The World for Freedom

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   Two reasons why the Eastern Tiger Salamanders are reappearing in Maryland because they are hard to see and because people found a breeding place where the salamanders can repopulate their kind. In the text it states,"They are called “mole salamanders” because they dig underground burrows in loose, sandy soil, where they spend most of their lives. That means they are hard to see in the wild." The salamanders are hard to see so it won't be easy to catch unless you have good eyesight. According to the text it states, "Schlimm recently explored one of several seasonal wetland areas on Maryland’s Eastern Shore, where extensive vegetation management over the past decade helped restore natural breeding habitats of these salamanders." Overall, since people have found some place where the salamanders can repopulate themselves the population can grow. 

Social distancing is negative and positive during this time. In the text it states, "
By keeping space between themselves and others, people 'can reduce the likelihood that the virus can be transferred' ". This is a positive reason of why we do social distancing, so we don't take the effect of the virus. According to the text it states, "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes." This is a negative reason of why we do social distancing, even though we sit at a distance the sneezing and coughing could still get to us.

For fluidity: During this time, social distancing is both negative and positive.

                 Good!

In the text, it states, "By keeping space between themselves and others, people can reduce the likelihood that the virus can be transferred."

               Nice work!

For fluidity, vocabulary, clarity: This is an advantage of social distancing: we are less likely to come into contact with the virus.

According to the text, it states, "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes."

For fluidity: This is a negative aspect of social distancing. Even though we are at a distance from others, the virus could still get to us through sneezing and coughing.

Fully Edited Summary: During this time, social distancing is both negative and positive. In the text, it states, "By keeping space between themselves and others, people can reduce the likelihood that the virus can be transferred. This is an advantage of social distancing: we are less likely to come into contact with the virus. According to the text, it states, "Even standing six feet apart from one another, people can spread the virus through droplets from coughs and sneezes." This is a negative aspect of social distancing. Even though we are at a distance from others, the virus could still get to us through sneezing and coughing.

Nice work on this. If you are a little more selective and concise with your word choice, your summary would be all the more clear.

 J.K Rowling thinks her web page can help kids be educated and have some fun during this chaos. For example, the text states, "Parents, teachers, and carers working to keep children amused and interested while we're on lock down might need a bit of magic." In short, J.K Rowling thinks we can be mused by playing her web page which is really kind of her to think for kids. According to the text," During the strange times we now find ourselves in, we want to welcome you back to Hogwarts, where you will find a friendly retreat for you, your family and those you are caring for." All in all, the web page that J.K Rowling made for us will help us take off our minds during this period of time. 

J.K Rowling thinks her web page can help kids be educated and have some fun during this chaos.

                    Great hook!

For example, the text states, "Parents, teachers, and carers working to keep children amused and interested while we're on lock down might need a bit of magic."

For spelling, grammar: In short, J.K Rowling thinks we can be amused by playing on her web page, which is really kind of her to think of the kids.

According to the text, "During the strange times we now find ourselves in, we want to welcome you back to Hogwarts, where you will find a friendly retreat for you, your family and those you are caring for."

                Nice!

All in all, the web page that J.K Rowling made for us will help us take off our minds during this period of time.

Fully Edited Summary:

J.K Rowling thinks her web page can help kids be educated and have some fun during this chaos. For example, the text states, "Parents, teachers, and carers working to keep children amused and interested while we're on lock down might need a bit of magic." In short, J.K Rowling thinks we can be amused by playing on her web page, which is really kind of her to think of the kids. According to the text, "During the strange times we now find ourselves in, we want to welcome you back to Hogwarts, where you will find a friendly retreat for you, your family and those you are caring for." All in all, the web page that J.K Rowling made for us will help us take off our minds during this period of time.

You did a great job with this!

Two activities that seem the most fun are Mad Libs and Baking/Cooking. Mad Libs is fun because you get to hear funny stories that will keep your mind off everything else. The text states " Mad Libs are a hilarious way for kids to brush up on their parts of speech." In short Mad Libs are fun to switch words around. According to the text it states "Enlist your kids as sous-chefs and you'll get some extra help in the kitchen while also teaching them practical skills such as following a recipe, measurements and kitchen safety." Overall when your moms are cooking kids can help with the cooking as well as they can learn more about cooking. Children might inherit some of your cooking.

For capitalization: Two activities that seem the most fun are Mad Libs and baking/cooking.

                  Only proper nouns are capitalized!

For grammar: Mad Libs are fun because you get to hear funny stories that will keep your mind off everything else.

                Plural nouns use the word "are" (instead of "is").

For structure: The text states, "Mad Libs are a hilarious way for kids to brush up on their parts of speech."

