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| − | The princesses were different form each other. The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid. | + | The snails acting like humans because the white snails adopted a common snail. This is because the white snails are old and don't have a child of there own. Also the white snails are the last of there kind in the place they are living in. |
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| − | The princesses were different form each other.
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| − | ***Edited for spelling: The princesses were different from each other.
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| − | ***Misspelled "from."
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| − | <br> The youngest princesses love the sun and she has a garden that looks like the sun and while the other princesses decorate their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks.
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| − | ***Edited for grammar (singular/plural, run-on sentence): The youngest princess loves the sun and has a garden that looks like the sun while the other princesses decorated their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks.
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| − | ***The youngest princess is singular. To avoid having a run-on sentence, take out the "she" in "she has a garden." No need for the "and" before "while."
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| − | <br>Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid.
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| − | ***Good!
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| − | The princesses were different from each other. The youngest princess loves the sun and has a garden that looks like the sun while the other princesses decorated their gardens with things they found in shipwrecks. Her other sisters made a flower patch in the shape of a whale and a mermaid.
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| − | ***Overall, good! Please focus on your singular/plurals and avoid creating run-on sentences.
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| − | Edited by Ashley Leung
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Revision as of 22:59, 30 April 2020
Meku's Writing Page
The snails acting like humans because the white snails adopted a common snail. This is because the white snails are old and don't have a child of there own. Also the white snails are the last of there kind in the place they are living in.
