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Harry Potter author JK Rowling has launched an online Potter hub to keep children educated and entertained during the coronavirus pandemic.parents, teachers, and carers working to keep children amused and interested while we’re on lockdown might need a bit of magic “Rowling said as she announced the launch.
 
  
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One negative thing about participating social distancing is is you have to stay 6 feet away from people so that means you can not go near your friends but the proactive part is that you wont get the coved 19
 
  
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Of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to the amazingly humongous, aquatic mammal.
  
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Super moons are differnt from the regular moon.One way a super moon is different from a regular is Because a super moon is closer to the earth the regular moon.Another way the super moon is different from the normal moon is because the super moon is bigger and brighter than the regular moon that is why the regular moon and The super moon are differnnt.
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        Of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on earth compares to the size of the whale. Well except for the earth its self and the ocean. It is apparently 82 feet 8,000-12,000 and up to 330,000 lbs. furthermore the whale eats up to 6,000 lbs of krillin in only one day! It is also one of the few mammals that live in the water. In addition it breaths trough the hole on top of the body and that hole is called the blow hole It sends water trough that hole to breath but it needs to be above the water not under it. The whales were also evolved Millions of years ago.
  
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Additionally the whales have been on the endangered list since 1987 all over the world whales were hunted for their blubber and their oil. Currently Japanese people also hunt whales for their meat and sometimes they hunt them for traditions.
  
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In conclusion nothing on the earth is. Bigger than a whale well no animal is bigger than the whale well no animal exept if you count the prehistoric time animals. It is also one of the mammals that live in the water also it is one of the animals that are in the endangered list.
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One way a super moon is different from a regular is Because a super moon is close to the earth the regular moon.
 
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<br> - I like that your sentences fit with your opening sentence! Try to read each sentence out loud to make sure that you don't accidentally leave out words when you type.
 
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<br> - Edited for spelling, grammar, and capitalization; One way a super moon is different from a regular moon is that a super moon is closer to Earth compared to the regular moon.
 
  
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Another way the super moon is different from the normal moon is because the super moon is bigger and briter than the regular moon and that is why the regular moon and The super moon are differnnt.
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<br> - You stated a fact and concluded the paragraph is the same sentence, so I am separating them into two. I am switching up the wording so that it means the same thing, but doesn't say the word "different" because it is in every other sentence. You did a great job staying on task and only writing relevant information!
 
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<br> Edited for spelling, grammar, and capitalization; Another way the super moon is different from the regular moon is that it is also bigger and brighter. In conclusion, that is why the super moon and regular moon cannot be classified as the same.
 
  
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Overall, nice job following the structure and staying on task within the paragraph. The main things to work on for next time are minor spelling issues. If a word has a red line underneath it after you type, then it is a good idea to check the spelling. Great job!
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Today i am going to explain about bees here are the things i am going to explain about bees were they live what they eat and last of all what they produce
  
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The original habitats of the honey bee are tropical climates and heavily forested areas. Honey bees can thrive in natural environments. Though they prefer to live in woodlands ,orchards, meadows and other areas where flowering plants or abundant. Bees collect honey and nectar which produce energy. So bees particularly get energy from honey and nectar
  
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Super moons are different from the regular moon. One way a super moon is different from a regular moon is that a super moon is closer to Earth compared to the regular moon. Another way the super moon is different from the regular moon is that it is also bigger and brighter. In conclusion, that is why the super moon and regular moon cannot be classified as the same.  
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Bees eat nectar and pollen collected from older bees who have strong flying muscles some older bees gather nectar which they store in an elastic pouch ‘’their stomach’’ other older bees collect the honey by packing them in ‘’baskets’’ their rear legs.  
  
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In conclusion bees collect pollen and nectar which apparently gives them energy. Bees live in woodlands and orchards.
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Super moons are different from the regular moon. One way a super moon is different from a regular moon is that a super moon is closer to earth compared to the regular moon.Another way the super moon is different from the regular moon is that it is also bigger and brighter.I conclusion, that Is why the super moon and the regular moon cannot be classified as the same.
 

Latest revision as of 19:03, 24 August 2020

Tedh’s writing page 2020 

                                                                             Essay on wales

Of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to the amazingly humongous, aquatic mammal. 

        Of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on earth compares to the size of the whale. Well except for the earth its self and the ocean. It is apparently 82 feet 8,000-12,000 and up to 330,000 lbs. furthermore the whale eats up to 6,000 lbs of krillin in only one day! It is also one of the few mammals that live in the water. In addition it breaths trough the hole on top of the body and that hole is called the blow hole It sends water trough that hole to breath but it needs to be above the water not under it. The whales were also evolved Millions of years ago.

Additionally the whales have been on the endangered list since 1987 all over the world whales were hunted for their blubber and their oil. Currently Japanese people also hunt whales for their meat and sometimes they hunt them for traditions.

In conclusion nothing on the earth is. Bigger than a whale well no animal is bigger than the whale well no animal exept if you count the prehistoric time animals. It is also one of the mammals that live in the water also it is one of the animals that are in the endangered list. 


                                                                             Essay on bees

Today i am going to explain about bees here are the things i am going to explain about bees were they live what they eat and last of all what they produce

The original habitats of the honey bee are tropical climates and heavily forested areas. Honey bees can thrive in natural environments. Though they prefer to live in woodlands ,orchards, meadows and other areas where flowering plants or abundant. Bees collect honey and nectar which produce energy. So bees particularly get energy from honey and nectar

Bees eat nectar and pollen collected from older bees who have strong flying muscles some older bees gather nectar which they store in an elastic pouch ‘’their stomach’’ other older bees collect the honey by packing them in ‘’baskets’’ their rear legs.

In conclusion bees collect pollen and nectar which apparently gives them energy. Bees live in woodlands and orchards.