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 <br> Source: http://www.popsci.com/dna-sunscreen
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 <br> Maps of America could change the outcomes during the Revolutionary War.
-<br> During the Revolutionary war the Americans would often execute guerrilla styled attacks. To the British, this was a relatively new thing so the British would have to depend on maps to lead them into safe areas. The only problem was that there was barely any maps of the United States because it was a new area at the time, so the British would have to rely on maps that were drawn by British soldiers during the fighting.
+<br> During the Revolutionary War, the Americans would often execute guerrilla styled attacks. The British were relatively inexperienced to such tactics, which is why they needed accurate maps to lead them into safe areas. The only problem, however, was that there was a paucity of good maps of the United States so the British would have to rely on maps that were drawn by British soldiers during the fighting.
-<br> One good example of this is when General Braddock with 2,000 soldiers came from Britain expecting to travel 45 miles. In reality, it was actually over 240 miles. Braddock's 2,000 men were defeated by a much smaller force of French and Indian soldiers using bush warfare.
+<br> One good example of how maps could alter the outcome of a military campaign was General Braddock's planned march to Fort Duquesne. General Braddock with 2,000 soldiers from Britain expected to travel 45 miles. In reality, it was actually over 240 miles. Braddock's 2,000 men were defeated by a much smaller force of French and Indian soldiers using bush warfare.
-<br> During all the fighting people had to draw out the landscape as maps. The mapmakers weren't on the sides while making maps, they were on the front lines. The mapmakers would also usually have to man the artillery or build fortifications while drawing maps. One example is a map made by Lutenient Thomas Hyde Page which depicts Bunker Hill while fighting was still happening.
+<br> During the Revolutionary War and the fighting that ensued, soldiers had to draw out the landscape as maps to prevent a similar defeat from happening again. Those who made these maps were not on the sidelines, but actually on the front lines. The mapmakers would also usually have to man the artillery or build fortifications while drawing maps. One example is a map made by Lieutenant Thomas Hyde Page who masterfully depicts Bunker Hill while fighting was still happening.
-<br> Overall maps were essential parts of the Revolutionary War they could change an outcome of a battle.
+<br> Overall maps were essential parts of the Revolutionary War that could change the outcome of a battle.
 <br> Source: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/01/160117-american-history-revolutionary-war-map/

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 <br> Life is found on Llullaillaco, a once thought inhospitable land.
-<br> The world's second-largest volcano, Llullaillaco, is the most inhospitable place to live on earth. The soil there is similar to the surface of our close neighbor Mars. The air temperature rarely reaches above freezing and the soil can not get above 90 degrees Fahrenheit under the sun glare. Even though this place seems inhospitable, in 2013 scientists found many mammal-dwellers. One of these mammal-dwellers was a species called Phyllotis xanthophylls, a yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse that lives on the foothill and Andes and can be found living on a low sea level, which means that this species of mice can withstand a wide range of elevation. Scientists have also found  Large-ear pikas, yaks, and blue sheep.
+<br> As the world's second-largest volcano, Llullaillaco seems to be the most inhospitable place to live on earth. The soil there is similar to the surface of our close neighbor Mars. The air temperature rarely reaches above freezing and the soil can not get above 90 degrees Fahrenheit under the sun glare. However, even though this place seems inhospitable, in 2013 scientists found many mammal-dwellers. One of these mammal-dwellers was a species called Phyllotis xanthophylls, a yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse that lives on the foothill and the Andes Mountains. Since most can be found living on a low sea level, it can be inferred that this species of mice can withstand a wide range of elevation. Scientists have also found  Large-ear pikas, yaks, and blue sheep.
 <br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/highest-dwelling-mammal-mouse-volcano/
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 <br> People are starting to wonder about the legitimacy of standardized tests.
