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How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.
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***Edited for preposition and fluidity:  The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in the state of poverty.
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***Don't need to "how" (just directly say the peddler got revenge by...). Replace "at" with "in" (usually it's "in the state").
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'''Final Edited Version:
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The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in the state of poverty.
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***Please work on your preposition, and try to write a bit more next time!
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Edited by Ashley Leung

Revision as of 20:43, 23 May 2020

Meku's Writing Page 

How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.



How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.
      • Edited for preposition and fluidity: The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in the state of poverty.
      • Don't need to "how" (just directly say the peddler got revenge by...). Replace "at" with "in" (usually it's "in the state").


Final Edited Version: The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in the state of poverty.


      • Please work on your preposition, and try to write a bit more next time!

Edited by Ashley Leung