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| + | Great blue whales—and their poo—have on climate change. It is all due to the control of whale fecal matter in the diets of the tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. The top ocean layer “fecal plumes” provide a key food source for phytoplankton which feeds on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur.“At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Chiami. Dr.Chiami suggests that since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations. | ||
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| + | Whales help against climate change | ||
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| + | *** Remember to capitalize all the words in the title unless there are particles such as “the” or “of.” | ||
| + | Edited title: Whales Help Against Climate Change | ||
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| + | Great blue whales—and their poo—have on climate change. | ||
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| + | *** This sentence is taken directly from this source: https://www.goodnewsnetwork.org/whales-feces-could-significantly-combat-climate-change/. If you are quoting directly from the source, include quotation marks before and after the quote. Otherwise, paraphrase and write this information out in your own words. Do not take direct phrases from a source without crediting the source — this is plagiarism. This sentence is also incomplete. What do great blue whales and their feces have on climate change? A more formal term to use for “poo” would be “feces.” | ||
| + | Edited sentence: Great blue whales — and their feces — have an effect on climate change. | ||
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| + | It is all due to the control of whale fecal matter in the diets of the tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. | ||
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| + | *** Again, this sentence is plagiarized. You have to change more than a few words — you have to paraphrase or use all your own words to explain this information. Define “it.” Is “it” the effect that whales’ fecal matter has on climate change? I edited this sentence for better flow. “It is all due to” can be shortened to “This is because.” | ||
| + | Edited sentence: This is because the whales’ fecal matter is controlled in the diet of tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. | ||
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| + | The top ocean layer “fecal plumes” provide a key food source for phytoplankton which feeds on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur. | ||
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| + | *** Again, this is plagiarism. More than one phytoplankton is being talked about here, so “feeds” does not need an “s.” | ||
| + | Edited sentence: The “fecal plumes” at the top ocean layer provide a key food source for the phytoplankton which feed on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur. | ||
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| + | “At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Chiami. | ||
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| + | *** You should inform the reader who “Chiami” is. Is Chiami a scientist or do they have another occupation? I also noticed that “Dr. Chiami” is written in the next sentence, so make sure that the name is consistent throughout the article. If a person uses a title such as “Dr.” always be sure to include it. | ||
| + | Edited sentence: “At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Dr. Chiami. | ||
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| + | Dr.Chiami suggests that since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations. | ||
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| + | *** Include a space after “Dr.” Again, most of this sentence is plagiarized from the same source. | ||
| + | Edited sentence: According to Dr. Chiami, “since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.” | ||
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| + | *** These sentences copy from the source, almost all word for word. Do not plagiarize the words of others — you must use your own words. Credit the source properly. Also, provide the source of the article otherwise the reader will not know where the information is from. I also need to check the source. Make sure that your article has six sentences. | ||
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| + | Whales Help Against Climate Change | ||
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| + | Great blue whales — and their feces — have an effect on climate change. This is because the whales’ fecal matter is controlled in the diet of tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. The “fecal plumes” at the top ocean layer provide a key food source for the phytoplankton which feed on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur. “At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Dr. Chiami. According to Dr. Chiami, “since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.” | ||
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Whales help against climate change | Whales help against climate change | ||
| − | + | Great blue whales—and their poo—have on climate change. It is all due to the control of whale fecal matter in the diets of the tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. The top ocean layer “fecal plumes” provide a key food source for phytoplankton which feeds on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur.“At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Chiami. Dr.Chiami suggests that since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations. | |
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December 21 is the Crossword Puzzle Day
The Crossword Puzzle Day is on December 21. It is celebrated to remember the day that crosswords were invented. The object of a crossword puzzle is to fill in the white spaces of a grid with the correct words using the clues provided. The clues to more challenging puzzles read like riddles and trivia, making the game more complex. Crossword puzzles may help delay the effects of dementia or sharpen the brain for problem-solving and can increase vocabulary and even relieve the mind from the stress of the day by focusing on something other than worldly problems. These are the reasons that you should celebrate the Crossword Puzzle Day.
