Zila - Revision history

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← Older revision		Revision as of 03:35, 9 June 2020
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	Beth was scared or frightened because she felt bad about her sisters having to watch her open the gifts she got. This made her feel scared that they might not like it. The text states'', but it was dreadful to have you sit looking at me while I opened the bundles''. By this you know that Beth was scared her sisters might envy her and not like her. Another reason why she was scared was she was getting all the attention for the whole day and got presents. The text states'', I used to be so frightened when it was my turn to sit in the chair with the crown on and see you all come marching round to give the presents, with a kiss''. So, because of this she felt that her sisters might have hated her getting attention while they have to watch her.		Beth was scared or frightened because she felt bad about her sisters having to watch her open the gifts she got. This made her feel scared that they might not like it. The text states'', but it was dreadful to have you sit looking at me while I opened the bundles''. By this you know that Beth was scared her sisters might envy her and not like her. Another reason why she was scared was she was getting all the attention for the whole day and got presents. The text states'', I used to be so frightened when it was my turn to sit in the chair with the crown on and see you all come marching round to give the presents, with a kiss''. So, because of this she felt that her sisters might have hated her getting attention while they have to watch her.
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		+	For clarity: '''Beth was frightened because she felt bad that her sisters had to watch her open her gifts.'''
		+	Sentences become clear when you use the least amount of words as possible to convey the exact point you are trying to make!
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		+	For clarity: '''This made her scared that her sisters might not like her anymore.'''
		+	Make sure you include proper nouns when necessary, otherwise the sentence becomes confusing!
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		+	For structure: '''The text states, "But it was dreadful to have you sit looking at me while I opened the bundles."'''
		+	Look at quote placement!
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		+	For clarity, fluidity: '''From this quote, it is clear that Beth was scared her sisters might envy and dislike her.'''
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		+	For clarity: '''Another reason why she was scared was that she got presents and attention all day.'''
		+	Read your sentences out loud! Sometimes changing the order of the nouns in a sentence adds to the clarity.
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		+	For structure: '''The text states, "I used to be so frightened when it was my turn to sit in the chair with the crown on and see you all come marching round to give the presents, with a kiss."
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		+	For clarity: '''So, because of that, she felt that her sisters might have hated her getting all the attention while they stood by and watched.'''
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		+	Fully Edited Summary:
		+	'''Beth was frightened because she felt bad that her sisters had to watch her open her gifts. This made her scared that her sisters might not like her anymore. The text states, "But it was dreadful to have you sit looking at me while I opened the bundles." From this quote, it is clear that Beth was scared her sisters might envy and dislike her. Another reason why she was scared was that she got presents and attention all day. The text states, "I used to be so frightened when it was my turn to sit in the chair with the crown on and see you all come marching round to give the presents, with a kiss." So, because of that, she felt that her sisters might have hated her getting all the attention while they stood by and watched.'''
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		+	Good work on this!
		+	*Edited by Hailey
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		+	Beth was scared or frightened because she felt bad about her sisters having to watch her open the gifts she got. This made her feel scared that they might not like it. The text states'', but it was dreadful to have you sit looking at me while I opened the bundles''. By this you know that Beth was scared her sisters might envy her and not like her. Another reason why she was scared was she was getting all the attention for the whole day and got presents. The text states'', I used to be so frightened when it was my turn to sit in the chair with the crown on and see you all come marching round to give the presents, with a kiss''. So, because of this she felt that her sisters might have hated her getting attention while they have to watch her.
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	Demi was a person that showed love and was smart. He was also wise and chose the right choices. The text states'', Showed intelligent, love and care''. So, Demi was a boy that was smart and loving. Another Thing I would inference about Demi is that he had good manners and learned self control. The text states'', Taught the secret of self control''. So, you can tell that Demi is a calm person and has manners.		Demi was a person that showed love and was smart. He was also wise and chose the right choices. The text states'', Showed intelligent, love and care''. So, Demi was a boy that was smart and loving. Another Thing I would inference about Demi is that he had good manners and learned self control. The text states'', Taught the secret of self control''. So, you can tell that Demi is a calm person and has manners.

