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“Women Today”
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In the past women were seen as housewives and inferior compared to men. However, now today in society women does about the same job as men do. Today women do both housewives and work as some living in a less-developed countries work as farmers. The main problems is that even though women farmers are increasing most women can’t hold lands. This can cause many shortage of food. Women for a long time now been contributing more and more to the society. 
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https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/03/partner-content-empowering-female-farmers/
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“Lucky Charm”
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Back in the times some animals were worshiped as gods and other are seen as luck. As in Cambodia they see fish as wealthy and good luck. Also in asia and europe crickets are also considered as good luck or charm. Beetles seems dangerous but in Egypt they are the most important amulet. In addition to the crickets, cranes are also seen as good luck in both China and Japan. In every countries there are different types of charms and animals that are considered as luck.
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https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/lucky-animals-world-ireland-saint-patricks-day/
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“Destroyed City”
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In Ukraine many people were being killed, schools were destroyed and students and teachers stay home afraid. Schools are there to make the countries a better place but as students and teachers stay at home, the student are behind on their curriculums and it interfered with their school life. Now children who are age 6-7 are being trained in military training and learning to protect themselves. They are also being taught of the importance of defending your own land and country.
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https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/03/ukranian-children-train-for-violent-future/
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“Researchers Arrested”
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In January of 2018 Morad Tahbaz was arrested and eight other members were also arrested on the 24 and 25. But later on researcher Emami one of the arrested researchers committed suicide. Not long the government decided to give the rest of the prisoners a death penalties due to the Corruption on Earth. This created many fusses and many problems for the government.
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https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/iran-wildlife-conservationists-jailed/
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“How Diets Affect Us Verbally”
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Our diets might be one of the thing that can have an impact on how we speak. Long ago our ancestors are known for eating raw foods which mean the jaws used to strong and hard. But as time passed they learn how to make fire and learn how to cook the meats. Since then our ancestors have evolved from eating raw meats to tender and cooked meats. Which change our jaw compositions and how we sound.   
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https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/03/change-in-diet-may-have-changed-human-language-f-v-agriculture/
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"What A Refugee”
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Today no one know the difference between a immigrant and a refugee. A refugee is someone who escaped from their countries to escape danger or persecution. In 1915 it was agreed that a refugee is someone who is outside of his or her own country of nationality and have a great amount of fear of being persecuted because of their own race, religion, and their society and unwilling to return to their own country.
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https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/topics/reference/what-is-a-refugee/
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“Wart Pigs”
 
“Wart Pigs”
  

Revision as of 21:28, 15 March 2019

“Women Today”

In the past women were seen as housewives and inferior compared to men. However, now today in society women does about the same job as men do. Today women do both housewives and work as some living in a less-developed countries work as farmers. The main problems is that even though women farmers are increasing most women can’t hold lands. This can cause many shortage of food. Women for a long time now been contributing more and more to the society. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/03/partner-content-empowering-female-farmers/


“Lucky Charm”

Back in the times some animals were worshiped as gods and other are seen as luck. As in Cambodia they see fish as wealthy and good luck. Also in asia and europe crickets are also considered as good luck or charm. Beetles seems dangerous but in Egypt they are the most important amulet. In addition to the crickets, cranes are also seen as good luck in both China and Japan. In every countries there are different types of charms and animals that are considered as luck. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/lucky-animals-world-ireland-saint-patricks-day/


“Destroyed City”

In Ukraine many people were being killed, schools were destroyed and students and teachers stay home afraid. Schools are there to make the countries a better place but as students and teachers stay at home, the student are behind on their curriculums and it interfered with their school life. Now children who are age 6-7 are being trained in military training and learning to protect themselves. They are also being taught of the importance of defending your own land and country. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2019/03/ukranian-children-train-for-violent-future/


“Researchers Arrested” In January of 2018 Morad Tahbaz was arrested and eight other members were also arrested on the 24 and 25. But later on researcher Emami one of the arrested researchers committed suicide. Not long the government decided to give the rest of the prisoners a death penalties due to the Corruption on Earth. This created many fusses and many problems for the government. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/iran-wildlife-conservationists-jailed/


“How Diets Affect Us Verbally” Our diets might be one of the thing that can have an impact on how we speak. Long ago our ancestors are known for eating raw foods which mean the jaws used to strong and hard. But as time passed they learn how to make fire and learn how to cook the meats. Since then our ancestors have evolved from eating raw meats to tender and cooked meats. Which change our jaw compositions and how we sound. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/03/change-in-diet-may-have-changed-human-language-f-v-agriculture/

"What A Refugee”

Today no one know the difference between a immigrant and a refugee. A refugee is someone who escaped from their countries to escape danger or persecution. In 1915 it was agreed that a refugee is someone who is outside of his or her own country of nationality and have a great amount of fear of being persecuted because of their own race, religion, and their society and unwilling to return to their own country. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/topics/reference/what-is-a-refugee/




“Wart Pigs”

When someone mention pigs you would usually think about the pink pig that are usually seen and shown in T.V. But there are many other species of pigs and one of them are the Wart. It is known to be found in the Philippines and Indonesia and tend to have a darker skin tone. THe male warts tend to have 3 bumps on their face which are not warts but cartilaginous protuberances. Now living in Florida they are known for being endangered species. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/wild-warty-national-pigs-day/



“Dog Mind”

It is said that dogs and their owners are tend to have some kind of connections whether they look alike or have similar traits. Now scientists are discovering that not only can they look alike but have similar personalities. It is studied that a highly agreeable person have a higher chance of having a dog that is energetic and playful. Now scientists began wondering how those ideas link together. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/dogs-and-owners-have-similar-personalities/



"Rarest Fish"

The world rarest fish the Devil Hole pupfish population dropped dramatically in 2017 when a scientist was studying. He discovered that the fish population dropped to only 35 fish left alive in 2013. That not only it to the surprising discovery there was a reason for it small population. Scientists found that a diving beetle was eating all the eggs and the larvae which lower many of the fish populations. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/03/endangered-devils-hole-pupfish-breeding-breakthrough/




"First Extinct Mammal"

Lately, climate change have been a challenge for our communities. As we debate and disagree many animals are losing their homes. This includes the Bramble Cay Melomys also known as mosaic-tailed mouse had been reported the first mammal extinct. It was last seen in 2009 by a fishermen and failed to catch it. By 2014 no one can spot the mouse anymore, it is known that they extinct due to the island lost of vegetation. If no action can be taken most mammal will soon be extinct.https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/06/first-mammal-extinct-climate-change-bramble-cay-melomys/


"T.rex Ancestors"

The Tyrannosaurus rex (T.rex) was not always big and mighty as one has seen. Their ancestor were much smaller and quicker on feet barely 5 feet tall and was known as the smallest dinosaurs. It is called the Moros Intrepidus it known to live in the Cretaceous period between 66 million to 145 million years ago. Moros are known for hunting along with larger meat hunter called Allosaurus. After the Allosaurus went extinct the Moros began to increase it size and adapted to it environment. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/new-tiny-t-rex-relative-moros-fills-north-american-fossil-gap/


"Eating To Death"

Our ancestors were known for killing many large animals for food such as: mammoths and mastodons and many more. We were the reason why they went extinct by the Pleistocene, nearly 12,000 years ago our ancestors has already killed all the living animals. To this day it haven’t change, we are still hunting large animals such as lions, tigers, and sharks. It this doesn’t stop the animals would mostly likely be extinct by our future generations. https://www.popsci.com/eating-large-animals-into-extinction

"Eating To Death"
Our ancestors were known for killing many large animals for food such as: mammoths and mastodons and many more.

      • I would suggest splitting this sentence into two. The first sentence of the article should grab the reader's attention without being too long.
      • A colon isn't necessary unless you are listing more than just two animals.
      • Correction: Our ancestors were known for killing many large animals for food. These animals included mammoths, mastodons, and many more.


We were the reason why they went extinct by the Pleistocene, nearly 12,000 years ago our ancestors has already killed all the living animals.

      • The comma here can be replaced with a semicolon. This is because it is two different sentences, but very closely related.
      • Clarify what you mean by "they" went extinct.
      • There should be a comma after "nearly 12,000 years ago."
      • "Has" should be past tense.
      • Include "of" between "all the."
      • Correction: We were the reason why these animals went extinct by the Pleistocene; nearly 12,000 years ago, our ancestors had already killed all of the living animals.


To this day it haven’t change, we are still hunting large animals such as lions, tigers, and sharks.

      • "Haven't" should be "hasn't."
      • "Change" should be "changed."
      • A semicolon is necessary here in place of the comma. Using the comma to separate two independent clauses is considered a comma splice. But, the two clauses are too closely related to reasonably separate the sentence into two different sentences.
      • Correction: To this day it hasn't changed; we are still hunting large animals such as lions, tigers, and sharks.


It this doesn’t stop the animals would mostly likely be extinct by our future generations.

      • Switch "it" for "if."
      • There should be a comma after "stop."
      • Since you are speaking for the future, replace "would" with "will."
      • "Mostly likely" can just be "most likely."
      • You can drop the word "our."
      • Correction: If this doesn't stop, the animals will most likely be extinct by future generations.


https://www.popsci.com/eating-large-animals-into-extinction

Eating To Death
Our ancestors were known for killing many large animals for food. These animals included mammoths, mastodons, and many more. We were the reason why these animals went extinct by the Pleistocene; nearly 12,000 years ago, our ancestors had already killed all of the living animals. To this day it hasn't changed; we are still hunting large animals such as lions, tigers, and sharks. If this doesn't stop, the animals will most likely be extinct by future generations.
https://www.popsci.com/eating-large-animals-into-extinction

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

"No More Insects"
Insects are seen as annoying and hateful little creatures yet they also support the balance of the ecosystem. Without them the ecosystem would drop dramatically. In recent years the populations of butterflies and bees have dropped more than 75%. As on way know bees and butterflies are the pollinators. This mean that without them plants and trees populations would also drop.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/02/why-insect-populations-are-plummeting-and-why-it-matters/

"No More Insects"
Insects are seen as annoying and hateful little creatures yet they also support the balance of the ecosystem.

