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How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty. | How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty. | ||
| − | ***Edited for preposition and fluidity: The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in | + | ***Edited for preposition and fluidity: The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in a state of poverty. |
| − | ***Don't need to "how" (just directly say the peddler got revenge by...). Replace "at" with "in" (usually it's "in | + | ***Don't need to "how" (just directly say the peddler got revenge by...). Replace "at the" with "in a" (usually it's "in a state"). |
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| − | The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in | + | The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in a state of poverty. |
Revision as of 20:44, 23 May 2020
Meku's Writing Page
How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.
How the peddler got his revenge on the Baron is by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron at the state of poverty.
- Edited for preposition and fluidity: The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in a state of poverty.
- Don't need to "how" (just directly say the peddler got revenge by...). Replace "at the" with "in a" (usually it's "in a state").
Final Edited Version:
The peddler got his revenge on the Baron by buying the old baronial mansion and putting Baron in a state of poverty.
- Please work on your preposition, and try to write a bit more next time!
Edited by Ashley Leung
