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Parents can become teachers during the time of the Covid-19. This is because since teachers can't talk to them face to face, the parents have to teach them the things they don't know if they ask them. Also, if they write the wrong thing, the parents have to correct them. To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19. | Parents can become teachers during the time of the Covid-19. This is because since teachers can't talk to them face to face, the parents have to teach them the things they don't know if they ask them. Also, if they write the wrong thing, the parents have to correct them. To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19. | ||
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| + | Parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19. | ||
| + | <br> - Overall, good job! Just remember that COVID-19 should be capitalized, and I'm just rearranging the wording so COVID-19 is the attention-grabber. | ||
| + | <br> - Edited for word choice; During the COVID-19 pandemic, parents can become teachers. | ||
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| + | This is because since teachers can't talk to them face to face, the parents have to teach them the things they don't know if they ask them. | ||
| + | <br> - I am omitting some "filler" words that are unneeded so your point comes across more clearly. | ||
| + | <br> - Edited for word choice and grammar; Since teachers can't talk to students face to face, their parents have to teach them and answer questions that they have. | ||
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| + | Also, if they write the wrong thing, the parents have to correct them. | ||
| + | <br> - Great job with comma placement! We only need to adjust "the parents" to "their parents", and use more specific wording because "wrong thing" is a bit too vague. | ||
| + | <br> - Edited for grammar; Also, if they wrongly complete an assignment, their parents have to correct them. | ||
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| + | To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19. | ||
| + | <br> - This ending closes your argument very well! I am only omitting "the time of" because those words are not needed for the reader to understand the sentence. | ||
| + | <br> - Edited for word choice; To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during COVID-19. | ||
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| + | Nice job! One thing to remember for next time is to be a bit more specific with your wording and try to avoid words such as "things" in descriptions. | ||
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| + | """Final Edits:""" | ||
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| + | During the COVID-19 pandemic, parents can become teachers. Since teachers can't talk to students face to face, their parents have to teach them and answer questions that they have. Also, if they wrongly complete an assignment, their parents have to correct them. To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during COVID-19. | ||
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Revision as of 01:41, 7 April 2020
Parents can become teachers during the time of the Covid-19. This is because since teachers can't talk to them face to face, the parents have to teach them the things they don't know if they ask them. Also, if they write the wrong thing, the parents have to correct them. To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19.
"""Edits:"""
Parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19.
- Overall, good job! Just remember that COVID-19 should be capitalized, and I'm just rearranging the wording so COVID-19 is the attention-grabber.
- Edited for word choice; During the COVID-19 pandemic, parents can become teachers.
This is because since teachers can't talk to them face to face, the parents have to teach them the things they don't know if they ask them.
- I am omitting some "filler" words that are unneeded so your point comes across more clearly.
- Edited for word choice and grammar; Since teachers can't talk to students face to face, their parents have to teach them and answer questions that they have.
Also, if they write the wrong thing, the parents have to correct them.
- Great job with comma placement! We only need to adjust "the parents" to "their parents", and use more specific wording because "wrong thing" is a bit too vague.
- Edited for grammar; Also, if they wrongly complete an assignment, their parents have to correct them.
To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during the time of Covid-19.
- This ending closes your argument very well! I am only omitting "the time of" because those words are not needed for the reader to understand the sentence.
- Edited for word choice; To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during COVID-19.
Nice job! One thing to remember for next time is to be a bit more specific with your wording and try to avoid words such as "things" in descriptions.
"""Final Edits:"""
During the COVID-19 pandemic, parents can become teachers. Since teachers can't talk to students face to face, their parents have to teach them and answer questions that they have. Also, if they wrongly complete an assignment, their parents have to correct them. To sum it up, this is how parents can become teachers during COVID-19.
Edited by Grace Drake