      • I wouldn't use the word "hateful" to describe insects, so I'd drop this descriptive word. You can either drop this word or replace it with a word related to how people feel when they see insects.
      • There should be a comma before "yet."
      • Correction: Insects are seen as annoying little creatures, yet they also support the balance of the ecosystem.


Without them the ecosystem would drop dramatically.

      • There should be a comma after "without them."
      • Saying the ecosystem would "drop" doesn't seem to make sense. I would use a word like "suffer."
      • Correction: Without them, the ecosystem would suffer dramatically.


In recent years the populations of butterflies and bees have dropped more than 75%.

      • There should be a comma after "in recent years."
      • Correction: In recent years, the populations of butterflies and bees have dropped more than 75%.


As on way know bees and butterflies are the pollinators.

      • I'm not sure exactly what you mean by "as on way know."
      • Correction: Bees and butterflies are the pollinators of the ecosystem.


This mean that without them plants and trees populations would also drop.

      • Pluralize "mean."
      • There should be a comma after "without them."
      • "Tree" and "plant" can be singular.
      • Correction: This means that without them, plant and tree populations would also drop.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/02/why-insect-populations-are-plummeting-and-why-it-matters/

No More Insects
Insects are seen as annoying little creatures, yet they also support the balance of the ecosystem. Without them, the ecosystem would suffer dramatically. In recent years, the populations of butterflies and bees have dropped more than 75%. Bees and butterflies are the pollinators of the ecosystem. This means that without them, plant and tree populations would also drop.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/02/why-insect-populations-are-plummeting-and-why-it-matters/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


"Largest Shark Gone"
On December 23, 2007 paleontologist Robert Boessenecker found an large greenish shark tooth. Sooner he came to realized that this tooth belong to Megalodon one of the largest shark which extinct for about 3.6 million years ago. But what bothered Robert was how it became extinct and there is one theory of great white shark attacking the Megalodons. Due to their great strength and their sizes.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/megalodon-extinct-great-white-shark/

"Largest Shark Gone"
On December 23, 2007 paleontologist Robert Boessenecker found an large greenish shark tooth.

      • There needs to be a comma after the date.
      • "An" should be "a" because the next word begins with a consonant.
      • Correction: On December 23, 2007, paleontologist Robert Boessenecker found a large greenish shark tooth.


Sooner he came to realized that this tooth belong to Megalodon one of the largest shark which extinct for about 3.6 million years ago.

      • "Sooner" should be "soon."
      • "Realized" should be "realize."
      • "Belong" should be "belonged" because it used to belong to that shark.
      • There should be a comma after "Megalodon."
      • "Shark" should be plural.
      • Include "has been" between "which extinct."
      • Remove "ago" from the end.
      • Correction: Soon he came to realize that this tooth belonged to Megalodon, one of the largest sharks which has been extinct for about 3.6 million years.


But what bothered Robert was how it became extinct and there is one theory of great white shark attacking the Megalodons.

      • Avoid starting a sentence with "but." This can simply be dropped.
      • There should be a period after "extinct" and this can be split into two sentences.
      • Correction: What bothered Robert was how it became extinct.


there is one theory of great white shark attacking the Megalodons.

      • "Great white shark" should be plural.
      • This can actually be combined with the next sentence.


Due to their great strength and their sizes.

      • You can remove the second "their" because it is repetitive and unnecessary.
      • "Sizes" can be singular.
      • Correction: There is one theory of great white sharks attacking the Megalodons due to their great strength and size.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/megalodon-extinct-great-white-shark/

Largest Shark Gone
On December 23, 2007, paleontologist Robert Boessenecker found a large greenish shark tooth. Soon he came to realize that this tooth belonged to Megalodon, one of the largest sharks which has been extinct for about 3.6 million years. What bothered Robert was how it became extinct. There is one theory of great white sharks attacking the Megalodons due to their great strength and size.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/megalodon-extinct-great-white-shark/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


"Greener Future"
In the recent research many people wanted to reduce the limit human driven climate change and use more renewable sources like the wind and solar. Now this new proposal is called the “Green New Deal”. Which will limit human waste and will offer more work for the poor and communities. The debate is still going on for how to approach the plan and the agreement of the people.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/02/3-steps-green-new-deal-must-pass-to-work/

"Greener Future"
In the recent research many people wanted to reduce the limit human driven climate change and use more renewable sources like the wind and solar.

      • You can remove "the" from the beginning.
      • There should be a comma after "research."
      • Include "of" between "limit" and "human."
      • There should be a dash between "human driven."
      • You can remove "the" before "wind and solar."
      • Correction: In recent research, many people wanted to reduce the limit of human-driven climate change and use more renewables sources like wind and solar.


Now this new proposal is called the “Green New Deal”.

      • You can remove "now" from the beginning of the sentence.
      • The period should be before the quotation. The general rule is that punctuation always goes inside of quotations.
      • Correction: This new proposal is called the "Green New Deal."


Which will limit human waste and will offer more work for the poor and communities.

      • Replace "which" for "the proposal."
      • Replace "will" for "could."
      • You can remove the second "will" because it is unnecessary.
      • Correction: The proposal could limit human waste and offer more work for the poor and communities.


The debate is still going on for how to approach the plan and the agreement of the people.

      • "The agreement of the people" is a little unclear. Try "get everyone on board."
      • Correction: The debate is still going on for how to approach the plan and get everyone on board.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/02/3-steps-green-new-deal-must-pass-to-work/

Greener Future
In recent research, many people wanted to reduce the limit of human-driven climate change and use more renewable sources like wind and solar. This new proposal is called the "Green New Deal." The proposal could limit human waste and offer more work for the poor and communities. The debate is still going on for how to approach the plan and get everyone on board.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2019/02/3-steps-green-new-deal-must-pass-to-work/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Exotic Pets
Raising wild pets may sound fun and exciting at first but it can be a difficult and dangerous task. For instance the red panda who is known for their fluffy red fur seem like an adorable pet to have but they release an unpleasant odor when feeling threatened. Also their huge strong claws can easily cut skins and destroyed furnitures. Before considering having an exotic pets make sure to consider all the consequences that can happen.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/01/cute-wild-animals-make-terrible-pets/

Exotic Pets
Raising wild pets may sound fun and exciting at first but it can be a difficult and dangerous task.

      • There should be a comma after "first." This separates the two ideas.
      • Correction: Raising wild pets may sound fun and exciting at first, but it can be a difficult and dangerous task.


For instance the red panda who is known for their fluffy red fur seem like an adorable pet to have but they release an unpleasant odor when feeling threatened.

      • There should be a comma after "For instance."
      • There should also be a comma after "red panda."
      • Switch "who" for "which."
      • "Their" should be "its" because you are referring to "the red panda", which is singular.
      • There should be a comma after "red fur."
      • "Seem" should be "seems."
      • Again, since you are referring to the singular "red panda," you should switch "they" for "it."
      • Correction: For instance, the red panda, which is known for its fluffy red fur, seems like an adorable pet to have, but it releases an unpleasant odor when feeling threatened.


Also their huge strong claws can easily cut skins and destroyed furnitures.

      • There should be a comma after "also."
      • Again, "their" should be "its."
      • "Skins" should be singular.
      • "Destroyed" should be "destroy" because it is not happening in the past.
      • Correction: Also, its huge strong claws can easily cut skin and destroy furniture.


Before considering having an exotic pets make sure to consider all the consequences that can happen.

      • "Pets" should be singular.
      • There should be a comma after "exotic pet" to separate the two ideas.
      • Include "of" between "all the."
      • You can remove "that can happen" from the end because it is unnecessary.
      • Correction: Before considering having an exotic pet, make sure to consider all of the consequences.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/01/cute-wild-animals-make-terrible-pets/

Exotic Pets
Raising wild pets may sound fun and exciting at first, but it can be a difficult and dangerous task. For instance, the red panda, which is known for its fluffy red fur, seems like an adorable pet to have, but it releases an unpleasant odor when feeling threatened. Also, its huge strong claws can easily cut skin and destroy furniture. Before considering having an exotic pet, make sure to consider all of the consequences.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/01/cute-wild-animals-make-terrible-pets/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

The Book Of Afterlife
Back in the ancient Egypt, as soon as people began to learn hierography they began to record many things such as stories like the afterlife. These passages have been found on tombs, papyrus, and bandages used to mummified humans. No one really knew when the book came out but it was dated to the 13th dynasty to Queen Mentuhotep.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/archaeology-and-history/magazine/2016/01-02/egypt-book-of-the-dead/

The Book Of Afterlife
Back in the ancient Egypt, as soon as people began to learn hierography they began to record many things such as stories like the afterlife.

      • "The" can be removed before "ancient Egypt."
      • There should be a comma after "as soon as people began to learn hierography."
      • I assume you mean stories of the afterlife.
      • Correction: Back in ancient Egypt, as soon as people began to learn hierography, they began to record many things such as stories of the afterlife.


These passages have been found on tombs, papyrus, and bandages used to mummified humans.

      • "Mummified" should be "mummify."
      • Correction: These passages have been found on tombs, papyrus, and bandages used to mummify humans.


No one really knew when the book came out but it was dated to the 13th dynasty to Queen Mentuhotep.

      • I would say no one really knows, rather than no one knew.
      • There should be a comma after "out."
      • Try switching the wording up a bit to say "but it dates back to the 13th dynasty."
      • It isn't clear what book you are referring to, because you haven't mentioned it in the rest of the article. Include a sentence before this one which introduces the book of the dead and what it is.
      • Correction: No one really knows when the book came out, but it dates back to the 13th dynasty to Queen Mentuhotep.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/archaeology-and-history/magazine/2016/01-02/egypt-book-of-the-dead/

The Book of Afterlife
Back in ancient Egypt, as soon as people began to learn hierography, they began to record many things such as stories of the afterlife. These passages have been found on tombs, papyrus, and bandages used to mummify humans. No one really knows when the book came out, but it dates back to the 13th dynasty of Queen Mentuhotep.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/archaeology-and-history/magazine/2016/01-02/egypt-book-of-the-dead/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


The Next Door
As the universe expands the milky way will one day crashed into our neighbor Andromeda galaxy. Many well known astronomers and physics are trying to foretell when this happens. According to the Astrophysical Journal it was predicted that it will crash 3.9 billion years from now but it was pushed back to 600 million years. But no one is certain of the exact date or what might happen.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/milky-way-galaxy-to-collide-with-andromeda-but-when-gaia-spacecraft/

The Next Door
As the universe expands the milky way will one day crashed into our neighbor Andromeda galaxy.

