actor that had died in 2011 because of repeated head trauma.
***Good start. I would add commas here and take out "was" and "that" in order to make this sound like less of a run-on sentence. I also changed "because of" to "due to" because it sounds a bit more sophisticated, and added the bit about health complications since you go into a bit of detail about C.T.E. in the following sentences; Bubba Smith, a football star and famous actor, died in 2001 due to repeated head trauma and other health complications.
Not only that, he also had C.T.E. C.T.E(chronic traumatic encephalopathy) is a disease of the brain with constant brain trauma.
***Let's combine this sentence with the following one so that the structure follows GTK's sentence format. I also reworded the now-combined sentence for fluidity; In addition to head trauma, Smith also suffered from C.T.E., chronic traumatic encephalopathy, a brain disease that can cause repetitive concussions.
For example, you can get repetitive concussions from this.
***You can take this sentence out since we've combined it with the previous one.
Smith is one of the many N.F.L players who has/had C.T.E.
***I would add the word "just" before "one" in order to emphasize that many NFL players suffer from this condition. We can also change "has/had" to "suffer from" to sound more technical. I am also changing "is" to "was," since he has passed. You can also take the periods out of NFL; Smith is just one of the many NFL players who suffer from C.T.E.
C.T.E is still a disease that has some unknown details scientists can't figure out yet.
***Reworded for fluidity...Also, saying the scientists "still have much research to conduct sounds a bit more promising than "they can't figure it out." Nice work incorporating this important fact; We have very few details about C.T.E. as scientists still have much research to conduct on it.
Bubba Smith’s concussions were grave enough to kill him.
***This is a good spot to include a transition so that the last sentence flows more smoothly into this one; We do know, however, that Bubba Smith’s concussions were grave enough to kill him.
Football is a very dangerous sport
***As a conclusive sentence, it should sum up the major points you touched on in the article. This is a great start, but we can still add on it a bit more; Football is a very dangerous sport, especially when combined with preexisting conditions such as C.T.E.
***Great job overall paying attention to grammar and spelling. Keep it up!
The Concussions of Late Football Star Bubba Smith
Bubba Smith, a football star and famous actor, died in 2001 due to repeated head trauma and other health complications. In addition to head trauma, Smith also suffered from C.T.E., chronic traumatic encephalopathy, a brain disease that can cause repetitive concussions. Smith was just one of the many NFL players who have suffered from C.T.E. We have very few details about C.T.E. as scientists still have much research to conduct on it. We do know, however, that Bubba Smith’s concussions were grave enough to kill him. Football is a very dangerous sport, especially when combined with preexisting conditions such as C.T.E.
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Successful inventor, Nikola Tesla had a very interesting life. From being dirt poor, to becoming one of the richest men in his time, he showed a great change. With the help of his inventions, Tesla thrived with famous people like Thomas Edison to help him with his projects. Tesla experienced some hardships in his life though like when his laboratory burned down along with his notes. Despite the obstacle, Nikola Tesla rose and didn't give up. His major invention was the tesla car company. 1/31/20 https://www.smithsonianmag.com/innovation/extraordinary-life-nikola-tesla-180967758/
