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How we can know that the author is using 'personification' is by giving non-human beings human attributes that they don't have in real life. In this story, "The Flax" the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. In the story the flax says that "People say that I look exceedingly well, " "and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing[4] is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I.". The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier. | How we can know that the author is using 'personification' is by giving non-human beings human attributes that they don't have in real life. In this story, "The Flax" the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. In the story the flax says that "People say that I look exceedingly well, " "and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing[4] is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I.". The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier. | ||
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| + | How we can know that the author is using 'personification' is by giving non-human beings human attributes that they don't have in real life. | ||
| + | ***Edited for fluidity: We know the author is using personification when non-human beings are given human attributes. | ||
| + | ***The first part is a bit wordy. Don't need quotes around "personification." | ||
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| + | <br>In this story, "The Flax" the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. | ||
| + | ***Edited for comma placement: In the story "The Flax," the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. | ||
| + | ***Comma after the title instead of before it. Replace "this" with "the." | ||
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| + | <br>In the story the flax says that "People say that I look exceedingly well, " "and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing[4] is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I.". | ||
| + | ***Edited for quotation marks, punctuation, clarity, fluidity: In the story, the flax says, "People say that I look exceedingly well... and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I." | ||
| + | ***You can combine the two quotes. Comma after "story" and "says." No need for the second period outside of the quotation mark. | ||
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| + | <br>The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier. | ||
| + | ***Okay! Maybe you can change the wording a bit so it's not the same as the quote. | ||
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| + | We know the author is using personification when non-human beings are given human attributes. In the story "The Flax," the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. In the story, the flax says, "People say that I look exceedingly well... and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I." The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier. | ||
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| + | ***Overall, good job! Please work on your quotation marks, and try to reduce the length of your quote. Also work on commas. | ||
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| + | Edited by Ashley Leung | ||
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How we can know that the author is using 'personification' is by giving non-human beings human attributes that they don't have in real life. In this story, "The Flax" the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. In the story the flax says that "People say that I look exceedingly well, " "and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing[4] is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I.". The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier.
How we can know that the author is using 'personification' is by giving non-human beings human attributes that they don't have in real life.
- Edited for fluidity: We know the author is using personification when non-human beings are given human attributes.
- The first part is a bit wordy. Don't need quotes around "personification."
In this story, "The Flax" the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions.
- Edited for comma placement: In the story "The Flax," the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions.
- Comma after the title instead of before it. Replace "this" with "the."
In the story the flax says that "People say that I look exceedingly well, " "and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing[4] is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I.".
- Edited for quotation marks, punctuation, clarity, fluidity: In the story, the flax says, "People say that I look exceedingly well... and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I."
- You can combine the two quotes. Comma after "story" and "says." No need for the second period outside of the quotation mark.
The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier.
- Okay! Maybe you can change the wording a bit so it's not the same as the quote.
Final Edited Version:
We know the author is using personification when non-human beings are given human attributes. In the story "The Flax," the author describes that the flax is feeling pain and emotions. In the story, the flax says, "People say that I look exceedingly well... and that I am so fine and long that I shall make a beautiful piece of linen. How fortunate I am! It makes me so happy to know that something can be made of me. How the sunshine cheers me, and how sweet and refreshing is the rain! My happiness overpowers me; no one in the world can feel happier than I." The flax says that happiness overpowers it and that no one in the world can feel happier.
- Overall, good job! Please work on your quotation marks, and try to reduce the length of your quote. Also work on commas.
Edited by Ashley Leung