      • There should be a comma after "As the universe expands."
      • "Milky Way" should be capitalized.
      • "Crashed" should be in future tense.
      • Include "the" before Andromeda galaxy. Include a comma before this as well.
      • Correction: As the universe expands, the Milky Way will one day crash into our neighbor, the Andromeda galaxy.


Many well known astronomers and physics are trying to foretell when this happens.

      • There should be a dash between "well-known."
      • "Happens" should be future tense--"will happen."
      • Correction: Many well-known astronomers and physics are trying to foretell when this will happen.


According to the Astrophysical Journal it was predicted that it will crash 3.9 billion years from now but it was pushed back to 600 million years.

      • There should be a comma after "Astrophysical Journal."
      • There should be either a semicolon or a period after "it will crash 3.9 billion years from now."
      • Switch "but it was" for "this was later."
      • Correction: According to the Astrophysical Journal, it was predicted that it will crash 3.9 billion years from now; this was later pushed back to 600 million years.


But no one is certain of the exact date or what might happen.

      • Try not to start a sentence with "but." Try saying something like "Although there are estimations, . . ."
      • Correction: Although there are estimations, no one is certain of the exact date or what exactly might happen.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/milky-way-galaxy-to-collide-with-andromeda-but-when-gaia-spacecraft/

The Next Door
As the universe expands, the Milky Way will one day crash into our neighbor, the Andromeda galaxy. Many well-known astronomers and physics are trying to foretell when this will happen. According to the Astrophysical Journal, it was predicted that it will crash 3.9 billion years from now; this was later pushed back to 600 million years. Although there are estimations, no one is certain of the exact date or what exactly might happen.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/02/milky-way-galaxy-to-collide-with-andromeda-but-when-gaia-spacecraft/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Hi Thth,
You need to create your own titles for the articles summaries.


Bloody Moon 

On Sunday January 22 there was a blood moon and many of those who are lucky enough to see it report seeing a lust of dust coming out of the moon. Thinking that a meteor might have hit it. A meteor about the size of this meteor hit the moon every week or so but this event happened infrequently. Now scientists are taking a step on studying the moon crater.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/01/meteor-hit-the-moon-during-blood-moon-eclipse-heres-what-we-know/

Bloody Moon
On Sunday January 22 there was a blood moon and many of those who are lucky enough to see it report seeing a lust of dust coming out of the moon.

      • There should be a comma after "Sunday." Dates are written in the format "Sunday, January 22nd."
      • Upon reading the article, the blood moon occurred on January 20th, but the article was written on January 22nd.
      • There should also be a comma after the date.
      • This sentence can be broken into two sentences. A period can be included after "blood moon."
      • Correction: On Sunday, January 20th, there was a blood moon.


many of those who are lucky enough to see it report seeing a lust of dust coming out of the moon.

      • This is past tense, so switch "are" for "were" and "report" to "reported."
      • "A lust of" can be removed.
      • Replace "out of" with "from."
      • Correction: Many of those who were lucky enough to see it reported seeing dust coming from the moon.


Thinking that a meteor might have hit it.

      • This sentence is a fragment (incomplete sentence). Replace "thinking" with "they thought."
      • Correction: They thought that a meteor might have hit it.


A meteor about the size of this meteor hit the moon every week or so but this event happened infrequently.

      • "About the size of this meteor" is unclear, because it hasn't been established what size the meteor was or even that there was certainly a meteor at all. It can be removed.
      • "Hit" should be "hits."
      • There should be a comma after "every week or so."
      • By "this event," do you mean viewing it?
      • "Happened" should be "happens."
      • Correction: A meteor hits the moon every week or so, but actually viewing it happens infrequently.


Now scientists are taking a step on studying the moon crater.

      • There should be a comma after "now."
      • "Taking steps" makes more sense than "taking a step."
      • I would replace "on studying" with "to study."
      • Correction: Now, scientists are taking steps to study the moon crater.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/01/meteor-hit-the-moon-during-blood-moon-eclipse-heres-what-we-know/

Bloody Moon
On Sunday, January 20th, there was a blood moon. Many of those who were lucky enough to see it reported seeing dust coming from the moon. They thought that a meteor might have hit it. A meteor hits the moon every week or so, but actually viewing it happens infrequently. Now, scientists are taking steps to study the moon crater.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/01/meteor-hit-the-moon-during-blood-moon-eclipse-heres-what-we-know/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

Water Floater The sea cucumber are also known as sea slug for their slow speed. However, not until recently scientists found that there is a major fact that isn’t discovered yet. Sea cucumber can balloon up and ride with the current of the ocean. Sea cucumbers are important part of the ecosystem because they vacuum the sand and release cleaner one. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/01/sea-cucumber-bloat-zoom-fast-animals-news/

Water Floater
The sea cucumber are also known as sea slug for their slow speed.

      • If you say "the sea cucumber" then that is singular, so "are" should be "is."
      • Include "the" before "sea slug."
      • Since you are using singular nouns, switch "their" to "its" to keep this consistent.
      • Correction: The sea cucumber is also known as the sea slug for its slow speed.


However, not until recently scientists found that there is a major fact that isn’t discovered yet.

      • "Not until" is unnecessary in this instance.
      • "Fact" should be switched for a different word. Perhaps "skill."
      • The words "that there is" can be removed. It's not incorrect to include, but it also isn't necessary.
      • If scientists discovered it, then it wouldn't make sense to say it isn't discovered yet. Try saying "that no one had known about."
      • Correction: However, recently scientists discovered a major skill that no one had known about.


Sea cucumber can balloon up and ride with the current of the ocean.

      • "Sea cucumber" should be "the sea cucumber," as it was above.
      • Correction: The sea cucumber can balloon up and ride with the current of the ocean.


Sea cucumbers are important part of the ecosystem because they vacuum the sand and release cleaner one.

      • Input "an" between "are important."
      • I think it could be beneficial to say "vacuum up the sand" rather than just "vacuum the sand."
      • Exchange "release cleaner one" to "release it cleaner."
      • Correction: Sea cucumbers are an important part of the ecosystem because they vacuum up the sand and release it cleaner


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/01/sea-cucumber-bloat-zoom-fast-animals-news/

Water Floater
The sea cucumber is also known as the sea slug for its slow speed. However, recently scientists discovered a major skill that no one had known about. The sea cucumber can balloon up and ride with the current of the ocean. Sea cucumbers are an important part of the ecosystem because they vacuum up the sand and release it cleaner.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/01/sea-cucumber-bloat-zoom-fast-animals-news/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

No More Plants Today there are too many amount of carbon being release in the air for the plants to even help. In 2018 United States the amount of fossil fuel being release went up to 3.4%. This is a major problem because not only can’t the plants help but it also harm the plants as well. Plants help absorb half of the carbon being release and there are still more carbon in the ocean which later become coral bleaching. https://www.popsci.com/plants-offset-carbon-limited

No More Plants
Today there are too many amount of carbon being release in the air for the plants to even help.

      • There should be a comma after "today."
      • "Too many amount" is incorrect grammar; exchange for "too much." In that case, the preceding "are" should be "is."
      • "Release" should be "released."
      • "Released into the air" is a slightly better alternative to "released in the air."
      • "For the plants to even help" could use stronger wording. Swapping "to even help" with "to keep up with" accentuates the heavy carbon output and sounds just a bit better.
      • Correction: Today, there is too much carbon being released into the air for the plants to keep up with.


In 2018 United States the amount of fossil fuel being release went up to 3.4%.

      • Rather than "in 2018 United States," try "in the United States in 2018."
      • Switch "being released" to "was released."
      • I think you mean to say that it went up 3.4%, rather than it went up to 3.4%.
      • Correction: The amount of fossil fuel that was released in the United States in 2018 went up 3.4%.


This is a major problem because not only can’t the plants help but it also harm the plants as well.

      • "Because not only" should be switched to "not only because."
      • Again, switch "the plants can't help" to "the plants can't keep up."
      • Saying both "also" and "as well" is repetitive. One can be deleted.
      • There should be a comma between ideas; before "but also."
      • Correction: This is a major problem not only because the plants can't keep up, but also because it harms the plants.


Plants help absorb half of the carbon being release and there are still more carbon in the ocean which later become coral bleaching.

      • The word "being" can be removed.
      • "Are still more carbon" should be "is still more carbon."
      • There should be a comma before "which."
      • Switching "will later become" to "will likely lead to" is a more appropriate choice of words because the carbon doesn't actually become coral bleaching, but it causes coral bleaching.
      • Correction: Plants help absorb half of the carbon release and there is still more carbon in the ocean, which will likely lead to coral bleaching.


https://www.popsci.com/plants-offset-carbon-limited

No More Plants
Today, there is too much carbon being released into the air for the plants to keep up with. The amount of fossil fuel that was released in the United States in 2018 went up 3.4%. This is a major problem not only because the plants can't keep up, but also because it harms the plants. Plants help absorb half of the carbon release and there is still more carbon in the ocean, which will likely lead to coral bleaching.
https://www.popsci.com/plants-offset-carbon-limited

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Sleep Analysis

Sleep is one of the most important thing after food and water. It is recommended that a person is required to sleep an average of 7 or more hours of sleep. But now study show that Americans are sleeping less than they used to 13 years ago. Studies show that nearly one-third of adult americans sleep for less than 6 hours a day. Sleep is very important to maintain your body and your homeostasis. https://www.sciencenews.org/article/americans-are-sleeping-less-they-were-13-years-ago?tgt=nr

Sleep Analysis
Sleep is one of the most important thing after food and water.

      • Try replacing "things" with another word. Perhaps "human necessities."
    • Correction: Sleep is one of the most important human necessities after food and water.


It is recommended that a person is required to sleep an average of 7 or more hours of sleep.

      • You first say it is recommended and then you say it is required; the two conflict. You can simply remove "is required."
      • "Sleep" is a bit repetitive in this sentence. Swap "of sleep" for "a night" at the end.
      • Correction: It is recommended that a person sleep an average of 7 or more hours a night.


