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| − | These are good reasons for practicing social distancing. Practicing social distancing is about trying to stay away from mass gathering and maintaining distance. According to the text'' even standing six feet apart the virus can still spread by coughing or sneezing. This shows how we have to practice social distancing.
| + | This is the main idea from the story Animals Play around While Humans stay Inside. The main idea when animals get there own space while humans stay inside.According to the text'' the coronavirus pandemic made every thing change by letting animals out of zoos while humans stay inside.''This is what the main idea is for the story Animals Play around While Humans Stay Inside. |
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| − | These are good reasons for practicing social distancing.
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| − | ***Edited for clarity: There are good reasons for practicing social distancing.
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| − | ***If you use "these are..." the reader would expect you to list out good reasons for social distancing (which you don't do).
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| − | <br>Practicing social distancing is about trying to stay away from mass gathering and maintaining distance.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity and plurality: Practicing social distancing is about staying away from mass gatherings and maintaining distance.
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| − | ***You can delete the "trying to" part because it's unnecessary. "Mass gathering" should be plural ("gatherings" = "events").
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| − | <br>According to the text'' even standing six feet apart the virus can still spread by coughing or sneezing.
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| − | ***Edited for punctuation (quotation marks and commas) and capitalization: According to the text, "Even standing six feet apart, the virus can still spread by coughing or sneezing."
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| − | ***Are you quoting from the text here? If not, then you don't need the quotation mark. If so, use a comma before you begin the quote and use quotation marks at the beginning and end. Make sure to capitalize the first word of the quote too.
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| − | <br>This shows how we have to practice social distancing.
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| − | ***Edited for fluidity: This shows the importance of social distancing.
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| − | ***It would be clearer to say that it shows the importance rather than that "we have to practice..."
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| − | '''Final Edited Version:''' | |
| − | There are good reasons for practicing social distancing. Practicing social distancing is about staying away from mass gatherings and maintaining distance. According to the text, "Even standing six feet apart, the virus can still spread by coughing or sneezing." This shows the importance of social distancing.
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| − | ***Please write a few more sentences next time. I feel like you can explain more about how social distancing is helpful. Work on quotation marks.
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| − | Edited by Ashley Leung
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