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All of the people who enter the program are most likely not able to become a astronaut .In the text it says that to many people are wanting to become a astronaut so the they made up a plan were that if you join the program you cannot not join the astronaut thingy and 12000 people want to become a astronaut. | All of the people who enter the program are most likely not able to become a astronaut .In the text it says that to many people are wanting to become a astronaut so the they made up a plan were that if you join the program you cannot not join the astronaut thingy and 12000 people want to become a astronaut. | ||
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| + | This graduation and other graduations are different in Tokyo because of the corona virus people can not go to school to graduate so this guy named professor Shugo YanaKa came up with a avatar graduation ceremony The event which was held at Tokyo’s Hotel grand palace on March 28,2020, started with university president Kenichi Omae delivering an uplifting Commencement speech to the students attending Via Video conferencing platform zoom .Then began the virtual graduation ceremony. | ||
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Tedh's Writing Page
April 2 Harry Potter author JK Rowling has launched an online Potter hub to keep children educated and entertained during the coronavirus pandemic.parents, teachers, and carers working to keep children amused and interested while we’re on lockdown might need a bit of magic “Rowling said as she announced the launch.
April 3
One negative thing about participating social distancing is is you have to stay 6 feet away from people so that means you can not go near your friends but the proactive part is that you wont get the coved 19
April 4
Super moons are differnt from the regular moon.One way a super moon is different from a regular is Because a super moon is closer to the earth the regular moon.Another way the super moon is different from the normal moon is because the super moon is bigger and brighter than the regular moon that is why the regular moon and The super moon are differnnt.
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Super moons are differnt from the regular moon.
- Edited for spelling; Super moons are different from the regular moon.
One way a super moon is different from a regular is Because a super moon is close to the earth the regular moon.
- I like that your sentences fit with your opening sentence! Try to read each sentence out loud to make sure that you don't accidentally leave out words when you type.
- Edited for spelling, grammar, and capitalization; One way a super moon is different from a regular moon is that a super moon is closer to Earth compared to the regular moon.
Another way the super moon is different from the normal moon is because the super moon is bigger and briter than the regular moon and that is why the regular moon and The super moon are differnnt.
- You stated a fact and concluded the paragraph is the same sentence, so I am separating them into two. I am switching up the wording so that it means the same thing, but doesn't say the word "different" because it is in every other sentence. You did a great job staying on task and only writing relevant information!
Edited for spelling, grammar, and capitalization; Another way the super moon is different from the regular moon is that it is also bigger and brighter. In conclusion, that is why the super moon and regular moon cannot be classified as the same.
Overall, nice job following the structure and staying on task within the paragraph. The main things to work on for next time are minor spelling issues. If a word has a red line underneath it after you type, then it is a good idea to check the spelling. Great job!
Fully Edited Version:
Super moons are different from the regular moon. One way a super moon is different from a regular moon is that a super moon is closer to Earth compared to the regular moon. Another way the super moon is different from the regular moon is that it is also bigger and brighter. In conclusion, that is why the super moon and regular moon cannot be classified as the same.
Edited by Grace Drake
Edit Super moons are different from the regular moon. One way a super moon is different from a regular moon is that a super moon is closer to earth compared to the regular moon.Another way the super moon is different from the regular moon is that it is also bigger and brighter.I conclusion, that Is why the super moon and the regular moon cannot be classified as the same
April 15
All of the people who enter the program are most likely not able to become a astronaut .In the text it says that to many people are wanting to become a astronaut so the they made up a plan were that if you join the program you cannot not join the astronaut thingy and 12000 people want to become a astronaut.
April 16
This graduation and other graduations are different in Tokyo because of the corona virus people can not go to school to graduate so this guy named professor Shugo YanaKa came up with a avatar graduation ceremony The event which was held at Tokyo’s Hotel grand palace on March 28,2020, started with university president Kenichi Omae delivering an uplifting Commencement speech to the students attending Via Video conferencing platform zoom .Then began the virtual graduation ceremony.