But now study show that Americans are sleeping less than they used to 13 years ago.

      • A sentence shouldn't start with "but." Switch the wording to "Studies show that Americans nowadays..."
      • Correction: Studies show that Americans nowadays are sleeping less than they used to 13 years ago.


Studies show that nearly one-third of adult americans sleep for less than 6 hours a day.

      • "Studies show" is repetitive. Instead, try "It is also shown."
      • "Americans" should be capitalized.
      • Correction: It is also shown that nearly one-third of adult Americans sleep for less than 6 hours a day.


Sleep is very important to maintain your body and your homeostasis.
https://www.sciencenews.org/article/americans-are-sleeping-less-they-were-13-years-ago?tgt=nr

Sleep Analysis
Sleep is one of the most important human necessities after food and water. It is recommended that a person sleep an average of 7 or more hours a night. Studies show that Americans nowadays are sleeping less than they used to 13 years ago. It is also shown that nearly one-third of adult Americans sleep for less than 6 hours a day. Sleep is very important to maintain your body and your homeostasis.
https://www.sciencenews.org/article/americans-are-sleeping-less-they-were-13-years-ago?tgt=nr

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

E-cigarettes Addiction

The usage of e-cigarettes for teenage has been increasing more than before. In 2018, 20.8 percent of teenager said they had used e-cigarettes in the last 30 days from 11.7 percent from 2017. This huge increase could be cause of the brand Juul which contain more nicotine than other e-cigarette brands. Which causes more addiction and can lead to many health problems. https://www.sciencenews.org/article/e-cigs-use-teens-vaping-2018-yir?tgt=nr

E-cigarettes Addiction

      • Capitalize "E-Cigarettes."


The usage of e-cigarettes for teenage has been increasing more than before.

      • "Usage" means how something is used, whereas "use" means the act of something being used. So in this instance, "usage" should be swapped for "use."
      • "Teenage" should be "teenagers."
      • I would switch "for teenagers" for "in teenagers."
      • Saying "has been increasing more than before" is slightly vague. Try saying "has increased dramatically in the past year." The word "dramatically" catches the reader's attention, and mentioning that it has been in a single year further emphasizes the increase.
      • Correction: The use of e-cigarettes in teenagers has dramatically increased in the past year.


In 2018, 20.8 percent of teenager said they had used e-cigarettes in the last 30 days from 11.7 percent from 2017.

      • "Teenager" should be pluralized.
      • To further distinguish the two statistics, try saying "In 2018, 20.8 percent of teenagers... compared with 11.7 percent from 2017."
      • Switch "from 2017" to "in 2017."
      • Correction: In 2018, 20.8 percent of teenagers said they had used e-cigarettes in the last 30 days, compared with 11.7 percent in 2017.


This huge increase could be cause of the brand Juul which contain more nicotine than other e-cigarette brands.

      • Rather than "cause of," try saying "caused by."
      • There should be a comma after "Juul."
      • "Contain" should be pluralized.
      • Correction: This huge increase could be caused by the brand Juul, which contains more nicotine than other e-cigarette brands.


Which causes more addiction and can lead to many health problems.

      • This sentence is a fragment (not a complete sentence). This is because there is no subject. Switch "which" for "a higher concentration of nicotine" so the reader knows exactly what you are talking about.
      • "Causes more addiction" isn't clear. Try saying "is more likely to result in addiction."
      • Correction: A higher concentration of nicotine is more likely to result in addiction and health problems.

https://www.sciencenews.org/article/e-cigs-use-teens-vaping-2018-yir?tgt=nr

E-Cigarettes Addiction
The use of e-cigarettes in teenagers has increased dramatically in the past year. In 2018, 20.8 percent of teenagers said they had used e-cigarettes in the last 30 days, compared with 11.7 percent in 2017. This huge increase could be caused by the brand Juul, which contains more nicotine than other e-cigarette brands. A higher concentration of nicotine is more likely to result in addiction and health problems.
https://www.sciencenews.org/article/e-cigs-use-teens-vaping-2018-yir?tgt=nr

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Weight Control

Weight are hard to control especially losing weight and it get challenging during holidays. Losing all those weight would be and it unhealthy to starve yourself. Instead you should try to exercise more. Exercising can help control your weight and help with metabolism which help with digestion. As long as you exercise maintaining your weight is much more healthier and safer for your body. https://www.popsci.com/how-to-not-gain-holiday-weight-diet#page-4

Weight Control
Weight are hard to control especially losing weight and it get challenging during holidays.

      • In this instance, "weight" is a singular concept rather than plural. So "are" would have to be switched out for "is." However, saying "weight is hard to control" is an opinion or perspective, which should be avoided when writing an article. You can fix this by saying "for some, weight can be hard to control." I would also cut this sentence off there so as to avoid a run-on.
      • Correction: For some, weight can be hard to control.


especially losing weight and it get challenging during holidays.

      • Saying "especially losing weight" might be offensive to people who struggle to gain weight. It's better to keep opinions out of this type of writing to avoid offending anyone.
      • Correction: Many people find it challenging to lose weight during the holidays in particular.


Losing all those weight would be and it unhealthy to starve yourself.

      • Again, weight is singular in this instance rather than plural.
      • Try to connect the last sentence about the holidays to this sentence.
      • Correction: Even if you need to lose a lot of weight from the holidays, it is unhealthy to starve yourself.


Instead you should try to exercise more.

      • There should be a comma after "instead."
      • Correction: Instead, you should try to exercise more.


Exercising can help control your weight and help with metabolism which help with digestion.

      • Switch the "and" to "by".
      • Switch "help" with "improve." It's just a slightly stronger word.
      • Correction: Exercising can help control your weight by improving your metabolism and digestion.


As long as you exercise maintaining your weight is much more healthier and safer for your body.

      • There should be a comma after "as long as you exercise."
      • "Much more healthier" is incorrect grammar. You can either drop "much more" or just "more".
      • Correction: As long as you exercise, maintaining your weight is much healthier and safer for your body.


https://www.popsci.com/how-to-not-gain-holiday-weight-diet#page-4

Weight Control
For some, weight can be hard to control. Many people find it challenging to lose weight during the holidays in particular. Even if you need to lose a lot of weight from the holidays, it is unhealthy to starve yourself. Instead, you should try to exercise more. Exercising can help control your weight by improving your metabolism and digestion. As long as you exercise, maintaining your weight is much healthier and safer for your body.
https://www.popsci.com/how-to-not-gain-holiday-weight-diet#page-4

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Vacation Plans 

Aruba’s Bucuti & Tara Beach Resort attracts many honeymooners and tourists. It have a breathtaking view and every year there is an annual cleanup. Not only that Bucuti’s owner Bieman set up to become the first carbon neutral resort in the Caribbean. The resort have the largest solar panels installation that the government allows. Not only is the resort beautiful but it is helping the environment.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/travel/destinations/south-america/aruba/caribbean-carbon-neutral-resort-bucuti-is-sustainable-and-green/

Vacation Plans
Aruba’s Bucuti & Tara Beach Resort attracts many honeymooners and tourists.
It have a breathtaking view and every year there is an annual cleanup.

      • Swapping out "it" for "the resort" will improve the clarity just a little bit.
      • Correct "have" to "has."
      • There should be a comma after the word "view."
      • Correction: The resort has a breathtaking view, and every year there is an annual cleanup.


Not only that Bucuti’s owner Bieman set up to become the first carbon neutral resort in the Caribbean.

      • There should be a comma after "not only that."
      • The first time a name is introduced, the full name should be given. In this case, it would be Ewald Biemans.
      • It should be clarified what exactly Bieman set up. This might be implied, but not enough that it should be left out.
      • Correction: Not only that, but Bucuti's owner Ewald Biemans set up the resort to become the first carbon neutral resort in the Caribbean.


The resort have the largest solar panels installation that the government allows.

      • Again, change "have" to "has."
      • "Solar panels" does not need to be plural in this instance.
      • Correction: The resort has the largest solar panel installation that the government allows.


Not only is the resort beautiful but it is helping the environment.

      • You began a sentence with "not only" just a few sentences back, so different wording could be used here.
      • Try swapping out "helping" for a stronger choice of words to provide a greater impact in the final sentence.
      • Correction: While everyone can agree the resort is beautiful, it is also doing great things the environment.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/travel/destinations/south-america/aruba/caribbean-carbon-neutral-resort-bucuti-is-sustainable-and-green/

Vacation Plans
Aruba's Bucuti & Tara Beach Resort attracts many honeymooners and tourists. The resort has a breathtaking view, and every year there is an annual cleanup. Not only that, but Bucuti's owner Ewald Biemans set up the resort to become the first carbon neutral resort in the Caribbean. The resort has the largest solar panel installation that the government allows. While everyone can agree the resort is beautiful, it is also doing great things for the environment.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/travel/destinations/south-america/aruba/caribbean-carbon-neutral-resort-bucuti-is-sustainable-and-green/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf 

Cats Everywhere
Today cats are one of the most loved household pets to have. However, there are many different types of cats. Stray cats are no different from a normal type of cats. While some cats are really shy other are very friendly. In Japan, cats are seen as good luck and have a special connection with the fishermen there. In Japan there are even a cat island where the island is filled with cat shrines and cats.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/12/street-cat-grand-odyssey-photos-morandi/

Cats Everywhere
Today cats are one of the most loved household pets to have.

      • I would remove the word "today" from this sentence, because I'm not sure that this is different today than in the past.
      • "To have" can also be removed, because it isn't necessary in this instance. The sentence can do without.
      • Correction: Cats are one of the most loved household pets.


However, there are many different types of cats.

      • The word "however" in this instance functions better when placed at the end of the sentence, rather than the beginning. When placed at the beginning, it implies a contrast between this statement and the one before. When placed at the end, it leads into the topic of different types of cats.
      • Correction: There are many different types of cats, however.


Stray cats are no different from a normal type of cats.

      • "A normal type of cats" sounds a bit unprofessional. What is the opposite of stray? Try "house cats."
      • Correction: Stray cats are no different from house cats.


While some cats are really shy other are very friendly.

      • The word "very" is a better replacement for the word "really"; in my opinion, it sounds a bit more formal.
      • There should be a comma after the word "shy."
      • "Other" should be pluralized -- "others."
      • Correction: While some cats are very shy, others are very friendly.


