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 The Science Behind Swimming after Eating
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 However, science can prove it wrong.
-By the time the food is eaten, it takes about 4 hours to leave the stomach.
+By the time food is consumed, it takes about four hours to leave the stomach.
-The chances of getting a stomach cramp is rare, because muscle cramps is a totally different matter.
+The chances of getting a stomach cramp are rare because muscle cramps are a totally different matter.
-This urban legend was created mistakenly because of a food- drowning link.
+The urban legend was created due to a food and drowning link.
-Ever since that incident, parents tell their children to wait until their food digests, but now science poved that after eating, it's totally fine to swim right away.
+Ever since then, parents tell children to wait until their food digests, but now science proved that after eating, it's fine to swim right after.
 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/is-it-really-dangerous-to-swim-after-eating
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-Fastest Human Alive
+Usain Bolt: The Fastest Human Alive
-Speed is the rate where an object moves through time.
+Encyclopædia Britannica writer, Kara Rodgers, defines speed as "the rate where an object moves through time."
-The fastest man alive, also known as Usain Bolt, set a world record in the 100 meter dash with 9.58 seconds.
+Usain Bolt, also known as the fastest man alive, set a world record in the 100-meter dash with 9.58 seconds.
-If calculated that's faster than average car traffic in some cities.
+If calculated correctly, that's faster than the average traffic speed in some cities.
-Because of his height and size, it makes Usain run a lot easier with the use of his long strides.
+Because of his height and size, Usain can run a lot easier with the use of his long strides.
-In conclusion, no other person has beat his record at this moment.
+With that in consideration, no other person has beaten his record at this moment.
 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/how-fast-is-the-worlds-fastest-human
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 Species Going Extinct Due to Human Interaction
-***I made this the title because of the original being a question. ;How do Species become Endangered?
+***I made this the title because of the original being a question. ; How do Species become Endangered?
 In the world, there are over 7,000 species that are endangered.

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 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/is-it-really-dangerous-to-swim-after-eating
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 Fastest Human Alive

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 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/how-fast-is-the-worlds-fastest-human
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-How do Species become Endangered?
+Species Going Extinct Due to Human Interaction
-In the world,there are over 7,000 species hat are endangered.
+Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/what-makes-a-species-endangered
-From the International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN) says that if the species' population decreases 50 to 70%, then it's considered endangered.
+Try not to close on a quote. Always having the expounding sentence after the quote to explain your stance and why you used it. Remember to avoid questions in the title. I revised the title after I completed the revision of the body paragraph. I recommend that you create a title after your done writing. You can reflect back on what you wrote and create something from there. Unless you came up with something truly amazing.
-For example, in the article, it states,"Loss of habitat, the introduction of a foreign species into the environment, hunting, pollution, disease, and loss of genetic variation are all causes of species decline and most often are a result of human activities."
+Species Going Extinct Due to Human Interaction
-Sooner or later, all species will die from human interaction, but if we choose to help nature, then nature will run its course and heal the planet.
+In the world, there are over 7,000 species that are endangered. The International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN) states that if the species' population decreases 50 to 70% over 10 years, then it's considered endangered. One of the common reasons why the species are dying is due to humans interacting with nature. The article explains that "Loss of habitat, the introduction of a foreign species into the environment, hunting, pollution, disease, and loss of genetic variation are all causes of species decline and most often are a result of human activities." This shows how the bulk of human activities harm not only the species but the environment they live, as well. The possible future will see most species extinction from human interaction, however, if humans choose to help nature through conservation efforts, then it will be one step closer to healing the planet.
 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/what-makes-a-species-endangered

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 The Discoloration of Bananas
-When going to the grocery store, many people buy bananas that are green, however in a couple of days, it changes to bright yellow.
+When grocery shopping, people buy green bananas and within days later, it changes to bright yellow.
-The reason why the color changes is because bananas, like most fruits, react with a hormone called ethylene, which helps the ripening process.
+The color changes due to a hormone called ethylene, which helps the ripening process in bananas, like most fruits.
-When the fruit reacts with the ethylene, the banana's acid starts to break down which makes it mushier and tastier.
+When the fruit reacts with the ethylene, the banana's acid starts to break down which makes it mushier and sweeter.
-If not eaten, like most life cycles, the process of ethylene will cause the banana to decay and turn brown and even mushier.
+If not eaten, like most life cycles, the process of ethylene will cause the banana to decay, brown, and turn mushy in texture.
-So from now on, when the banana starts to turn brown, that means the banana needs to be eaten before it rots and needs to be thrown away.
+So, when the banana begins to turn brown, that means the banana should be eaten before it rots and needs to be thrown away.
 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-do-bananas-turn-brown

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 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-do-bananas-turn-brown
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 Serving Popcorn at Movies
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 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-do-movie-theaters-serve-popcorn
-Edited by MIchael Morrow
+Edited by Michael Morrow

