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There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good reason why you should practice social distancing is so you can limit the spread of COVID-19. A bad reason why you shouldn't practice social distancing is because even being 6 feet away can also spread germs. According to the text it states, "To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing.'' In the text it also states,"Even standing 6 feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes.'' I chose these quotes because they represent my answer. In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing but these are my negative and positive reasons. | There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good reason why you should practice social distancing is so you can limit the spread of COVID-19. A bad reason why you shouldn't practice social distancing is because even being 6 feet away can also spread germs. According to the text it states, "To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing.'' In the text it also states,"Even standing 6 feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes.'' I chose these quotes because they represent my answer. In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing but these are my negative and positive reasons. | ||
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| + | There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good reason why you should practice social distancing is so you can limit the spread of COVID-19. A bad reason why you shouldn't practice social distancing is because even being 6 feet away can also spread germs. According to the text it states, "To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing. In the text it also states,"Even standing 6 feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes. I chose these quotes because they represent my answer. In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing but these are my negative and positive reasons. | ||
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| + | Positives and Negatives of Social Distancing | ||
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| + | There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. | ||
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| + | ***Good! | ||
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| + | One good result of practicing social distancing is that it limits the spread of COVID-19. | ||
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| + | ***The “limiting the spread of COVID-19” is a result, not a reason, so I changed the word choice. | ||
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| + | A bad result of practicing social distancing is that even being six feet away can also spread germs. | ||
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| + | ***I deleted the phrase “why you shouldn’t” as you are talking about the negative aspects of social distancing instead of convincing them not to do it. When writing, you should use the written form of numerals, so I changed it to “six.” | ||
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| + | TIME writer, Josiah Bates, states, “To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing.” | ||
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| + | ***When quoting someone, add their name before introducing the quotation. You also forgot to add a quotation mark at the end of the quote after the period, so I added one. | ||
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| + | Josiah Bates also states, “Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes.” | ||
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| + | ***You need to add the writer of the quotation, as well as add quotation marks around the quote. | ||
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| + | In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing | ||
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| + | ***I deleted the first sentence and the end of the second as it was in the third person. When writing a response, make sure not to write personal pronouns. | ||
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| + | There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good result of practicing social distancing is that it limits the spread of COVID-19. A bad result of practicing social distancing is that even being six feet away can also spread germs. TIME writer, Josiah Bates, states, “To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing.” Josiah Bates also states, “Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes.” In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing | ||
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| + | Great work! Make sure to write in the third person, and proofread your sentences to make sure the phrasing sounds good. | ||
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| + | Edited by Hayley Taylor | ||
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J.K Rowling thinks it will help children explore the Wizarding Word while they're at home listening to the audio book of Harry Potter. She thinks it will help them understand what the book is about. She also thinks it will help kids have something to do. For example, kids can read the audio book then, answer questions. According to the text it states,'' Parents, Teachers and, Carers working to keep children amused and interested while we're on lockdown might need a bit of magic,'' Rowling said as she announced the launch. Also in the text it states,'' Harry Potter at Home brings together a number of resources related to the international franchise, including free access to the audiobook version of the first installment of the series.'' | J.K Rowling thinks it will help children explore the Wizarding Word while they're at home listening to the audio book of Harry Potter. She thinks it will help them understand what the book is about. She also thinks it will help kids have something to do. For example, kids can read the audio book then, answer questions. According to the text it states,'' Parents, Teachers and, Carers working to keep children amused and interested while we're on lockdown might need a bit of magic,'' Rowling said as she announced the launch. Also in the text it states,'' Harry Potter at Home brings together a number of resources related to the international franchise, including free access to the audiobook version of the first installment of the series.'' | ||
There are two ways of how postponing the 2020 Olympics are causing negative situations. One way is that it causes headaches and heartaches for people postponing the Olympics. According to the text it states,''It also figures to cause headaches and heartaches across the international sports community for federations and leagues that must now adapt their schedules, and for the 11,000 athletes who had spent years training to compete this summer.'' Another way is that almost everyone is getting intensifying pressure. Also in the text it states,'' Japanese prime minister Shinzo Abe and IOC president Thomas Bach formally agreed to the decision Tuesday, amid intensifying pressure and public pleas for clarity from athletes and governing bodies.'' This proves that it also got public pleas from athletes and other governing bodies. In short, these are the two ways postponing the 2020 Olympics is causing negative situations. | There are two ways of how postponing the 2020 Olympics are causing negative situations. One way is that it causes headaches and heartaches for people postponing the Olympics. According to the text it states,''It also figures to cause headaches and heartaches across the international sports community for federations and leagues that must now adapt their schedules, and for the 11,000 athletes who had spent years training to compete this summer.'' Another way is that almost everyone is getting intensifying pressure. Also in the text it states,'' Japanese prime minister Shinzo Abe and IOC president Thomas Bach formally agreed to the decision Tuesday, amid intensifying pressure and public pleas for clarity from athletes and governing bodies.'' This proves that it also got public pleas from athletes and other governing bodies. In short, these are the two ways postponing the 2020 Olympics is causing negative situations. | ||
Revision as of 19:00, 7 April 2020
Tenzin Gelek's Writing Page:
There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good reason why you should practice social distancing is so you can limit the spread of COVID-19. A bad reason why you shouldn't practice social distancing is because even being 6 feet away can also spread germs. According to the text it states, "To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing. In the text it also states,"Even standing 6 feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes. I chose these quotes because they represent my answer. In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing but these are my negative and positive reasons.