-<br> A lot of people are wondering if some standardized tests are unfair. For example, in the article, it states "This is not a story unique to Texas, nor are the consequences of poorly worded, culturally biased or otherwise inappropriate questions on high-stakes tests". This is important because poorly worded, and culturally biased questions don't aren't fair to the examinees because it's not their fault that they might have gotten the question wrong. Additionally, the article also states "Testing companies are not usually required by states to provide extensive data to the public about their exam programs and are not required to seek or even allow an independent review of its questions". This is relevant because since test companies are required to review the tests that means that there are more mistakes in the questions.
+<br> Many people are wondering if some standardized tests are unfair. For example, in a recent article by the Washington Post detailing the enormous difficulty of some standarized tests, it was noted that "the consequences of poorly worded, culturally biased or otherwise inappropriate questions on high-stakes tests" is  not a story "unique to Texas." This is important because poorly worded, and culturally biased questions aren't fair to the examinees, who often answer incorrectly these questions. Additionally, the article also states "Testing companies are not usually required by states to provide extensive data to the public about their exam programs and are not required to seek or even allow an independent review of its questions". This is relevant because if test companies are not required to review the tests by law, it could mean there are more mistakes in making the questions.
 <br> Source: https://www.washingtonpost.com/education/2019/02/25/are-these-standardized-test-questions-too-hard-kids/?utm_term=.50c7aa9178c2
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-<br> The new outbreak of measles is very dangerous.
+<br> The Danger of the New Measles Outbreak.
-<br>During recent times, there has been a new outbreak of measles. UNICEF claims that there are reported cases of measles in 98 more countries compared to 2018. Measles is very dangerous because it is contagious and harmful to the body. Measles are airborne (they spread through the air) and can stay in a room for more than 2 hours after the infected person leaves. Before 1963 (the year that the vaccine was created) it was almost certain that every child would catch measles. But now there is a 97% protection rate. The disease itself is very dangerous, after catching measles the immune system's "memory" is wiped and diseases that the immune system used to know how to fight are like brand new in the body, this amnesia might last for more than 2 years. Measles has become widespread again but it's unclear why. Before 1963 (the year that the vaccine was created) it was almost certain that every child would catch measles but after there was a 97% protection rate. Not only did the Measles vaccine stop measles it also stopped other diseases like pneumococcus, and even diarrhea became less common.
+<br>As of March 1, data has revealed a significant new outbreak of measles. UNICEF claims that there are reported cases of measles in 98 more countries compared to 2018. Measles is very dangerous because it is contagious and harmful to the body. Measles are airborne (they spread through the air) and can stay in a room for more than 2 hours after the infected person leaves. Before 1963 (the year that the vaccine was created) it was almost certain that every child would catch measles but now there is a 97% protection rate. Measles has become widespread again but it's unclear why. Not only did the Measles vaccine stop measles it also stopped other diseases like pneumococcus, and even diarrhea became less common. Still, the disease itself is very dangerous. After catching measles, the immune system's "memory" is wiped and diseases that the immune system used to know how to fight are brand new in the body.
 <br>Therefore the occurrence of widespread measles is, unfortunately, coming back.
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-<br> The onion is a multi-purpose food that can help a lot and has very unique past.
+<br> The Onion is a Multi-Purpose with Great Potential
-<br> The onion used to be known for a lot of crazy stuff for example, since the onion is apart of the odoriferous Allium genus, which is infamous for having many chemicals that are disgusting, in fact, because of the onion's unique smell people though the onion could repel evil or bad things away like demons, tigers, plagues, and the cold. Additionally the onions were thought to be a food that could improve yourself. For example in Greece Olympians would eat onions. The Romans would bring onions with them because people believed they could strengthen the army. Not only do onions have a cool past they are also very helpful. For example, the onions could heal gunshot wounds and people, in fact, during the Civil War, a general stopped because he didn't have any onions and when hearing the War Department sent him 3 cartloads of onions. Additionally Onions have been showed to help with allergies and asthma and even diabetes this is because and onions are full of vitamins and minerals.