In Japan, cats are seen as good luck and have a special connection with the fishermen there.

      • The word "there" can be dropped from the end; it is unnecessary.
      • Correction: In Japan, cats are seen as good luck and have a special connection with the fishermen.


In Japan there are even a cat island where the island is filled with cat shrines and cats.

      • Starting the sentence with "in Japan" once again is repetitive. It is clear that you are talking about Japan in this sentence, even without mentioning it, because the previous sentence set this up.
      • "Are" should be "is."
      • Rather than say "a cat island," try saying "an island." When you say "cat island," the word "cat" sounds over-used.
      • "Where the island is" can be removed. It is repetitive.
      • I would switch "cat shrines and cats" to "cats and cat shrines."
      • Correction: There is even an island filled with cats and cat shrines.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/12/street-cat-grand-odyssey-photos-morandi/

Cats Everywhere
Cats are one of the most loved household pets. There are many different types of cats, however. Stray cats are no different from house cats. While some cats are very shy, others are very friendly. In Japan, cats are seen as good luck and have a special connection with the fishermen. There is even an island filled with cats and cat shrines.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/12/street-cat-grand-odyssey-photos-morandi/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Plastics Around The World
Every year about 18 billions of plastic is wasted and dumped into the sea. Those plastics are then causing problems for the sa creatures. Studies show that about 40 percent of the plastic produced are used for packaging and less than 5 percent are recycled. Scientists are trying to determined how to increased the number of recycling the plastics. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/07/ocean-plastic-pollution-solutions/

Plastics Around The World

      • "The" does not need capitalized in a title, unless it is the first word of the title.


Every year about 18 billions of plastic is wasted and dumped into the sea.

      • There should be a comma after "every year."
      • 18 billion what? I assume you mean pounds.
      • Correction: Every year, about 18 billion pounds of plastic is wasted and dumped into the sea.


Those plastics are then causing problems for the sa creatures.

      • Replace "those" with "these." This keeps the issue ongoing, rather than putting it in the past or separating it from our current situation.
      • Correct the spelling of "sea."
      • Correction: These plastics are then causing problems for the sea creatures.


Studies show that about 40 percent of the plastic produced are used for packaging and less than 5 percent are recycled.

      • Both of your uses of "are" should be switched for "is." This is because when you give a percentage, it acts as a single unit.
      • I found this sentence just a bit hard to comprehend. I think that is because I assume both percentages in the sentence contribute to the same thing, when actually, the first percentage relates to plastic production and the second relates to plastic recycling. This should be clarified.
      • Correction: Studies show that about 40 percent of the plastic produced is used for packaging, and less than 5 percent of plastic ends up getting recycled.


Scientists are trying to determined how to increased the number of recycling the plastics.

      • "Determine" is perhaps not the best word to use in this instance. It gives the impression that there is one for-sure answer that scientists just need to uncover. Replacing "trying to determine" with a phrase like "brainstorming" opens up a lot more possibilities and room for trial and error.
      • Because of the previous correction, "how" should be switched out for "ways."
      • "Increased" should be switched for "increase."
      • "The number of recycling" is in need of better wording. Try "the recycle rate."
      • "The" should be switched with "of."
      • You have referred to plastic as "plastic" rather than "plastics" throughout the article, so that should be the same in this last sentence.
      • Correction: Scientists are brainstorming ways to increase the recycle rate of plastic.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/07/ocean-plastic-pollution-solutions/

Plastics Around the World
Every year, about 18 billion pounds of plastic is wasted and dumped into the sea. These plastics are then causing problems for the sea creatures. Studies show that about 40 percent of the plastic produced is used for packaging, and less than 5 percent of plastic ends up getting recycled. Scientists are brainstorming ways to increase the recycle rate of plastic.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/07/ocean-plastic-pollution-solutions/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Victorina Morales Journey

Victorina Morales was an illegal immigrant but now living in New Jersey and working as a maid in Trump National Golf Club. Where she spend her time cleaning and when President Trump visited he gave her a certificate for her outstanding work of cleaning and maintaining his place. Ms. Morales later told the reporters that there are many illegals immigrants working here as well as her trying to make a living. https://www.nytimes.com/2018/12/06/us/trump-bedminster-golf-undocumented-workers.html?action=click&module=Top%20Stories&pgtype=Homepage

Victorina Morales Journey

      • If "Morales" is the last name, there needs to be an apostrophe to represent ownership, as it is her journey. Because her name ends in an "s", this apostrophe can go at the end.
      • Correction: Victorina Morales' Journey


Victorina Morales was an illegal immigrant but now living in New Jersey and working as a maid in Trump National Golf Club.

      • Switch out "was" for "is." Victorina Morales still appears to be an illegal immigrant, based on the information in the article.
      • Rather than "but now living," try saying "who lives."
      • "Working" can then be switched out for "works."
      • Switch out "in Trump National Golf Club" for "at Trump National Golf Club."
      • Correction: Victorina Morales is an illegal immigrant who lives in New Jersey and works as a maid at Trump National Golf Club.


Where she spend her time cleaning and when President Trump visited he gave her a certificate for her outstanding work of cleaning and maintaining his place.

      • It is unnecessary to start the sentence with the word "where." It also creates an incomplete sentence. This word can be removed.
      • "Spend" should be "spends."
      • A comma should be included after "she spends her time cleaning."
      • This sentence is a bit of a run-on. This can be fixed by switching out "when President Trump visited her he gave her a certificate" for "she was awarded a certificate by President Trump."
      • It has already been mentioned that Victorina Morales spends her time cleaning, so there is no need to explain what type of work the certificate is for. To do so is repetitive.
      • Correction: She spends her time cleaning, and was awarded a certificate by President Trump for her outstanding work.


Ms. Morales later told the reporters that there are many illegals immigrants working here as well as her trying to make a living.

      • "The reporters" should simply be "reporters." When you say "the reporters," it indicates a certain group of reporters which the reader has no knowledge of.
      • "Illegals immigrants" should be "illegal immigrants."
      • Where is "here"? Instead, say "at the golf club."
      • "As well as her trying to make a living" can be removed because it doesn't offer any new information.
      • Correction: Ms. Morales later told reporters that there are many illegal immigrants working at the golf club.


https://www.nytimes.com/2018/12/06/us/trump-bedminster-golf-undocumented-workers.html?action=click&module=Top%20Stories&pgtype=Homepage

Victorina Morales' Journey
Victorina Morales is an illegal immigrant who lives in New Jersey and works as a maid at Trump National Golf Club. She spends her time cleaning, and was awarded a certificate by President Trump for her outstanding work. Ms. Morales later told reporters that there are many illegal immigrants working at the golf club.
https://www.nytimes.com/2018/12/06/us/trump-bedminster-golf-undocumented-workers.html?action=click&module=Top%20Stories&pgtype=Homepage

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

Christmas In Netherland

The Dutch St. Nicholas holiday in Netherland is celebrated by people giving candy and gifts. But this year the parades have a negative affect due to the Santa’s blackface sidekick. The sidekick is a helper with blackface and wore a large golden earing and big lips. Now people are protesting on how unnecessary of the sidekicks. Now as a protest began began throwing eggs at the sidekicks and many insults as well. https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/12/black-pete-christmas-zwarte-piet-dutch/

Christmas In Netherland

      • Change "Netherland" to "the Netherlands."
      • Correction: Christmas in the Netherlands


The Dutch St. Nicholas holiday in Netherland is celebrated by people giving candy and gifts.

      • Again, switch "Netherland" to "the Netherlands."


But this year the parades have a negative affect due to the Santa’s blackface sidekick.

      • There should be a comma after "but this year."
      • I'm not sure that "affect" is the right word here (if it were, it should be switched to "effect" because it acts as a noun rather than a verb in this instance). I would switch out the phrase "have a negative affect" to "are receiving criticism."
      • Santa does not need to be preceded by "the."
      • Correction: But this year, the parades are receiving criticism due to Santa's blackface sidekick.


The sidekick is a helper with blackface and wore a large golden earing and big lips.

      • The beginning of this sentence feels a bit repetitive. You can simply say "the sidekick."
      • Correct the spelling of "earring."
      • I would begin the sentence by saying. "In the parade . . ."
      • Correction: In the parade, the sidekick wore a long golden earring and big lips.


Now people are protesting on how unnecessary of the sidekicks.

      • I would switch "now people are protesting" to "people are now protesting", for a slightly smoother read.
      • "How unnecessary of the sidekicks" needs some changes in wording. Try, "the necessity of the sidekick."
      • Correction: People are now protesting the necessity of the sidekick.


Now as a protest began began throwing eggs at the sidekicks and many insults as well.

      • After reading through the article myself, I see it mentions that people are actually throwing eggs at the protesters, not the sidekick itself.
      • Correction: Others have started throwing eggs at those who are protesting the sidekick.

https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/12/black-pete-christmas-zwarte-piet-dutch/

Christmas in the Netherlands
The Dutch St. Nicholas holiday in the Netherlands is celebrated by people giving candy and gifts. But this year, the parades are receiving criticism due to Santa's blackface sidekick. In the parade, the sidekick wore a long golden earring and big lips. People are now protesting the necessity of this character. Others have started throwing eggs at those who are protesting the sidekick.
https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/12/black-pete-christmas-zwarte-piet-dutch/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Trump Plans

President Trump is taking back Obama’s climate rule and was announced to lift some restrictions on greenhouse gases from the coal power plants. In addition to this, Trump also releases more land for drilling for oils. This will disturb the life of the wildlife there and their habitat. Also releasing more carbon dioxide will cause more climate changes and the amount of carbon released kept increasing. https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/03/how-trump-is-changing-science-environment/

Trump Plans

      • This title could be more specific. What sort of "plans" are you referring to? Try something like, "Trump's New Plans are Hurting the Environment" This not only lets the reader know what type of article they will be reading, but also grabs their attention and makes them want to know what Trump's new plans are and how they are hurting the environment.


President Trump is taking back Obama’s climate rule and was announced to lift some restrictions on greenhouse gases from the coal power plants.

      • This sentence is a mouthful; we can simplify it by changing the wording of "was announced to lift some restrictions" to "lifting restrictions."
      • Corrected sentence: President Trump is taking back Obama's climate rule and lifting restrictions on greenhouse gases from the coal power plants.