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 Popcorn is an ideal snack when watching a movie.
-However, when movies started to become popular, theaters needed an economic boost, so popcorn was introduced.
+When movies started to become popular in the United States, theaters needed an economic boost, so popcorn was introduced.
-Popcorn is an actual type of corn, originally from Central America, which became popular in the 1800s.
+Popcorn is a type of corn, originally from Central America, which rose in popularity in the 1800s.
-Creating popcorn is easy and cheap, so selling popcorn was a great idea for the theaters, especially during the Great Depression.
+Making popcorn is easy and cheap, so selling popcorn was a great idea for the theaters, especially during the Great Depression.
-Popcorn is a must and people are thankful for the founders who applied popcorn into theaters.
+Popcorn is a must for moviegoers and they're thankful for those who introduced popcorn into theaters.
 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-do-movie-theaters-serve-popcorn
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 How Pizza Came to America
-***I changed the title because the original was lacking. It did not do much for the summary. It could be considered misleading because it sounded like you were going to talk ablut how much pizza is made and consumed in the U.S. Also, in titles, do not capitalize "in" and other prepositions. And if you use a colon anywhere, make sure there is a space between the punctuation and the word to the right of it.; Most Popular Food In America:PIZZA
+***I changed the title because the original was lacking. It did not do much for the summary. It could be considered misleading because it sounded like you were going to talk about how much pizza is made and consumed in the U.S. Also, in titles, do not capitalize "in" and other prepositions. And if you use a colon anywhere, make sure there is a space between the punctuation and the word to the right of it.; Most Popular Food In America:PIZZA
 Pizza is a staple food item in America, but it wasn't created by Americans.

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 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-do-movie-theaters-serve-popcorn
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-Pizza is a staple diet in America, but pizza wasn't founded by Americans.
+How Pizza Came to America
-It was as early as 600 BCE, where the Greeks created pizza.
+Pizza is a staple food item in America, but it wasn't created by Americans.
-However, the Italians introduced the pizza in America during 1880 and 1920.
+It was as early as 600 BCE, where the Greeks created the pizza.
-Italian-Americans that lived at that time created pizza and sold it unlicensed venues
+However, the Italians introduced the food in America between 1880 and 1920.
-Until, the first licensed pizzeria in NY is G. Lombardi's, which is still open today.
+Italian immigrants made and sold pizzas from their homes and unlicensed venues.
-Soon, pizzerias became very popular in America and almost every corner had a pizzeria.
+Then, the first licensed pizzeria in New York, named G. Lombardi's, opened in 1905, which is still open today.
-America is the land of opportunity and the Italians took it and gave us the delicious and savory pizza.
+Soon, pizzerias became popular in America and almost every corner had one.
 Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/why-is-pizza-so-popular-in-the-u.s
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		+	The Science Behind Swimming after Eating

		+	Urban Legends say that it's unsafe to eat after swimming.
		+
		+	However, science can prove it wrong.
		+
		+	By the time the food is eaten, it takes about 4 hours to leave the stomach.
		+
		+	The chances of getting a stomach cramp is rare, because muscle cramps is a totally different matter.
		+
		+	This urban legend was created mistakenly because of a food- drowning link.
		+
		+	Ever since that incident, parents tell their children to wait until their food digests, but now science poved that after eating, it's totally fine to swim right away.
		+
		+	Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/is-it-really-dangerous-to-swim-after-eating
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	Fastest Human Alive		Fastest Human Alive

← Older revision		Revision as of 23:07, 4 June 2018
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		+	Fastest Human Alive
		+
		+	Speed is the rate where an object moves through time.
		+
		+	The fastest man alive, also known as Usain Bolt, set a world record in the 100 meter dash with 9.58 seconds.
		+
		+	If calculated that's faster than average car traffic in some cities.
		+
		+	Because of his height and size, it makes Usain run a lot easier with the use of his long strides.
		+
		+	In conclusion, no other person has beat his record at this moment.
		+
		+	Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/how-fast-is-the-worlds-fastest-human
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		+	How do Species become Endangered?
		+
		+	In the world,there are over 7,000 species hat are endangered.
		+
		+	From the International Union for Conservation of Nature (IUCN) says that if the species' population decreases 50 to 70%, then it's considered endangered.
		+
		+	The reason why these species are dying is because of humans interacting with nature.
		+
		+	For example, in the article, it states,"Loss of habitat, the introduction of a foreign species into the environment, hunting, pollution, disease, and loss of genetic variation are all causes of species decline and most often are a result of human activities."
		+
		+	Sooner or later, all species will die from human interaction, but if we choose to help nature, then nature will run its course and heal the planet.
		+
		+	Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/what-makes-a-species-endangered
		+
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	The Discoloration of Bananas		The Discoloration of Bananas