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| − | The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe. According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe.
| + | Based on the story, the story of the world of the human beings up above gave the youngest princess the most pleasure of all things. According to the text," nothing gave her greater pleasure than to hear about the wold of human beings up above the, little princess said." In addition," she made her old grandmother tell her all that she knew about ships and towns, people and animals." This shows what gave the youngest princess the most pleasure of all things. |
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| − | The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity: The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and safe.
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| − | ***No need for the second "stay."
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| − | <br>According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature."
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| − | ***Edited for capitalization and spacing: According to the text, "The engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature."
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| − | ***Space after the comma, no space after the first quotation mark. Capitalize the first word of the quote.
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| − | <br>This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe.
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| − | ***Good!
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| − | The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and safe. According to the text, "The engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe.
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| − | ***Overall, good! Please work on your quotation spacing and capitalization.
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Revision as of 20:35, 29 April 2020
Pala's Writing Page
Based on the story, the story of the world of the human beings up above gave the youngest princess the most pleasure of all things. According to the text," nothing gave her greater pleasure than to hear about the wold of human beings up above the, little princess said." In addition," she made her old grandmother tell her all that she knew about ships and towns, people and animals." This shows what gave the youngest princess the most pleasure of all things.
