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| − | I think the meaning of"Company" is a military force. I think this because the article talks about soldiers. Also the article mentions something about a boy believing that the blessed land calling upon her sons to defend her from the parricidal blow of the traitor.
| + | The story is mainly about dandelions because the story says many different ways to use it like jewelry and it is beautiful. |
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| − | I think the meaning of"Company" is a military force. I think this because the article talks about soldiers.
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| − | ***Edited for spacing and fluidity: I think the meaning of "Company" is a military force because the article talks about soldiers.
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| − | ***Add a space before "Company." You can combine these two sentences. This also clarifies that "Company" is an article.
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| − | <br>Also the article mentions something about a boy believing that the blessed land calling upon her sons to defend her from the parricidal blow of the traitor.
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| − | ***Edited for comma and clarity: Also, the article mentions something about a boy believing that the blessed land calling upon her sons to defend her from the parricidal blow of the traitor.
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| − | ***Add a comma after "also." Please revise this sentence and clarify who is "her" in this sentence.
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| − | I think the meaning of "Company" is a military force because the article talks about soldiers. Also, the article mentions something about a boy believing that the blessed land calling upon her sons to defend her from the parricidal blow of the traitor.
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| − | ***Please revise the second sentence (clarify the people).
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| − | Edited by Ashley Leung
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Revision as of 01:54, 12 May 2020
Meku's Writing Page
The story is mainly about dandelions because the story says many different ways to use it like jewelry and it is beautiful.