+<br> In the past, the onion was known to be an incredibly versatile food suitable for a variety of uses. The onion is part of the odoriferous Allium genus, which is infamous for having many chemicals that are disgusting. In fact, because of the onion's unique smell people thought the onion could repel evil or bad things away like demons, tigers, plagues, and the cold. Additionally the onions were thought to be a food that could improve yourself. For example in ancient Greece, olympians would habitually eat onions believing it would promote their strength. Similarly, the Romans would bring onions with them since it was believed these  could strengthen the army. Not only do onions have an interesting past but they are also very helpful. For example, onions could heal gunshot wounds and people, in fact, during the Civil War, a general stopped because he didn't have any onions and when hearing the War Department sent him 3 cartloads of onions. Furthermore, since onions are full of vitamins and minerals, onions have been shown to help with allergies, asthma, and even diabetes.
-<br> Overall onions are a helpful food that has to be famous throughout history for making good things happen.
+<br> Overall, onions are a helpful food which is famous throughout history for making good things happen.
 <br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/people-and-culture/food/the-plate/2014/12/01/stinky-smelly-wonderful-onions/
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-<br> Your opinion on coffee is affected by your genetics.
+<br> Your Opinion on Coffee is Affected by Your Genetics.
-<br> For some people if they drink a bit of coffee they could be up all night, while for other people it might be the complete opposite. How coffee affects you is heavily based on your genes. Drinking coffee regularly and having a stronger tolerance is normal, but some people find that coffee makes them anxious or nauseous and that could be because of your genetics.
+<br> For some people, if they drink a bit of coffee they could be up all night while for other people it might be the complete opposite. How coffee affects you is heavily based on your genes. Drinking coffee regularly and having a stronger tolerance is normal, but some people find that coffee makes them anxious or nauseous and that could be because of your genetics.
-<br> 2 genes control what happens to the caffeine when it's in your body, CYP1A2, and AHR. Those genes choose how long the caffeine affects you by controlling how much caffeine goes in the bloodstream and for how long.
+<br> Two genes control what happens to the caffeine when it's in your body, CYP1A2, and AHR. Those genes choose how long the caffeine affects you by controlling how much caffeine goes in the bloodstream and for how long.
-<br> This mean that if you have a quick metabolism than you most likely need to drink more coffee for the caffeine to affect you because the caffeine doesn't stay long enough for the brain to get stimulated.
+<br> This means that if you have a quick metabolism, you most likely need to drink more coffee for the caffeine to affect you because the caffeine doesn't stay long enough for the brain to get stimulated.
 <br> Therefore metabolism affects how coffee affects you.
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-<br> Katie Stubblefield is the youngest person to receive a face transplant in the United State. She needs a face because on March 25, 2014, after a hard day Katie attempted suicide with a gun. Fortunately, her brother was able to save so she didn't die, but a big chunk of her face was destroyed by the bullet.
+<br> Katie Stubblefield is the youngest person to receive a face transplant in the United States. She needed a face because on March 25, 2014, Katie attempted suicide with a hunting rifle by pointing the muzzle of the gun directly under the chin and pulling the trigger. Fortunately, Katie's brother was able to take her to the hospital so she didn't die, but a big chunk of her face was destroyed by the bullet.
-<br> Not did her face takes a lot of damage but her brain was in bad condition too. Her frontal lobe, optic nerve, and pituitary gland were damaged and she had a chance of having seizures and infections.
+<br> Not only was her face permanently damaged but her brain was in bad condition too. Her frontal lobe, optic nerve, and pituitary gland were damaged and there was a serious risk of seizures and infections.
-<br> This could help so many other people out for example wars that have crippled or severely damaged people's faces could be fixed by this. The soldiers won't accept the surgery because they consider their wounds an honor, so Katie is the closest thing to a wounded soldier.
+<br> This surgery can help so many other people with similar and unfortunate circumstances, such as veterans have crippled or severely damaged faces. Still, some veterans accept the surgery because they consider their wounds an honor.
-<br> Overall, Katie is a girl who has gone through a face transplant because of a suicide attempt. If she succeeds then this could change a lot.