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	Demi was a person that showed love and was smart. He was also wise and chose the right choices. The text states'', Showed intelligent, love and care''. So, Demi was a boy that was smart and loving. Another Thing I would inference about Demi is that he had good manners and learned self control. The text states'', Taught the secret of self control''. So, you can tell that Demi is a calm person and has manners.		Demi was a person that showed love and was smart. He was also wise and chose the right choices. The text states'', Showed intelligent, love and care''. So, Demi was a boy that was smart and loving. Another Thing I would inference about Demi is that he had good manners and learned self control. The text states'', Taught the secret of self control''. So, you can tell that Demi is a calm person and has manners.
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		+	For clarity: '''Demi was a person that was smart and showed love.'''
		+	I rearranged the sentence so it was easier to read!
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		+	For fluidity: '''He was also wise and made the right decisions.'''
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		+	For structure: '''The text states that he "showed intelligence, love, and care."'''
		+	Look at the proper quotation placement
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		+	'''So, Demi was a boy that was smart and loving.'''
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		+	For clarity, grammar: '''I would also infer that Demi had good manners and learned self-control.'''
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		+	For structure: '''The text states that he was "taught the secret of self-control."'''
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		+	'''So, you can tell that Demi is a calm person and has manners.'''
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		+	Fully Edited Summary:
		+	'''Demi was a person that was smart and showed love. He was also wise and made the right decisions. The text states that he "showed intelligence, love, and care." So, Demi was a boy that was smart and loving. I would also infer that Demi had good manners and learned self-control. The text states that he was "taught the secret of self-control." So, you can tell that Demi is a calm person and has manners.'''
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		+	Put a little more depth into your summaries!
		+	*Edited by Hailey
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 Nat thought the school was nice because of all the priorities they get. An example was they get a fresh look at have a fun day. The text states'', We always allow one pillow fight every Saturday night''. So, you know the school has a lot of fun thing for the  kids that make them comfortable. Another reason Nat thought the school was nice is because they make you look nice and care about you. This means they clean you cut your hair and take care of you when you are sick. The text states'', She will give you a nice bath, cut your hair, and make you all comfy''. So, you know they want to make you look fresh and clean.
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	Nat thought the school was nice because of all the priorities they get. An example was they get a fresh look at have a fun day. The text states'', We always allow one pillow fight every Saturday night''. So, you know the school has a lot of fun thing for the kids that make them comfortable. Another reason Nat thought the school was nice is because they make you look nice and care about you. This means they clean you cut your hair and take care of you when you are sick. The text states'', She will give you a nice bath, cut your hair, and make you all comfy''. So, you know they want to make you look fresh and clean.		Nat thought the school was nice because of all the priorities they get. An example was they get a fresh look at have a fun day. The text states'', We always allow one pillow fight every Saturday night''. So, you know the school has a lot of fun thing for the kids that make them comfortable. Another reason Nat thought the school was nice is because they make you look nice and care about you. This means they clean you cut your hair and take care of you when you are sick. The text states'', She will give you a nice bath, cut your hair, and make you all comfy''. So, you know they want to make you look fresh and clean.

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		+	Nat thought the school was nice because of all the priorities they get. An example was they get a fresh look at have a fun day. The text states'', We always allow one pillow fight every Saturday night''. So, you know the school has a lot of fun thing for the kids that make them comfortable. Another reason Nat thought the school was nice is because they make you look nice and care about you. This means they clean you cut your hair and take care of you when you are sick. The text states'', She will give you a nice bath, cut your hair, and make you all comfy''. So, you know they want to make you look fresh and clean.
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	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said the boy had something in him she meant that he had talent. This means that there was something special about him that he had which was his love for music. The text states'', You play well my son''. This means that his music was very good and everyone liked it. Another reason is that he tries so hard. One example is when they said play the fiddle he said he would try his hardest. The text states'', I'll do the best I can ma'am''. So , you can tell he always tries his best which Mrs. Bhaer knew.		What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said the boy had something in him she meant that he had talent. This means that there was something special about him that he had which was his love for music. The text states'', You play well my son''. This means that his music was very good and everyone liked it. Another reason is that he tries so hard. One example is when they said play the fiddle he said he would try his hardest. The text states'', I'll do the best I can ma'am''. So , you can tell he always tries his best which Mrs. Bhaer knew.

