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Of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to the amazingly humongous, aquatic mammal.
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      The boy was able to get out of the Stomach of the fish by cutting of a piece of the liver, therefore, the fish vomited up the boy. According to the text,”... he became very hungry, the boy looked around and saw the fishes liver hanging right over his head. Thinking it was dried meat, he tried to cut of a piece with a muscle shell he had been playing with before and still held in his. Wile the operation sickens in the stomach it vomited the boy out. So, the boy got hungry and cut a piece of the fishes liver and the fish vomited him out. In conclusion, the boy was able to get out of the fish because it vomited him out.
 
  
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        Of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on earth compares to the size of the whale. Well except for the earth its self and the ocean. It is apparently 82 feet 8,000-12,000 and up to 330,000 lbs. furthermore the whale eats up to 6,000 lbs of krillin in only one day! It is also one of the few mammals that live in the water. In addition it breaths trough the hole on top of the body and that hole is called the blow hole It sends water trough that hole to breath but it needs to be above the water not under it. The whales were also evolved Millions of years ago. 
  
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Additionally the whales have been on the endangered list since 1987 all over the world whales were hunted for their blubber and their oil. Currently Japanese people also hunt whales for their meat and sometimes they hunt them for traditions.
  
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  The boy was able to get out of the Stomach of the fish by cutting of a piece of the liver, therefore, the fish vomited up the boy.
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In conclusion nothing on the earth is. Bigger than a whale well no animal is bigger than the whale well no animal exept if you count the prehistoric time animals. It is also one of the mammals that live in the water also it is one of the animals that are in the endangered list.
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***Change "the" liver to "its liver." Try: "
 
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According to the text,”... he became very hungry, the boy looked around and saw the fishes liver hanging right over his head.
 
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*** Edited for spelling. The plural for fish is still fish, not fishes. Additionally, the liver "belongs" to the fish, therefore it's possessive. It should be changed to: "fish's..."
 
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Wile the operation sickens in the stomach it vomited the boy out. So, the boy got hungry and cut a piece of the fishes liver and the fish vomited him out
 
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*** I'm not quite sure what you were trying to say here. Let's change it to: "The boy made the fish sick when his liver was cut open and it vomited the boy out."
 
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The boy was able to get out of the fish's stomach by cutting off a piece of its liver, which caused the fish to vomit up the boy. According to the text,”... he became very hungry. The boy looked around and saw the fish's liver hanging right over his head. Thinking it was dried meat, he tried to cut off a piece with a muscle shell he had been playing with before and still held in his hand. The boy made the fish sick when his liver was cut open and it vomited the boy out. So, the boy got hungry and cut a piece of the fishes liver and the fish vomited him out.
 
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The monkey played the song the scarecrow on his fiddle the music was sooooo bad that the wolf admired that the fiddle was not actual his and that the bow and arrow belonged to the monkey.       
 
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July 29
 
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In my opinion the farmer was surprised because he actually did all the work and then the crow was on the bulls head and the crow told the farmer it was a hard day and then the farmer asked why afterwards the crow said because i did all the work the farmer said really and the crow said yeah and flew of laughing.
 
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In my opinion I think that the police officers in the story were like not brave at all because on of the police officers like ran away like literally ran of leaving his partner behind wile his partner took out his stout I think that’s some sort of weapon oh and the robber is like way more brave than the cops because when the robber saw the cop he didn’t run of instead he took out a sword like a literal sword I think it’s like ya know the swords in the ninja movies
 

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Tedh’s writing page 2020 

                                                                             Essay on wales

Of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to the amazingly humongous, aquatic mammal. 

        Of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on earth compares to the size of the whale. Well except for the earth its self and the ocean. It is apparently 82 feet 8,000-12,000 and up to 330,000 lbs. furthermore the whale eats up to 6,000 lbs of krillin in only one day! It is also one of the few mammals that live in the water. In addition it breaths trough the hole on top of the body and that hole is called the blow hole It sends water trough that hole to breath but it needs to be above the water not under it. The whales were also evolved Millions of years ago.

Additionally the whales have been on the endangered list since 1987 all over the world whales were hunted for their blubber and their oil. Currently Japanese people also hunt whales for their meat and sometimes they hunt them for traditions.

In conclusion nothing on the earth is. Bigger than a whale well no animal is bigger than the whale well no animal exept if you count the prehistoric time animals. It is also one of the mammals that live in the water also it is one of the animals that are in the endangered list.