The World for Freedom

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There are many different games you can play & do with your family even when your home. Two of the ones I think is best fun are jigsaw puzzles & read aloud. You can play jigsaws puzzles for making your brain think hard for where the pieces might go & making your reading better when you read to your siblings/ family members out loud. In the text it says " they're also for learning skills & lessons such as shape recognition, patience and delayed gratification. Also in the text it states that " reading aloud is beneficial for older & younger children, as it helps them grapple with difficult issues, reduce stress, improves vocabulary & comprehension & introduces them to literature they might otherwise ignore. Jigsaw puzzles & read aloud are helpful and I think is best fun

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There are many different games you can play & do with your family even when your home.
- Typically in written paragraphs and essays we would write out "and" instead of using "&".
- Edited for grammar; There are many different games to play and activities to do with your family even when you're home.

Two of the ones I think is best fun are jigsaw puzzles & read aloud.
- Edited for grammar; Two activities that I think are the most fun are doing jigsaw puzzles and reading aloud.

You can play jigsaws puzzles for making your brain think hard for where the pieces might go & making your reading better when you read to your siblings/ family members out loud.
- I like that you stated what your favorite activities were and then elaborated on that fact in the next sentence! In order to make sure the sentence flows naturally, try reading each sentence out loud after you type it.
- Edited for word choice; Jigsaw puzzles are great for exercising your brain when you think about where the pieces might go, and reading aloud to your family improves your reading skills.

In the text it says "they're also for learning skills & lessons such as shape recognition, patience and delayed gratification.
- Make sure when you start a quote with a quotation mark, you put another one at the end of the quote to close it. Also, you do not have to use a whole quote! It is okay to pick a small important piece and paraphrase the rest.
- Edited for word choice and paraphrasing; The article states that jigsaw puzzles help with skills like "shape recognition, patience and delayed gratification".

Also in the text it states that " reading aloud is beneficial for older & younger children, as it helps them grapple with difficult issues, reduce stress, improves vocabulary & comprehension & introduces them to literature they might otherwise ignore.
- Since we already used one quote in this paragraph, we should paraphrase the rest so it is mostly in your own words. Quotes are great for enhancing your words, but in such a short piece they shouldn't take over.
- Edited to paraphrase; Additionally, reading out loud is great for children of all ages because it helps improve emotional issues and learning obstacles, and also allows them to read new books.

Jigsaw puzzles & read aloud are helpful and I think is best fun
- Don't forget the punctuation at the end of a sentence! Nice job tying it all together.
- Edited for grammar and punctuation; Doing jigsaw puzzles and reading aloud are helpful activities, and I think that they are fun too.

I like your instinct to explain facts that you state with evidence, but just make sure that the bulk of the sentence is in your own words. Also, don't forget that you need to have the source link underneath so the reader can see where you've quoted from.

Fully Edited Version:

There are many different games to play and activities to do with your family even when you're home. Two activities that I think are the most fun are doing jigsaw puzzles and reading aloud. Jigsaw puzzles are great for exercising your brain when you think about where the pieces might go, and reading aloud to your family improves your reading skills. The article states that jigsaw puzzles help with skills like "shape recognition, patience and delayed gratification". Additionally, reading out loud is great for children of all ages because it helps improve emotional issues and learning obstacles, and also allows them to read new books. Doing jigsaw puzzles and reading aloud are helpful activities, and I think that they are fun too.

Edited by Grace Drake

There are many reasons why they postponed the 2020 Japan's Summer Olympic Games. The ICO decided to let the athletes stay healthy for order to be safe. In the text it states that " the ICO and Japan's prime minister, Shinzo Abe, made the decision to safeguard the health of the athletes, everybody involve in the Olympic Games, and the international community, an IOC statement said. The 2020 Japan's Summer Olympic Games postponed.

JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children. One example is that it can help them enjoying what they're reading of their favorite books. Another example is that they can get a little magic and get the welcome back to hogwards. The se are the reasons why JK Rowling thinks her new webpage will help lots of children.

There are positive reasons that you should practice social distancing.You should stay home to limit the spread of the coronavirus. According to the text it states to "avoiding mass gathering and maintaining distancing whenever possible. Practicing social distancing is a good reason to practice.

The main idea of the passage is that animals finally get a chance to leave their homes and roam freely. They start going out of their cages and go to the urban areas. In the text it states that, " the absence of cruse ships is bringing large numbers of dolphins to the Italian port of Caglian while flocks of wild turkeys are roaming the streets of Oakland, California." The animals roaming the places and don't stay in their homes can be harmful.

The birds are migrating south. The main reason is because the weather is getting colder and food. In the text it states that, " during the fall, the timespan for migration is much broader since birds typically start leaving once the temperature drops and there's a lack of food." The birds try to migrate to find food to eat.

There are differences of the govenor and the mayor's opinion. Cuomo thinks that there should be school when De Blasio should not have school. The text states that, " NYC schools will not reopen this academic year, mayor bill De Blasio announced Saturday. Also in the text it states that Gov. Andrew Cuomo said the mayor had been premature in saying the saying the city's more than 1 million public school students would continue to learn remotely at least through June 26, the scheduled at the school year. The govenor and the mayor as the difference of going to school and not going to school.

All people can't enter the program to become astronauts. One example is that NASA is requiring higher education. In the text it states," this time NASA is requiring higher levels of education." Another example is that there are challenging parts for training. Also in the text it states," there are many challenging parts to the astronaut training, and the canidates must successfuly complete them all." Astronauts all can't enter the program because there are challenging part to successes.