Original Version: There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good reason why you should practice social distancing is so you can limit the spread of COVID-19. A bad reason why you shouldn't practice social distancing is because even being 6 feet away can also spread germs. According to the text it states, "To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing. In the text it also states,"Even standing 6 feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes. I chose these quotes because they represent my answer. In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing but these are my negative and positive reasons.
Corrections:
Positives and Negatives of Social Distancing
- You need a heading.
There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing.
- Good!
One good result of practicing social distancing is that it limits the spread of COVID-19.
- The “limiting the spread of COVID-19” is a result, not a reason, so I changed the word choice.
A bad result of practicing social distancing is that even being six feet away can also spread germs.
- I deleted the phrase “why you shouldn’t” as you are talking about the negative aspects of social distancing instead of convincing them not to do it. When writing, you should use the written form of numerals, so I changed it to “six.”
TIME writer, Josiah Bates, states, “To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing.”
- When quoting someone, add their name before introducing the quotation. You also forgot to add a quotation mark at the end of the quote after the period, so I added one.
Josiah Bates also states, “Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes.”
- You need to add the writer of the quotation, as well as add quotation marks around the quote.
In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing
- I deleted the first sentence and the end of the second as it was in the third person. When writing a response, make sure not to write personal pronouns.
Final Version:
There are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing. One good result of practicing social distancing is that it limits the spread of COVID-19. A bad result of practicing social distancing is that even being six feet away can also spread germs. TIME writer, Josiah Bates, states, “To limit the spread of the coronavirus that causes COVID-19, health experts say people should practice social distancing.” Josiah Bates also states, “Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes.” In short, there are negative and positive reasons for practicing social distancing
Great work! Make sure to write in the third person, and proofread your sentences to make sure the phrasing sounds good.
Edited by Hayley Taylor
J.K Rowling thinks it will help children explore the Wizarding Word while they're at home listening to the audio book of Harry Potter. She thinks it will help them understand what the book is about. She also thinks it will help kids have something to do. For example, kids can read the audio book then, answer questions. According to the text it states, Parents, Teachers and, Carers working to keep children amused and interested while we're on lockdown might need a bit of magic, Rowling said as she announced the launch. Also in the text it states, Harry Potter at Home brings together a number of resources related to the international franchise, including free access to the audiobook version of the first installment of the series.
There are two ways of how postponing the 2020 Olympics are causing negative situations. One way is that it causes headaches and heartaches for people postponing the Olympics. According to the text it states,It also figures to cause headaches and heartaches across the international sports community for federations and leagues that must now adapt their schedules, and for the 11,000 athletes who had spent years training to compete this summer. Another way is that almost everyone is getting intensifying pressure. Also in the text it states, Japanese prime minister Shinzo Abe and IOC president Thomas Bach formally agreed to the decision Tuesday, amid intensifying pressure and public pleas for clarity from athletes and governing bodies. This proves that it also got public pleas from athletes and other governing bodies. In short, these are the two ways postponing the 2020 Olympics is causing negative situations.