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		+	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said the boy had something in him she meant that he had talent. This means that there was something special about him that he had which was his love for music. The text states'', You play well my son''. This means that his music was very good and everyone liked it. Another reason is that he tries so hard. One example is when they said play the fiddle he said he would try his hardest. The text states'', I'll do the best I can ma'am''. So , you can tell he always tries his best which Mrs. Bhaer knew.
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	We know mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person because she cares about others. An example is when Nat and two other boys came and where wet she took them off and gave them warn slippers and new clothes. The text states'', With dry socks and warm slippers''. This means that she cares about people and about their health and state. Another reason is she feeds the kids and makes sure they aren't hungry. She feed them at every meal time and gives them little rules to follow. The text states'', All their rules were few and sensible, By putting a whole baked apple pie in his mouth''. You can tell by this that mrs. Bhaer makes sure the kids eat as much as they need.		We know mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person because she cares about others. An example is when Nat and two other boys came and where wet she took them off and gave them warn slippers and new clothes. The text states'', With dry socks and warm slippers''. This means that she cares about people and about their health and state. Another reason is she feeds the kids and makes sure they aren't hungry. She feed them at every meal time and gives them little rules to follow. The text states'', All their rules were few and sensible, By putting a whole baked apple pie in his mouth''. You can tell by this that mrs. Bhaer makes sure the kids eat as much as they need.

← Older revision		Revision as of 03:20, 23 May 2020
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	We know mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person because she cares about others. An example is when Nat and two other boys came and where wet she took them off and gave them warn slippers and new clothes. The text states'', With dry socks and warm slippers''. This means that she cares about people and about their health and state. Another reason is she feeds the kids and makes sure they aren't hungry. She feed them at every meal time and gives them little rules to follow. The text states'', All their rules were few and sensible, By putting a whole baked apple pie in his mouth''. You can tell by this that mrs. Bhaer makes sure the kids eat as much as they need.		We know mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person because she cares about others. An example is when Nat and two other boys came and where wet she took them off and gave them warn slippers and new clothes. The text states'', With dry socks and warm slippers''. This means that she cares about people and about their health and state. Another reason is she feeds the kids and makes sure they aren't hungry. She feed them at every meal time and gives them little rules to follow. The text states'', All their rules were few and sensible, By putting a whole baked apple pie in his mouth''. You can tell by this that mrs. Bhaer makes sure the kids eat as much as they need.
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		+	For grammar: '''We know Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person because she cares about others.'''
		+	Always capitalize on prefixes!
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		+	For grammar, clarity: '''An example of her thoughtfulness would be when Nat and two other boys were wet, and Mrs. Bhaer took off their wet clothes and gave them warm slippers and new clothes.'''
		+	Using proper nouns within sentences always makes them a bit more clear!
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		+	For grammar, structure: '''The text states, the kids received "dry socks and warm slippers."'''
		+	You must make sure you are writing full sentences! If the phrase you choose to quote is not a full sentence, add some of your own writing in front of it! When a sentence ends within a quote, make sure the punctuation is before the final quotation mark.
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		+	For clarity, fluidity: '''This means that she cares about other people's health and well-being.'''
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		+	For clarity, fluidity, grammar: '''Another reason Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful is that she feeds the kids and makes sure they aren't hungry.'''
		+	Make sure the point you are trying to make is very clear. You can do this by being specific about names/purpose.
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		+	For grammar: '''She feeds them at every mealtime and gives them little rules to follow.'''
		+	A good sentence, but singular nouns are (usually) followed by actions verbs that end in an "s".
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		+	For grammar, clarity, structure: '''The text states, "All their rules were few and sensible."'''
		+	Once again, look at the quotation/punctuation placement. Also, the second part of your quote made no sense. Make sure you are copying it correctly! If you are sure the quote is correct, perhaps you should add some of your own writing before the quote. This would give it more clarity and context.
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		+	For grammar, fluidity: '''Overall, you can tell by this that Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful and makes sure the kids eat as much as they need.'''
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		+	Fully Edited Summary:
		+	'''We know Mrs. Bhaer is a thoughtful person because she cares about others. An example of her thoughtfulness would be when Nat and two other boys were wet, and Mrs. Bhaer took off their wet clothes and gave them warm slippers and new clothes. The text states, the kids received "dry socks and warm slippers."
		+	This means that she cares about other people's health and well-being. Another reason Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful is that she feeds the kids and makes sure they aren't hungry. She feeds them at every mealtime and gives them little rules to follow. The text states, "All their rules were few and sensible." Overall, you can tell by this that Mrs. Bhaer is thoughtful and makes sure the kids eat as much as they need.'''
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		+	Keep on working!
		+	*Edited by Hailey
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