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The princesses were different form each other. The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid. | The princesses were different form each other. The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid. | ||
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| + | The princesses were different form each other. | ||
| + | ***Edited for spelling: The princesses were different from each other. | ||
| + | ***Misspelled "from." | ||
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| + | <br> The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. | ||
| + | ***Edited for grammar (singular/plural, run-on sentence): The youngest princess loves the sun and has a garden that looks like the sun while the other princesses decorated their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. | ||
| + | ***The youngest princess is singular. To avoid having a run-on sentence, take out the "she" in "she has a garden." No need for the "and" before "while." | ||
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| + | <br>Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid. | ||
| + | ***Good! | ||
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| + | The princesses were different from each other. The youngest princess loves the sun and has a garden that looks like the sun while the other princesses decorated their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid. | ||
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| + | ***Overall, good! Please focus on your singular/plurals and avoid creating run-on sentences. | ||
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| + | Edited by Ashley Leung | ||
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The princesses were different form each other. The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid.
The princesses were different form each other.
- Edited for spelling: The princesses were different from each other.
- Misspelled "from."
The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks.
- Edited for grammar (singular/plural, run-on sentence): The youngest princess loves the sun and has a garden that looks like the sun while the other princesses decorated their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks.
- The youngest princess is singular. To avoid having a run-on sentence, take out the "she" in "she has a garden." No need for the "and" before "while."
Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid.
- Good!
Final Edited Version:
The princesses were different from each other. The youngest princess loves the sun and has a garden that looks like the sun while the other princesses decorated their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid.
- Overall, good! Please focus on your singular/plurals and avoid creating run-on sentences.
Edited by Ashley Leung
