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The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe. According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe. | The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe. According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe. | ||
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| + | The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe. | ||
| + | ***Edited for fluidity: The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and safe. | ||
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| + | <br>According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." | ||
| + | ***Edited for capitalization and spacing: According to the text, "The engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." | ||
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| + | <br>This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe. | ||
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| + | The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and safe. According to the text, "The engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe. | ||
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Revision as of 09:07, 29 April 2020
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The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe. According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe.
The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and stay safe.
- Edited for fluidity: The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and safe.
- No need for the second "stay."
According to the text," the engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature."
- Edited for capitalization and spacing: According to the text, "The engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature."
- Space after the comma, no space after the first quotation mark. Capitalize the first word of the quote.
This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe.
- Good!
Final Edited Version:
The Boston Dynamics' robots are assisting during the COVID-19 by helping doctors, nurses, and patients stay alive and safe. According to the text, "The engineers are working on teaching the robots to perform tasks like checking temperature." This shows how the Boston Dynamics' robots are helping people stay safe.
- Overall, good! Please work on your quotation spacing and capitalization.
Edited by Ashley Leung
