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| − | '''Helping the Homeless during a Difficult Time'''
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| − | The coronavirus had gotten many in New York City to stock up on food, water, and necessities, whereas some could not afford to. Among those unfortunate few are the homeless
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| − | '''The coronavirus has gotten many people in New York City to stock up on food, water, and other necessities. Some, however, cannot afford to.'''
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| − | '''Among those unfortunate few are the homeless.'''
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| − | To protect them from the dangers of the coronavirus and the hostile environment regarding it, city officials had begun to move said people into shelters that were required to be cleaned and scrubbed down every few days.
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| − | '''To protect the homeless from the dangers of the coronavirus and its hostile consequences, city officials have begun to move them into shelters that are intensely cleaned every few days.'''
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| − | The staff managing these shelters were taught on how to handle the incoming surge of homeless people and remaining clean, both for themselves and for the homeless.
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| − | '''The shelters’ staff were taught how to handle the incoming surge of people and higher cleanliness standards, both for themselves and the homeless.'''
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| − | The city still plans to spend more time and money on this ongoing issue, and are working on getting the remaining 3,500 homeless people sleeping in train stations, streets, etc, to relocate to the shelters, in hopes of keeping them away from the coronavirus.
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| − | Helping the Homeless during a Difficult Time
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| − | The coronavirus has gotten many people in New York City to stock up on food, water, and other necessities. Some, however, cannot afford to. Among those unfortunate few are the homeless. To protect the homeless from the dangers of the coronavirus and its hostile consequences, city officials have begun to move them into shelters that are intensely cleaned every few days. The shelters’ staff were taught how to handle the incoming surge of people and higher cleanliness standards, both for themselves and the homeless. The city still plans to spend more time and money on this issue, and are working on relocating the remaining 3,500 homeless people sleeping in trains stations, streets, etc. to the shelters, in hopes of keeping them away from the coronavirus.
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| − | Source: https://ny.curbed.com/2020/3/13/21178079/coronavirus-nyc-homeless-services-covid-19
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| − | Good work and good information! Just try your best to have concise and precise word choice, so the summary is a bit more fluid. Also watch out for verb tenses!
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