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| − | The positive reason for social distancing is so the virus that is called COVID-19 does not spread and infect other people.
| + | Supermoons are different from the regular moons because it is 7% bigger and 15% brighter. |
| − | The negative reason for social distancing is the fact that we are not allowed to go out and some businesses have to close down and their employees lose their jobs and have no money to bye food and children do not get exorcise and become obese.
| + | This is because the orbit of the moon is the shape of an oval. When the moon is farthest away from the Earth it is approximately 253,000 miles away from Earth. Also When the moon is closest to the Earth it is usually 226,000 miles close to the Earth. |
| − | | + | The reason for supermoons is because of lunar perigee, the moon's closest point in its orbit around the Earth. |
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| − | The positive reason for social distancing is so the virus that is called COVID-19 does not spread and infect other people.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity and clarity: A positive reason for social distancing is that it prevents the virus COVID-19 from spreading and infecting more people.
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| − | ***"So the virus that is called" is a bit too wordy, so you can just say "the virus COVID-19." Since social distancing is a prevention act, it would be better to include the word "prevent" in the sentence. Since there might be other positive reasons, you can use "a positive reason" rather than "the positive reason."
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| − | <br>The negative reason for social distancing is the fact that we are not allowed to go out and some businesses have to close down and their employees lose their jobs and have no money to bye food and children do not get exorcise and become obese.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity, clarity, grammar (commas) and spelling: Negative effects of social distancing are that we are not allowed to go out, some business have to close down, employees lose their jobs and have no money to buy food, and children do not exercise enough.
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| − | ***I believe you're talking about the "effects" of social distancing here. Since you listed multiple examples, this is no longer just "the" negative effect-- you would start the sentences with plural "negative effects." The examples you've given are good, but you must use commas to separate them so that it doesn't become a run-on sentence. "Bye" → "buy." "Exorcise" → "exercise." You can delete the "become obese" part because that is a bit extreme (just saying they lack exercise is fine).
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| − | A positive reason for social distancing is that it prevents the virus COVID-19 from spreading and infecting more people. Negative effects of social distancing are that we are not allowed to go out, some business have to close down, employees lose their jobs and have no money to buy food, and children do not exercise enough.
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| − | ***Overall, good examples. However, I would like you to write at least 6-7 sentences next time. Work on your commas and spelling. Make sure you know the difference between "reason" and "effect."
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| − | Edited by Ashley Leung
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Supermoons are different from the regular moons because it is 7% bigger and 15% brighter.
This is because the orbit of the moon is the shape of an oval. When the moon is farthest away from the Earth it is approximately 253,000 miles away from Earth. Also When the moon is closest to the Earth it is usually 226,000 miles close to the Earth.
The reason for supermoons is because of lunar perigee, the moon's closest point in its orbit around the Earth.