Source: https://nationaldaycalendar.com/crossword-puzzle-day-december-21/
December 20 is the National Ugly Christmas Sweater Day
During 2014, The holiday lover partnered with Save the Children in their “Make the World Better with a Sweater” campaign. So every year, they could have a chance to wear their ugly sweaters. The holiday was created as a way to lighten up the busy holidays and to show off their absurdly, ugly sweaters. The holiday has grown in popularity and is celebrated all over the world. You could wear your ugliest Christmas sweater. You should also use #UglyChristmasSweaterDay or #ChristmasSweaterDay to post on social media. This is why the National Ugly Christmas Sweater Day is so popular across the world.
Source: https://nationaldaycalendar.com/national-ugly-christmas-sweater-day-third-friday-in-december/
Mosquitos!
The first thing that comes to your mind when hearing the word mosquito is probably the itchy annoying bite on your neck. But do you know why the mosquitos want to suck your blood? Scientists have discovered that there is another reason that mosquitos want to suck your blood. Even though they suck your blood to get protein for their babies, the blood you have in your body also works as a cool, and refreshing drink for mosquitos. They tend to be a lot more aggressive if they are dehydrated. Because they lay their eggs in the water, they tend to spread more diseases if the water is polluted. This is why mosquitos want to suck your blood.
Source: https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/the-other-reason-mosquitoes-want-to-suck-your-blood/
The Invention of the Single Sliced Pizza
Every second, Americans eat bout 350 slices per second! But how did it even get invented? Well, you know that America is made of immigrants, right? 4 million out of the 20 million people that immigrate to America are Italian. They traveled west and went to suburbia, which injected gooey cheese and tomato sauce that we put on our everyday pizza. Since they have so many pizza and so many American pizzerias, they invented the single slice pizza. This enabled hectic operators to eat on the go and could be done a lot quicker. This is how the single sliced pizza was invented.
Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-is-pizza-so-popular-in-the-u.s/
WW3
Relations with Iraq were destroyed when the US launched a drone strike near Baghdad’s international airport on 1/3/20. The Parliament voted to expel US forces from the country. Iraq leaders are angry about the US drone strike.
American Airlines pilots sue to stop flights to China
Ever since the coronavirus outbreak, the U.S. pilots are suing the airlines and most pilots refuse to fly to China. The virus is a public health emergency. Several international carriers have stopped flying to China. The U.S. has not canceled any U.S.-China flights.
Source: https://www.washingtontimes.com/news/2020/jan/30/american-airlines-pilots-sue-over-china-flights/
Simple Blood Tests Could Revolutionize Cancer Treatment
Dolbier was surprised to learn that the medical center was part of a research trial that would analyze tiny fragments of cancer DNA that the tumor had shed in her blood. Partially thanks to therapies, the American Cancer Society announced earlier this year the biggest single-year drop in cancer mortality, between 2016 and 2017. Sequencing machines could analyze fetal DNA in the mother’s blood and detect a baby’s risk of Down syndrome in addition to several other genetic disorders as early as nine weeks into a pregnancy.
Megalodons!
Researchers say that the 60-80 feet shark was extinct even before humans were born. The largest megalodon tooth measures around 7 inches (17.8 centimeters) in length, which is almost three times longer than those of great white sharks. That giant size led ancient peoples to theorize about the creatures' origins. "Original calculations greatly overestimated the size of megalodon," Marty Becker, a William Paterson University Professor of environmental science who studies shark paleontology said. Megalodon teeth have been found on every continent except Antarctica. Megalodon may have gone extinct when these seas dried up, the ice age began and water was locked up at the poles, according to Discovery. The shark either starved or was frozen into extinction. It may have even eaten other sharks, according to Discovery.
https://www.livescience.com/63361-megalodon-facts.html
Married Off-Duty Police Officers Cut Date Night Short to Stop Armed Robber at Restaurant
There were two police officers who were on a date. When they were about to finish eating, a thief came and was about to steal money. They chased after the thief and the thief cornered himself. Since they first shared dinner at Raising Cane’s on their wedding night, Chase and Nicole McKeown say they have been going out on weekly date nights at the recommendation of their local church—although this most recent evening was apparently the most interesting by far.