In addition to this, Trump also releases more land for drilling for oils.

      • You can simply say "in addition," rather than "in addition to this."
      • Maintain the same tense throughout the paragraph. Just as in the first sentence when you say "is taking," you should say "is releasing" in this sentence.
      • The word "for" sounds repetitive here. Try changing "for drilling" to "to drill."
      • Corrected sentence: In addition, Trump is releasing more land to drill for oils.


This will disturb the life of the wildlife there and their habitat.

      • Again, the word "life" sounds repetitive here. Your use of "the life" is actually unnecessary. It can simply read, "disturb the wildlife."
      • Including the word "there" is unnecessary and also a bit repetitive next to your use of "their".
      • Corrected sentence: This will disturb the wildlife and their habitat.


Also releasing more carbon dioxide will cause more climate changes and the amount of carbon released kept increasing.

      • A comma is needed after the word "also," however, I would actually remove this word from the beginning of the sentence. The last sentence of the article should be strong, and starting it with "also" weakens it just a bit.
      • Rather than say "cause more climate changes," try saying "worsen climate change."
      • I'm not quite sure what you mean by "the amount of carbon released kept increasing." I'm going to assume you mean that carbon output will continue to release because of the new changes Trump has made.
      • Corrected sentence: Releasing more carbon dioxide will worsen climate change, and carbon output from Trump's new plans will only continue to increase.


https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/03/how-trump-is-changing-science-environment/

Trump's New Plans are Hurting the Environment
President Trump is taking back Obama's climate rule and lifting restrictions on greenhouse gases from the coal power plants. In addition, Trump is releasing more land to drill for oils. This will disturb the wildlife and their habitat. Releasing more carbon dioxide will worsen climate change, and carbon output from Trump's new plans will only continue to increase.
https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/03/how-trump-is-changing-science-environment/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Equal Spaces 

Having equal living space for both wild animals and humans would be nice. Human populations kept increasing and taking up more living spaces. Which make it hard for the wildlife so scientists are now trying to create area where human and wildlife can live. However, due to the rapid increase in the human population it is challenging to attempt. But now scientists are experimenting more possible way for the wildlife to bond with the urban area.

https://elifesciences.org/articles/41348

Equal Spaces


Having equal living space for both wild animals and humans would be nice.

      • Saying "would be nice" is an opinion. Instead, try: Wild animals and humans do not currently share equal living space.


Human populations kept increasing and taking up more living spaces.

      • "Kept increasing" should be switched to the active form--"Continue to increase."
      • "taking" should be switched to "take."
      • "Spaces" shouldn't be plural in this instance.
      • Corrected sentence: Human populations continue to increase and take up more living space.


Which make it hard for the wildlife so scientists are now trying to create area where human and wildlife can live.

      • "Which" should be replaced with "this."
      • "Make" needs to be "makes."
      • There should be a comma after "wildlife."
      • A better substitute for "area" in this instance is "space."
      • I would include the world "both" to better express the shared space.
      • Corrected sentence: This makes it hard for wildlife, so scientists are now trying to create space where both humans and wildlife can live.


However, due to the rapid increase in the human population it is challenging to attempt.

      • There should be a comma after the word "population."
      • Corrected sentence: However, due to the rapid increase in the human population, it is challenging to attempt.


But now scientists are experimenting more possible way for the wildlife to bond with the urban area.

      • The word "but" should not be used to begin a sentence.
      • Rather than "now scientists are experimenting," try "scientist are now experimenting."
      • You should say "experimenting with"
      • "Way" needs to be pluralized.
      • Corrected sentence: Scientists are now experimenting with more possible ways for the wildlife to bond with the urban area.


https://elifesciences.org/articles/41348

Equal Spaces
Wild animals and humans do not currently share equal living space. Human populations continue to increase and take up more living space. This makes it hard for wildlife, so scientists are now trying to create space where both humans and wildlife can live. However, due to the rapid increase in the human population, it is challenging to attempt. Scientists are now experimenting with more possible ways for the wildlife to bond with the urban area.
https://elifesciences.org/articles/41348

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Survival 

Bengal tigers are now endangered as many people began to hunt them down. First Bengal tiger are a threat for the village people so many villagers began to kill them for safety. At the same time the tigers are hunted down for their bone for China for traditional medicine. In the early 1900s the population of the tigers dropped from 100,000 to 4,000 today. If nothing is done to save the Bengal tigers they could go extinct in the near future.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/11/pirates-are-killing-tigers/


Survival

      • This title doesn't give an idea as to what the article is about. Try "Bengal Tigers are Headed for Extinction."


Bengal tigers are now endangered as many people began to hunt them down.

      • "Began" should be replaced with "have begun."
      • Corrected sentence: Bengal tigers are now endangered as many people have begun to hunt them down.


First Bengal tiger are a threat for the village people so many villagers began to kill them for safety.

      • The word "first" can be dropped.
      • "Threat for the village people" should instead be "threat to the village people."
      • There should be a comma between the two clauses.
      • Rather than say "began to kill," I would make this sound like it is happening right now by saying "are killing."
      • Corrected sentence: Bengal tigers are a threat to the village people, so many villagers are killing them for safety.


At the same time the tigers are hunted down for their bone for China for traditional medicine.

      • There needs to be a comma after "At the same time."
      • There are too many "for"s here. Instead of saying "for China for traditional medicine," I would say "to be used in Chinese traditional medicine."
      • Corrected sentence: At the same time, the tigers are hunted down for their bone to be used in Chinese traditional medicine.


In the early 1900s the population of the tigers dropped from 100,000 to 4,000 today.

      • This sentence is a bit confusing and just needs some rewording. Try saying: The tiger population has dropped from 100,000 in the early 1900s to just 4,000 today.


If nothing is done to save the Bengal tigers they could go extinct in the near future.

      • A Comma is needed after "tigers."
      • Corrected sentence: If nothing is done to save the Bengal tigers, they could go extinct in the near future.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/11/pirates-are-killing-tigers/

Bengal Tigers are Headed for Extinction
Bengal tigers are now endangered as many people have begun to hunt them down. Bengal tigers are a threat to the village people, so many villagers are killing them for safety. At the same time, the tigers are hunted down for their bone to be used in Chinese traditional medicine. The tiger population has dropped from 100,000 in the early 1900s to just 4,000 today. If nothing is done to save the Bengal tigers, they could go extinct in the near future.
https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/11/pirates-are-killing-tigers/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf

Black Friday Event!

After Thanksgiving is the Black Friday sale that everyone look forward to. But little does anyone know how this can cause pollution. It is proved that online shopping can released more carbon than buying on foot. Due to shipping and fast transportation, many carbon are released into the air. Also clothing can cause more pollution as well. Buying new clothes will increase more textile waste. Overall shopping is enjoyable but be cautious of what you might be releasing in the atmosphere. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/11/how-black-friday-cyber-monday-impacts-environment/

Black Friday Event!

      • This title doesn't provide too much insight about the article. I would switch it for something like "The Environmental Effects of Black Friday."


After Thanksgiving is the Black Friday sale that everyone look forward to.

      • I would be more specific about when this sale occurs.
      • "Look" should have an "s" at the end.
      • Corrected sentence: The day after Thanksgiving is the Black Friday sale that everyone looks forward to.


But little does anyone know how this can cause pollution.

      • Rather than say "little does anyone know," try saying "many are unaware."
      • Corrected sentence: But many are unaware of the pollution this causes."


It is proved that online shopping can released more carbon than buying on foot.

      • "It is proved" should instead be "it has been proven."
      • "Released" should be in the present tense--"release."
      • Rather than say "on foot", try saying "in store."
      • Corrected sentence: It has been proven that online shopping can release more carbon than buying in store.


Due to shipping and fast transportation, many carbon are released into the air.

      • Rather than "many carbon," try saying "excessive amounts of carbon."
      • Corrected sentence: Due to shipping and fast transportation, excessive amounts of carbon are released into the air.


Also clothing can cause more pollution as well.

      • Saying both "also" and "as well" is repetitive. I would drop the "also" in this instance.


Buying new clothes will increase more textile waste.

      • Combine this sentence with the last, since they are short when standing on their own and they are very closely related.
      • Corrected sentence: Also, clothing can cause more pollution; buying new clothes will increase more textile waste.


Overall shopping is enjoyable but be cautious of what you might be releasing in the atmosphere.

      • Rather than say "overall shopping is enjoyable," try saying "while shopping can be enjoyable."
      • Corrected sentence: While shopping can be enjoyable, be cautious of what you might be releasing into the atmosphere.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/11/how-black-friday-cyber-monday-impacts-environment/

The Environmental Effects of Black Friday
The day after Thanksgiving is the Black Friday sale that everyone looks forward to. But many are unaware of the pollution this causes. It has been proven that online shopping can release more carbon than buying in store. Due to shipping and fast transportation, excessive amounts of carbon are released into the air. Also, clothing can cause more pollution; buying new clothes will increase more textile waste. While shopping can be enjoyable, be cautious of what you might be releasing into the atmosphere. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/11/how-black-friday-cyber-monday-impacts-environment/

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Dry Land
El Salvador is drying up and there is no certain how long the water will last. People there will go to the spring to shower and do their chores. Since the wells don't have enough water, more than 600,000 people have no access to drinking water. If there was water in the wells people will start fighting for it. The problem is none of the country's main rivers can be purified for drinking. This means there will be health problems.

Dry Land

      • Consider changing your title to be more specific. "Dry Land" can mean a broad range of things, but something like "El Salvador is Running Out of Water" catches the reader's interest and provides an idea of what the article is about.


El Salvador is drying up and there is no certain how long the water will last.

      • "No certain" should be replaced with "no way of knowing."
      • Corrected sentence: El Salvador is drying up and there is no way of knowing how long the water will last.


People there will go to the spring to shower and do their chores.

      • Change "will go" to "are going." This puts it into present tense rather than future tense.
      • Corrected sentence: People are going to the spring to shower and do their chores.


Since the wells don't have enough water, more than 600,000 people have no access to drinking water.
If there was water in the wells people will start fighting for it.