                I just added a comma.

For fluidity: In short, Mad Libs are fun because you switch words around.

For fluidity: According to the text, you should "enlist your kids as sous-chefs and you'll get some extra help in the kitchen while also teaching them practical skills such as following a recipe, measurements, and kitchen safety."

For fluidity, grammar: Overall, when parents are in the kitchen, kids can help and also learn more about cooking. Children might also inherit some of their parents cooking skills.

Fully Edited Summary: Two activities that seem the most fun are Mad Libs and baking/cooking. Mad Libs are fun because you get to hear funny stories that will keep your mind off everything else. The text states, "Mad Libs are a hilarious way for kids to brush up on their parts of speech." In short, Mad Libs are fun because you switch words around. According to the text, you should "enlist your kids as sous-chefs and you'll get some extra help in the kitchen while also teaching them practical skills such as following a recipe, measurements, and kitchen safety." Overall, when parents are in the kitchen, kids can help and also learn more about cooking. Children might also inherit some of their parents cooking skills.

Good work!

 Some ways that a student can learn best while studying online are that the student learns how to keep track of time and the student learns to set goals for themselves. For example, in the article it states "Open your calendar and choose a predictable, reliable time that you can dedicate to watching lectures and completing assignments. This helps ensure that your courses won’t become the last thing on your to-do list. So, schedule time to study on your calendar." In short, schedules will keep your assignments on track so you won't fail. According to the article it states, " Setting a clear goal can help you stay motivated and beat procrastination. The goal should be specific and easy to measure, such as “I’ll watch all the videos in Module 2 and complete the first programming assignment.” And don’t forget to reward yourself when you make progress towards your goal!" As you can see, setting goals for the day will help students organize the student's day.

For fluidity: While studying online, a student best learns how to keep track of time and how to set goals for themselves.

For fluidity, structure: For example, the article states, "Open your calendar and choose a predictable, reliable time that you can dedicate to watching lectures and completing assignments. This helps ensure that your courses won’t become the last thing on your to-do list. So, schedule time to study on your calendar."

              Good quote!

In short, schedules will keep your assignments on track so you won't fail.

              Yes!

For fluidity: The article also states, "Setting a clear goal can help you stay motivated and beat procrastination. The goal should be specific and easy to measure, such as 'I’ll watch all the videos in Module 2 and complete the first programming assignment.' And don’t forget to reward yourself when you make progress towards your goal!"

For fluidity: As you can see, setting goals will help the students organize their day.

Fully Edited Summary: While studying online, a student best learns how to keep track of time and how to set goals for themselves. For example, the article states, "Open your calendar and choose a predictable, reliable time that you can dedicate to watching lectures and completing assignments. This helps ensure that your courses won’t become the last thing on your to-do list. So, schedule time to study on your calendar. In short, schedules will keep your assignments on track so you won't fail. The article also states, "Setting a clear goal can help you stay motivated and beat procrastination. The goal should be specific and easy to measure, such as 'I’ll watch all the videos in Module 2 and complete the first programming assignment.' And don’t forget to reward yourself when you make progress towards your goal!" As you can see, setting goals will help the students organize their day.

Good job, just try not to overload your summary with quotations!

 In order to not get the coronavirus, there are rules you need to follow. In the article it states, "Students and staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds—about the length of the “Alphabet Song”—before and after eating or after coughing or sneezing." In short, you need to wash your hands with soap for at least 20 seconds to prevent coronavirus from getting to you. According to the article it states,"As much as possible, adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces." Overall, people should try avoid touching their face to try to stop coronavirus from infecting themselves.

For fluidity: In order to avoid the coronavirus, there are rules you need to follow.

                  Good hook!

For fluidity: The article states, "Students and staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds—about the length of the “Alphabet Song”—before and after eating or after coughing or sneezing."

In short, you need to wash your hands with soap for at least 20 seconds to prevent coronavirus from getting to you.

                   Great!

For fluidity: The article also states, "As much as possible, adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces."

Missing a word, grammar, fluidity: Overall, people should try to avoid touching their faces so they are not infected by the coronavirus.

Fully Edited Summary: In order to avoid the coronavirus, there are rules you need to follow. The article states, "Students and staff alike should wash with soap and water for at least 20 seconds—about the length of the “Alphabet Song”—before and after eating or after coughing or sneezing." In short, you need to wash your hands with soap for at least 20 seconds to prevent coronavirus from getting to you. The article also states, "As much as possible, adults and children alike should practice to avoid touching their faces." Overall, people should try to avoid touching their faces so they are not infected by the coronavirus.

Nice work!