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What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together. | What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together. | ||
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| + | What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. | ||
| + | ***Edited for punctuation: What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said “Teddy is right: there's something in the child” is that Nat, "the child," is really talented at playing the violin. | ||
| + | ***Since your sentence does not end with the quote, don't put the period. You can directly remove the comma and period around the quote. Add commas around "the child." | ||
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| + | <br>I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. | ||
| + | ***Edited for punctuation and fludiity: I say this because when Nat played the violin, everybody in the room stopped talking to listen to Nat play. | ||
| + | ***Add a comma after "violin." Condense some repetitive parts. | ||
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| + | <br>Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together. | ||
| + | ***Edited for fluidity: After Nat played for a while, the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together. | ||
| + | ***Replace "a little violin" ith "for a while" (since you're talking about time). Remove "Then." | ||
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| + | What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said “Teddy is right: there's something in the child” is that Nat, "the child," is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin, everybody in the room stopped talking to listen to Nat play. After Nat played for a while, the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together. | ||
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| + | ***Overall, good job! Please focus on your punctuation (comma/periods). | ||
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What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin.
- Edited for punctuation: What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said “Teddy is right: there's something in the child” is that Nat, "the child," is really talented at playing the violin.
- Since your sentence does not end with the quote, don't put the period. You can directly remove the comma and period around the quote. Add commas around "the child."
I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin.
- Edited for punctuation and fludiity: I say this because when Nat played the violin, everybody in the room stopped talking to listen to Nat play.
- Add a comma after "violin." Condense some repetitive parts.
Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
- Edited for fluidity: After Nat played for a while, the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
- Replace "a little violin" ith "for a while" (since you're talking about time). Remove "Then."
Final Edited Version:
What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said “Teddy is right: there's something in the child” is that Nat, "the child," is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin, everybody in the room stopped talking to listen to Nat play. After Nat played for a while, the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
- Overall, good job! Please focus on your punctuation (comma/periods).
Edited by Ashley Leung