      • "If there was water in the wells" flows better if written as "Even if the wells did contain water."
      • Saying "people will start fighting for it" is an assumption, which should be avoided. Instead, say "it is likely that people would fight over it."
      • Corrected sentence: Even if the wells did contain water, it is likely that people would fight over it.


The problem is none of the country's main rivers can be purified for drinking.

      • The word "that" should be inserted after "the problem is."
      • Corrected sentence: The problem is that none of the country's main rivers can be purified for drinking.


This mean there will be health probelms.

      • This sentence could be more powerful with different wording.
      • Since you just used the word "problem" in the previous sentence, try a different word.
      • Corrected sentence: This will almost certainly lead to health consequences.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/11/el-salvador-water-crisis-drought-climate-change/

El Salvador is Running Out of Water
El Salvador is drying up and there is no way of knowing how long the water will last. People are going to the spring to shower and do their chores. Since the wells don't have enough water, more than 600,000 people have no access to drinking water. Even if the wells did contain water, it is likely that people would fight over it. The problem is that none of the country's main rivers can be purified for drinking. This will almost certainly lead to health consequences.

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf


Technology VS. Humanity

Are we in danger of losing our humanity? In the book Hello World: Being Human in the Age of Algorithms, the author inform us about our so lost humanity near the future with technology. The famous chess champion Gary Kasparov seem unbeatable back in the time. However, IBM built a manchine that can play chess and in 1977 the computer beated the famous chess player Gary Kasparov. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2018/11/algorithms-big-data-computer-dating-book-talk/

Technology VS. Humanity
Are we in danger of losing our humanity?
In the book Hello World: Being Human in the Age of Algorithms, the author inform us about our so lost humanity near the future with technology.

      • Book titles should be italicized.
      • "Inform" should be "informs."
      • "About our so lost humanity near the future with technology" is a bit confusing. Instead, try "of our loss of humanity with the future of technology."
      • Corrected sentence: In the book Hello World: Being Human in the Age of Algorithms, the author informs us of our loss of humanity with the future of technology.


The famous chess champion Gary Kasparov seem unbeatable back in the time.

      • There should be a comma before and after the name.
      • "Seem unbeatable back in the time" is confusing wording. Instead, try "used to seem unbeatable."
      • Corrected sentence: The famous chess champion, Gary Kasparov, used to seem unbeatable.


However, IBM built a manchine that can play chess and in 1977 the computer beated the famous chess player Gary Kasparov.

      • Corrected the spelling of "machine."
      • There should be a comma after "in 1977."
      • "Beat" is already past tense, so the "-ed" is unnecessary.
      • Since you have already introduced Gary Kasparov as a famous chess player, it is repetitive to do so again. Instead, you can use a simple pronoun--"him."
      • Combine this sentence with the one before using a semicolon, since the two are very closely related.
      • Corrected sentence: The famous chess champion, Gary Kasparov, used to seem unbeatable; however, IBM built a machine that can play chess and in 1977, the computer beat him.


https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2018/11/algorithms-big-data-computer-dating-book-talk/

Technology VS Humanity
Are we in danger of losing our humanity? In the book Hello World: Being Human in the Age of Algorithms, the author informs us of our loss of humanity with the future of technology. The famous chess champion, Gary Kasparov, used to seem unbeatable; however, IBM built a machine that can play chess and in 1977, the computer beat him.

Edited by: Brittni Shoaf



Thet, for ixl you need to work on definite and indefinite articles, all tenses of verbs, coordinating conjunctions. - Mr. Steve

Volcanoes Eruptions

United States is one of the most volcanic countries in the world. The most dangerous of all listed is the Kilauea in Hawaii. The new volcano threat assessment was updated in 2005 determine the greatest risks of eruption and human impacts. Volcanoes usually give warning when it is about to erupted but if missed, serious consequence can happen. It is important to pay close attention to the warning a volcano give off. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2018/10/news-most-dangerous-volcanoes-usgs-list-geology/



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Powerful Rulers Of Egypt

Queens in Ancient Egypt hold greater power than most of the other queens. Women in Egypt have all the human rights that we fought for. Women are able to work, owned business, own property, and divorced their husband. Not only that women reuled repeatedly with no interrupted power. With all those rights Egyptian women have the most rights and powers from the very beginning. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/culture/2018/10/queen-princess-royalty-vintage-photos/





All the Way to London

London became the center of attention with many good tourists and beautiful landscapes, London is booming. The Royal Botanic Garden at Kew which lie at Thames, seven miles from central London have the most beautiful greenhouse. Also is home to 1,500 different species of plants. The Shard reign over London is the tallest building and more than 70 new building are coming. With all these site London is one of the most visited cities. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/urban-expeditions/london-population-city-planning/





The Breakthrough of Bicycle

Cycling was known as a sport or a way of transportation. Baron Karl Drais von Sauerbronn made the first practical bicycle with no pedals. In 1839, Scotsman Kirkpatrick MacMillan made an improvement which was later nicknamed as "boneshaker". However, since the wheels were too big, it made it unstable for the riders and led them to crashing. The most popular bicycle design was made by James Starley and it was known as a safety bicycle. Through time, the bicycle has evolved as a means of fun and transportation.





Surprising Attack

A tsunami hit Indonesia without any sign of warning. Many scientists are blaming it geology for this disaster. When the tsunami first hit it was a 6.1 magnitude which barely damage any housing but for unknown reason the tsunami began to grow stronger to a 7.5 magnitude which later on causing huge damage and killing many people. Now everyone is working together to save the remaning people affected by the tsunami. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/09/indonesia-tsunami-sulawesi-explained-science-geology/





Darwin Thoughts

Darwin was the person who believed that species evolve as time and was the first to draw the tree of life. But he later found the third kingdom of life called archaea. However, when he first found out he believed that they are another type of bacteria. Which later on he found out that he was wrong and ended up making a new discovery which was published in the New York Times in 1997. Now there are another kingdom that are found and now scientists are trying to find the relationship between every living things. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2018/09/darwin-evolution-crispr-microbiome-bacteria-news/





NASA Watching Over

NASA is now able to see the melting glaciers over the world. Thanks to the new satellite, called ICESat-2 which give researchers more precise look of the melting glaciers. This melting ice will cause sea level to rise and the satellite provide a good evidence for that. NASA concluded that the measure of the ice sheet in Antartica and Greenland is about a sixth of an inch. Now NASA coming up with more satellite to determine the amount of vegetation in a region. https://www.nytimes.com/2018/09/14/climate/nasa-ice-satellite-launch.html?rref=collection%2Fsectioncollection%2Fscience&action=click&contentCollection=science&region=rank&module=package&version=highlights&contentPlacement=8&pgtype=sectionfront





Donating Blood

Donating blood are becoming common, there are four different types of blood: A,B,AB, and O. It is important that the right type of blood to the patients. If not the person will face severe disease or death. But O blood type can be tranfer to any blood type, making it the universal donor blood. Now scientists believed that they can turn the 3 different types of blood types to O by switching the enzymes. Then we don't have to worry about blood transfusion. https://www.popsci.com/type-o-blood-gut-enzyme





Is Arctic Still Cold?

Arctic known as one of the coldest place on earth, might not be as cold as before. Nikita Zimov was teaching his students about ecological fieldwork, when he notice something. THe frozen land might be thawing faster than before. It not possible for a place with 40 degrees below zero Fahrenheit to have soil that are thawing faster. This can lead to major concern about how much carbon are we putting into the air. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/08/news-arctic-permafrost-may-thaw-faster-than-expected/

Is Arctic Still Cold?

      • Don't forget to use your definite and indefinite articles. Though most continents do not use "the", the Northern area of our world is known as "the Arctic"; Is the Arctic Still Cold?

Arctic known as one of the coldest place on earth, might not be as cold as before.

      • Same here: The Arctic, Also the first part of the sentence does not have a verb. You need to add "is". When you use "one of the", you must have the noun as plural, so " One of the places. Lastly, you need to combine both sentences with a conjunction, use "but", and the second part of the sentence does not have a subject, use "it" ; The Arctic is known as one of the coldest places on earth, but it might not be as cold as before.

Nikita Zimov was teaching his students about ecological fieldwork, when he notice something.

      • The verb noticed must be in the past tense because you used "was teaching"

Nikita Zimov was teaching his students about ecological fieldwork, when he noticed something. THe frozen land might be thawing faster than before.

      • Watch out for capitalizing words that don't need it, if you do this in school they take points off for mechanics based on sloppiness. Also try not to end to many sentences with prepositions. You've done this twice with the word " before". It is incorrect to use a preposition at the end of a sentence.; The frozen land might be thawing faster than it has in the past.

It not possible for a place with 40 degrees below zero Fahrenheit to have soil that are thawing faster.

      • Do not start a sentence with "it" because using it makes the subject unclear. Soil is an uncountable noun so you should not use the plural be verb "are", use is. When you use an adjective in the comparative form (more or er), then you need another noun to compare it to. So, just write "as fast as it is."; For a place with 40 degrees below zero Fahrenheit weather to have soil that thaws as fast as it is, something else must be happening.

Though the cause is not clear, concerns about how much carbon we are putting into the air has come up as a possible cause.





Can Human Kill Robot?