https://www.goodnewsnetwork.org/married-cops-having-date-night-stop-armed-restaurant-robber/
A heartwarming story
A 2-year-old boy’s simple gesture of love towards a pizza delivery driver has generated a ripple effect of kindness for the man and his family. Last week, Lindsey Sheely was receiving a pizza delivery order at her home in West Warwick, Rhode Island, when her son Cohen felt compelled to run out to the driver on the porch and offer him a hug as a thank you for their dinner. Catterson’s GoFundMe campaign to raise money for his daughter’s funeral expenses has surged past its original goal, garnering more than $28,000 in donations.
https://www.goodnewsnetwork.org/2-year-old-hugs-grieving-delivery-driver-who-just-lost-his-daughter/
Whales help against climate change
Great blue whales—and their poo—have on climate change. It is all due to the control of whale fecal matter in the diets of the tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. The top ocean layer “fecal plumes” provide a key food source for phytoplankton which feeds on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur.“At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Chiami. Dr.Chiami suggests that since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.
Whales help against climate change
- Remember to capitalize all the words in the title unless there are particles such as “the” or “of.”
Edited title: Whales Help Against Climate Change
Great blue whales—and their poo—have on climate change.
- This sentence is taken directly from this source: https://www.goodnewsnetwork.org/whales-feces-could-significantly-combat-climate-change/. If you are quoting directly from the source, include quotation marks before and after the quote. Otherwise, paraphrase and write this information out in your own words. Do not take direct phrases from a source without crediting the source — this is plagiarism. This sentence is also incomplete. What do great blue whales and their feces have on climate change? A more formal term to use for “poo” would be “feces.”
Edited sentence: Great blue whales — and their feces — have an effect on climate change.
It is all due to the control of whale fecal matter in the diets of the tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton.
- Again, this sentence is plagiarized. You have to change more than a few words — you have to paraphrase or use all your own words to explain this information. Define “it.” Is “it” the effect that whales’ fecal matter has on climate change? I edited this sentence for better flow. “It is all due to” can be shortened to “This is because.”
Edited sentence: This is because the whales’ fecal matter is controlled in the diet of tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton.
The top ocean layer “fecal plumes” provide a key food source for phytoplankton which feeds on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur.
- Again, this is plagiarism. More than one phytoplankton is being talked about here, so “feeds” does not need an “s.”
Edited sentence: The “fecal plumes” at the top ocean layer provide a key food source for the phytoplankton which feed on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur.
“At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Chiami.
- You should inform the reader who “Chiami” is. Is Chiami a scientist or do they have another occupation? I also noticed that “Dr. Chiami” is written in the next sentence, so make sure that the name is consistent throughout the article. If a person uses a title such as “Dr.” always be sure to include it.
Edited sentence: “At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Dr. Chiami.
Dr.Chiami suggests that since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.
- Include a space after “Dr.” Again, most of this sentence is plagiarized from the same source.
Edited sentence: According to Dr. Chiami, “since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.”
- These sentences copy from the source, almost all word for word. Do not plagiarize the words of others — you must use your own words. Credit the source properly. Also, provide the source of the article otherwise the reader will not know where the information is from. I also need to check the source. Make sure that your article has six sentences.
Fully edited article:
Whales Help Against Climate Change
Great blue whales — and their feces — have an effect on climate change. This is because the whales’ fecal matter is controlled in the diet of tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. The “fecal plumes” at the top ocean layer provide a key food source for the phytoplankton which feed on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur. “At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Dr. Chiami. According to Dr. Chiami, “since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.”
Original article:
Whales help against climate change
Great blue whales—and their poo—have on climate change. It is all due to the control of whale fecal matter in the diets of the tiny ocean residents called phytoplankton. The top ocean layer “fecal plumes” provide a key food source for phytoplankton which feeds on non-organic nutrients like nitrates, phosphates, and sulfur.“At a minimum, even a 1% increase in phytoplankton productivity thanks to whale activity would capture hundreds of millions of tons of additional CO2 a year, equivalent to the sudden appearance of 2 billion mature trees,” writes Chiami. Dr.Chiami suggests that since phytoplankton populations expand wherever whales are, a significant effort should be made to combat climate change by encouraging the growth and protection of whale populations.
