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  How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.
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  What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.”  is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin.  I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin.  Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
  
 
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How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.
 
***Edited for preposition and fluidity:  The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in a state of poverty.
 
***Don't need to "how" (just directly say the peddler got revenge by...). Replace "at the" with "in a" (usually it's "in a state").
 
 
 
 
 
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The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in a state of poverty.
 
 
 
 
 
***Please work on your preposition, and try to write a bit more next time!
 
 
 
Edited by Ashley Leung
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
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Revision as of 01:23, 28 May 2020

Meku's Writing Page

What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.”  is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin.  I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin.  Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.