It hard to turn down the offer when a robot is begging not to. Scientists chose students from 89 colleges to team up and work on a robot called Noa. The challenge started with the scientists asked the students to turn of the robot. This create stress due to the robot begging not to since their relationship began to built up. Scientists believed that the students treat the robot as a human after having it as a partner. https://www.popsci.com/humans-killing-robots





Why Elephant Have Low Risk of Cancer

One of the biggest mammal should be more prone to cancer risk than smaller animals. But, elephant have fewer risk of having cancer than humans. This is because of their trunk, which have extra tumor-suppressing gene called P53, while human only have one, elephant have 20. The gene can detect DNA damage and is able to kill it. Since elephant have more P53 than human, it is more likely that elephant have a lower chance of having skin problems than humans. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2018/08/news-cancer-elephants-genes-dna-new-research/





Seafood

If human population continue to boom, the food production need to be double from now. So now researchers are now focusing on fish, as fish have high enough of proteins. Now researchers are considering high sea fishing which is very expensive. They also came up with another solution, having farm-raised fish. Perdicting that by 2030, 62% of the world's seafood will be farm-raised. So far there is no real solution for food production besides depending on seafood. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/08/news-fisheries-aquaculture-food-security/





Health Issues

Ever since Trump became president, having a insurence become challenging. Medicare played an important role for everyone, especially for elders. Having insurence can lower medicial bills and make medication more affordable. But recently Trump cut out all the benefits and the $500 billion fund. Now affording medication is harder due to no insurence to help and now 70% of older Americans suffer from periodontal disease and 20% live with decay tooth. So medicare is needed, especailly for the elders. https://www.washingtontimes.com/news/2018/jun/26/the-future-of-medicare-dental-vision-and-hearing-c/





Soil Causing More Carbon Dioxide

After trees die, microbes in the soil consume the carrbon and exhale out the carbon dioxide back into the air. Temperature rising can cause this process to speed up much faster. The microbes are able to break down more carbon due to high heat which later extracted to the atmosphere. To prevent this from happening, we can perserve or regrow forest. But this won't be enough compare to other damages that happened. https://www.popsci.com/rising-temperatures-are-causing-soil-to-dump-more-carbon-dioxide-into-air#page-5






Poisioning Wildlife

Two herdsmen in Kenya's Osewan region had enough of the trouble the lions has cause to his livestocks. So they went and decided to make poison darts in which they killed one female and a male. But this didn't stop the predators, so then they began to poison their livestocks in order to kill the lions. The people only use poison to catch preys for food and to protect themselves. Now wildlife animals are decreasing as time pass due to humans. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2018/08/poisoning-africa-kenya-maasai-pesticides-lions-poachers-conservationists/





How Much Are You Consuming?

Athletes and trainers have a belief on consuming alot of proteins when they exercise. That is usually not the case, body need protein to break up into amino acids, which are used to make other proteins like collagen. But too much protein can be bad for the kidneys. So eating too much protein don't really improve your strength but strain your kidneys. In general, the amount of proteins you need to consume have to do with how much you exercise. So it is important to watch your intake on proteins and also to eat other nutrients. https://www.popsci.com/how-much-protein#page-4





No More Plastic 

By the January 2019, Dominica plans on fully banning all platic and styrofoam use food containers. The government restrict on the imports of non-biodegradable containers. Dominica have much larger goals, they also hoped to have a stable climate. Since in summer there are many migrating sperm whales inhabitants. So reducing plastic waste can also protect the marine mammals.

https://www.nationalgeographic.com/environment/2018/08/news-dominica-plastic-styrofoam-ban/





DNA Connection

Dogs are known as men best friend for it well-behaved behaviors. But dogs are descended from wolves so, how are dogs tameable. So researchers believed that breeding the friendliest fox can domesticate them. Belyaev proved himself right by breeding fearless foxes which resulted a socialable and adventerous babies. Now researchers still kept on breeding 40 generations of friendly and aggressive foxes to find the connection of the genetic that made it wild to tame. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/08/fox-dogs-wild-tame-genetics-study-news/





Grizzly Bear Survival Rate

Grizzly bear had been in the endangered species list. Since then researchers have been collecting data from bears for the future species. After the recovery of the popluation, the government began to open up hunting ground for the bears. But if the hunter kill a female bear and the popluation decreases, then the hunting ground will be closed. So far there are about 700 bears in the Greater Yellowstone Area and 1,000 wander in the remote mountains and valleys. https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2018/07/can-grizzly-bears-survive-hunting-animals/





Jupiter's New Moon: Weirdo

Jupiter has 53 moons in total founded by Galileo Galilei backed in 1610. But 16 of those weren't named and the two that were discovered last year make it 69 moons in total. The most recent discoveres is finding 10 more moons to make it 79 moons in total. Out of the 79 moons each of the moons were put into a group. Out of the 12 moons one of the moon wasn't orbiting like the rest of the moons. Many scientists believed that once the moon was collided with something, since it function a bit differently. Being different from the rest of the moons, scientists named it Weirdo.





Parasite Alert!

Toxoplasama gondii is a cat poop parasite that have both infected not just humans but other rodents as well. T. gondii would likely infected warm blooded animals that come to close contact. Causing it to have less fears, for example, infecting a mouse would cause it to have less fear of cats. Getting infected will change one judgement, personality, and mental health. Researchers also found that many people who are infected will choose career that is challenging and risky.





U.S. Is Vulnerable to Big Disasters

Locations is one main reasons why disasters occures. Seven of the 10 largest areas in U.S. are near to the coast and more than 60 million people live there. Another factors is over-population since it hard to fit many people in one small spaceand city need advanced infrastructure for houses. Next, factors is no emergancy funds in case if money is needed.Last factors is limited amount of supplies, since most of our supplies are mostly imported, it is important to have enough supplies when needed. In order to protected for big disasters we need everything listed be prepared.





Fire vs. Animals

Fire can destoryed just about anything especailly in a forest. Animals have the abilities to escape the heat, for example, birds will fly, mammals will run, amphibians will burrow underground, and elks and other animals will stay in stream and lakes. Having a forest fire can benefit predators who pray on fleeing animals. Not much animals are harmed by the fire while there are some death but not a severed amount ever recorded. After the fire life in the forest will revive and new live began.





Thet's Article Page Shakes Extinction

      • A proper title is missing from this article, which is important to reinforce the main idea of your article. Consider trying a more relevant title: " Hazards of Shark Overfishing".


Shakes all around the world are trageted for one thing and it is its liver, known as squalene.

      • Various misspellings- "shakes" and "trageted should be "sharks" and "targeted". Furthermore, the phrase "one thing and it is" is excessive. Try using a more straightforward and concise wording: " Sharks throughout the world are targeted specifically for their livers." Also, the term "squalene' refers to the organic compound itself obtained from shark liver oil, not the liver itself. And thus the sentence should read: "Sharks throughout the world are targeted specifically for their liver oils, which possess both commercial and health value. This helps in transitioning to the next sentence as well."


Squalene contains specail oil that is essential for moisturizing and have many nutrients that is good for your skin.

      • As noted earlier, squalene refers to the organic compound found in shark liver oil. Therefore, it does not contain the oil, and is within the oil. The sentence should read: " The squalene found in shark liver oil.." The phrase "have many nutrients..." is using the wrong tense. The word "have" should be replaced with has". Altogether, it should sound like this: " The squalene found in shark liver oil is an exceptional moisturizer, and has many nutrients that is beneficial for your skin.


People used the squalene and used it to produce make-up, lipsticks, loions, and sunscreens.

      • When discussing events that are still ongoing, use present tense instead of past tense. Replace "used" with use". In addition, the word "people" is vague and does not specify any specific group, thus making it applicable to all people. Use "companies" or "entrepreneurs" to fix this issue. Subsequently, to clarify the sentence even further, categorize the products listed that squalene is used in. In whole, the sentence should read: "In fact, companies utilize squalene in various health and beauty products, such as make-up, lipsticks, lotions, and sunscreens." The transition "in fact" helps to link your sentences together and streamline the ideas.


But not only were the sharks targeted for oils but for seafood known as shark fin soup mostly served in China.

      • This sentence is run-on, and sounds clunky and disorganized. Use a better transition word to illustrate a shift in topic and use commas when necessary to fix this issue, or consider dividing the sentence into two parts: "However, sharks are not only overfished for their oils. Sharks are commonly used in seafood dishes such as the infamous shark fin soup, served primarily in China."


As more and more sharks are fished the harder for the sharks to reproduce and harder for them to grow.

      • Commas are missing from this sentence, making it run-on. Additionally, the phrase "sharks to reproduce and harder for them to grow" can be compacted to make it sound less wordy: " As sharks are continually overfished, it becomes more difficult for sharks to reproduce and grow."


This can lead to extinction to some species of sharks.

      • Leading this sentence with the word "this" sounds bland and lacking. Try using words/phrases such as "As a result," or " Due to this,", which indicates a conclusion or consequence: "As a result, some species of sharks are approaching extinction."


Full Edited Article: Sharks throughout the world are targeted specifically for their liver oils, which possess both commercial and health value. The squalene found in shark liver oil is an exceptional moisturizer, and has many nutrients that is beneficial for your skin. In fact, companies utilize squalene in various health and beauty products, such as make-up, lipsticks, lotions, and sunscreens. However, sharks are not only overfished for their oils. They are commonly used in seafood dishes such as the infamous shark fin soup, served primarily in China. As sharks are continually overfished, it becomes more difficult for sharks to reproduce and grow. As a result, some species of sharks are approaching extinction.




Jupiter's New Moon: Weirdo

Jupiter has 53 moons in total founded by Galileo Galilei backed in 1610. But 16 of those weren't named and the two that were discovered last year make it 69 moons in total. The most recent discoveres is finding 10 more moons to make it 79 moons in total. Out of the 79 moons each of the moons were put into a group. Out of the 12 moons one of the moon wasn't orbiting like the rest of the moons. Many scientists believed that once the moon was collided with something, since it function a bit differently. Being different from the rest of the moons, scientists named it Weirdo.





Parasite Alert!

Toxoplasama gondii is a cat poop parasite that have both infected not just humans but other rodents as well. T. gondii would likely infected warm blooded animals that come to close contact. Causing it to have less fears, for example, infecting a mouse would cause it to have less fear of cats. Getting infected will change one judgement, personality, and mental health. Researchers also found that many people who are infected will choose career that is challenging and risky.





U.S. Is Vulnerable to Big Disasters

Locations is one main reasons why disasters occures. Seven of the 10 largest areas in U.S. are near to the coast and more than 60 million people live there. Another factors is over-population since it hard to fit many people in one small spaceand city need advanced infrastructure for houses. Next, factors is no emergancy funds in case if money is needed.Last factors is limited amount of supplies, since most of our supplies are mostly imported, it is important to have enough supplies when needed. In order to protected for big disasters we need everything listed be prepared.





Fire vs. Animals

Fire can destoryed just about anything especailly in a forest. Animals have the abilities to escape the heat, for example, birds will fly, mammals will run, amphibians will burrow underground, and elks and other animals will stay in stream and lakes. Having a forest fire can benefit predators who pray on fleeing animals. Not much animals are harmed by the fire while there are some death but not a severed amount ever recorded. After the fire life in the forest will revive and new live began.