The World for Freedom

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    There are many ways students can learn best while studying online. To begin with, kids can move anything that distracts them and makes them unfocused and not stay anywhere near a bed or sofa. The text states "Remove any distractions from the space, and if possible, make it seperate from your bed or sofa." This means, if kids start doing this they can learn best online. To add on, instead of multi-tasking, kids can do task and jobs on at a time. The text states "You'll absorb more information and complete assignments with greater productivity and ease than if you were trying to do many things at once." To clarify, if kids started doing things one at a time, they can learn best online. In conclusion, there are many ways students can learn best while studying online.

Easy Steps to Avoiding COVID-19 - I went ahead and added a title for you since you didn't have one. In this case, a short and clear title works best.

We can do many things to prevent this infection. - This is a good sentence! However, without the title, the reader doesn't know what infection you're talking about. Add a short introduction to the sickness you're talking about first; COVID-19, a new respiratory virus that's spread across the world, is highly contagious; however, we can do many things to prevent infection.

To begin with, we can start washing our hands for 20sec long or at least how long the alphabet song is. - I edited this sentence to tie it back to the article by citing the CDC, World Health Organization, and AAP. I also edited this sentence so that the reference to the "Alphabet Song" was used only once; The CDC, World Heath Organization, AAP, and many others still champion hand-washing.

The text states "Students and staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20seconds- about the length of the "Alphabet song." - I edited this sentence to summarize the text in different words instead of directly quoting it; also note that "Song" should be capitalized because it's in a song title; It is suggested that both students and staff wash their hands with soap and water for roughly 20 seconds - about the length of the "Alphabet Song".

This means, If more people start washing their hands with soap for at least 20seconds, they will be able to prevent the infection (virus) - I took this sentence out because we could infer from the rest of your paragraph that washing our hands this way will help prevent spread of the virus.

To add on, We can start to cough and sneeze into a tissue or the antecubital space (elbow pit). In the text it states "Coughing or sneezing into a tissue or the crook of an elbow can help reduce the spread of airborne." - I edited and combined these two sentences to create a better flow; Another easy step is aiming our coughs or sneezes into a tissue or the pit of our elbows.

To clarify, If people start to cough and sneeze into a tissue or the crook of an elbow, they will be able to prevent this infection(virus). - Instead of having "to clarify", I edited this sentence so that the reader knows they're getting clarification without being told by explaining why coughing and sneezing into the elbow pit/tissue is beneficial and brought down your explanation from the previous sentence; This is an easy and effective way to reduce the spread of airborne virus droplets.

- Then, I added one more sentence to elaborate on what to do after using a tissue; After a tissue is used, however, the CDC urges that the students immediately dispose of the tissue in a line trash bag, rather than place it in a pocket or a desk for later, and disinfect their hands.

In conclusion, we can do many things to prevent this infection. - I edited this sentence just to make it a little bit longer and add a better sense of closure; Though this virus is highly contagious, there are still many things that we can do to keep ourselves and the people around us healthy and safe.

- Don't forget to add your source!

Easy Steps to Avoiding COVID-19

COVID-19, a new respiratory virus that's spread across the world, is highly contagious; however, we can do many things to prevent infection. The CDC, World Health Organization, AAP, and many others still champion hand-washing. It is suggested that both students and staff wash their hands with soap and water for roughly 20 seconds - about the length of the "Alphabet Song". Another easy step is aiming our coughs or sneezes into a tissue or the pit of our elbows. This is an easy and effective way to reduce the spread of airborne virus droplets. After a tissue is used, however, the CDC urges that the students immediately dispose of the tissue in a lined trash bag, rather than place it in a pocket or a desk for later, and disinfect their hands. Though this virus is highly contagious, there are still many things that we can do to keep ourselves and the people around us healthy and safe.

- Overall, great start here! Just watch your repetition of details, fluidity, and grammar, and don't be afraid to elaborate! Edited by Lainey Morris