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| − | This is the main idea from the story Animals Play around While Humans stay Inside. The main idea when animals get there own space while humans stay inside.According to the text'' the coronavirus pandemic made every thing change by letting animals out of zoos while humans stay inside.''This is what the main idea is for the story Animals Play around While Humans Stay Inside.
| + | This is main reason why birds are migrating south. The birds are migrating south because during the spring the males have on their beautiful plumage to attract mates. According to the text,''the birds are anxious to reach their breeding grounds and begin mating.'' This is what the main reason that the birds are migrating south. |
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| − | This is the main idea from the story Animals Play around While Humans stay Inside. The main idea when animals get there own space while humans stay inside.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity (combine two sentences) and title format and vocabulary ("there" vs. "their): This is the main idea of the story ''Animals Play Around While Humans Stay Inside'': animals get their own space when humans stay inside.
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| − | ***Since these two sentences are repetitive, combine them using a colon mark (:). When writing the title of a story (book), capitalize all of the words (except for articles, coordinating conjunctions, short words, etc...). If this is a novel, italicize the title. If it's a short story, you can put quotation marks around the title. "There" → "their." "While" can be switched to "when" at the end.
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| − | <br>According to the text'' the coronavirus pandemic made every thing change by letting animals out of zoos while humans stay inside.''
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| − | ***Edited for punctuation (quotation mark) and capitalization: According to the text, "The coronavirus pandemic made everything change by letting animals out of zoos while humans stay inside."
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| − | ***Comma and space before the first quotation mark. Also capitalize the word after the quotation mark ("The"). I'm assuming "everything" should be spelled together, but maybe the text spells it separated.
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| − | <br>This is what the main idea is for the story Animals Play around While Humans Stay Inside.
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| − | ***Edited for capitalization and fluidity and word choice: This is the main idea of ''Animals Play Around While Humans Stay Inside.''
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| − | ***This sentence basically repeats your first sentence, so please change up your concluding sentences in the future. Again, capitalize all the words in the title and either italicize it or place quotation marks. When you talk about main ideas, you use the word "of" rather than "for" → "The main idea of this books is..." , NOT "The main idea for this book..."
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| − | '''Final Edited Version:'''
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| − | This is the main idea of the story ''Animals Play Around While Humans Stay Inside'': animals get their own space when humans stay inside. According to the text, "The coronavirus pandemic made everything change by letting animals out of zoos while humans stay inside." This is the main idea of ''Animals Play Around While Humans Stay Inside.''
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| − | ***Please write more in the future (your own words). Know the different between "there" and "their." Learn how to write a book/story title.
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| − | Edited by Ashley Leung
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