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| − | Soapsuds are used for destroying roses in the story. People use soapsuds to destroy roses and wash them with soapsuds. According to the text ," the human beings do not like the roses in the story. They would pursue and destroy them with soapsuds." This shows how soapsuds are being used for in the story.
| + | Gerda's trip was a very difficult one because The rope sloped nearly down to the ground. According to the text ," the door was so low that there family had to in on their hands and knees when they went in and out." this shows how Gerda's trip was a very difficult one |
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| − | Soapsuds are used for destroying roses in the story.
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| − | <br>People use soapsuds to destroy roses and wash them with soapsuds.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity: People use soapsuds to wash the roses and destroy them.
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| − | ***Place the 'wash roses" first because you already talked about destroying roses in the first sentence.
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| − | <br>According to the text ," the human beings do not like the roses in the story. They would pursue and destroy them with soapsuds."
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| − | ***Edited for quotation mark (spacing) and capitalization: According to the text, "The human beings do not like the roses in the story. They would pursue and destroy them with soapsuds."
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| − | ***Correct the spacing. Capitalize the first word in the quote.
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| − | <br>This shows how soapsuds are being used for in the story.
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| − | ***Edited for clarity: This shows how soapsuds are being used in the story.
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| − | ***Delete "for." Alternatively, you can write, "This shows what the soapsuds are being used for in the story."
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| − | Soapsuds are used for destroying roses in the story. People use soapsuds to wash the roses and destroy them. According to the text, "The human beings do not like the roses in the story. They would pursue and destroy them with soapsuds." This shows how soapsuds are being used in the story.
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| − | ***Please work on your quotation marks and spacing.
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| − | Edited by Ashley Leung
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Revision as of 20:20, 7 May 2020
Pala's Writing Page
Gerda's trip was a very difficult one because The rope sloped nearly down to the ground. According to the text ," the door was so low that there family had to in on their hands and knees when they went in and out." this shows how Gerda's trip was a very difficult one