+<br> Overall, Katie is a girl who has gone through a face transplant because of a suicide attempt. If she succeeds then this could help others under similar conditions.
 <br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/magazine/2018/09/face-transplant-katie-stubblefield-story-identity-surgery-science/

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 <br> Williams Syndrome: Too Much Oxytocin.
-<br> Williams Syndrome occurs when a person has an abundance of oxytocin, making them have an impulse to hug and love anyone they meet. Williams Syndrome and its effects are caused by a genetic deletion and there are between 26 and 28 missing genes in chromosome 7 in Willams Syndrome patients. Symptoms of this disorder are distinct facial features such as narrow chins, high cheekbones, and prominent ears. Patients may also suffer from intellectual disabilities, heart defects, muscle tone problems, and other dysfunctions. However, sometimes Williams Syndrome can be good. A study in 2010 showed that people with Williams Syndrome have no racial bias, making them fair in their kindness.
+<br> Williams Syndrome occurs when a person has an abundance of oxytocin, making them have an impulse to hug and love anyone they meet. Williams Syndrome and its effects are caused by a genetic deletion and there are between 26 and 28 missing genes in chromosome 7 in Williams Syndrome patients. Symptoms of this disorder are distinct facial features such as narrow chins, high cheekbones, and prominent ears. Patients may also suffer from intellectual disabilities, heart defects, muscle tone problems, and other dysfunctions. However, sometimes Williams Syndrome can be good. A study in 2010 showed that people with Williams Syndrome have no racial bias, making them fair in their kindness.
 <br> Overall, Willams Syndrome makes a person love everyone due to an abundance of oxytocin.

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-<br> Willams syndrome affects 1 in every 10,000 people worldwide. This syndrome happens when the sufferer is born with too much oxytocin, a "love hormone".
+<br> Willams syndrome is a syndrome that happens when the sufferer is born with too much oxytocin, a "love hormone", making them have unique attributes.
-<br> During the 1960s a cardiologist named John Willams noticed a lot of his patients had a heart condition called "Supravalvular aortic stenosis". Which is normally pretty rare except in people who have Willams syndrome.
+<br> William Syndrome happens when one has an abundance of oxytocin, making them have an impulse to hug and love everyone all the time. Willam Syndrome and its effects are also caused by a genetic deletion (when your genes mutate and some genes aren't there), there are about 26-28 missing genes in chromosome 7 in Willam Syndrome patients. Effects of Willams syndrome may be that the sufferers might also look similar to each other. For example, they have narrow chins, high cheekbones, and prominent ears. They may also suffer from intellectual disabilities, heart defects, muscle tone problems, and more. But sometimes Williams Syndrome can be good, a study in 2010 showed that people with Willams Syndrome have no racial bias, making them fair in their kindness.
-<br> Willams syndrome sufferers also look similar to each other. For example, they have narrow chins, high cheekbones, and prominent ears. Willam Syndrome and its effects are caused by a genetic deletion (when your genes mutate and some genes aren't there), there are about 26-28 missing genes in chromosome 7 in Willam Syndrome patients. They may also suffer from intellectual disabilities, heart defects, muscle tone problems, and more.
+<br> Overall Willam Syndrome is a syndrome that makes you love everyone due to an abundance of oxytocin.
-<br> William Syndrome patients have an abundance of oxytocin, making them have an impulse to hug and love everyone all the time. Sometimes this could be good, a study in 2010 showed that people with Willams Syndrome have no racial bias (they don't feel as if one race is different to each other). But sometimes it could be very bad, Eli (a boy with Willams Syndrome) has a mother which worries how strangers will react if Eli hugs them as an adult, she also worries that people could take advantage of him.
+<br> Source: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/07/williams-health-love-genetics-books/
-<br> Overall Willam Syndrome is a syndrome that makes you love everyone due to an abundance of oxytocin.
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-<br> Source: https://news.nationalgeographic.com/2017/07/williams-health-love-genetics-books/
+<br> The world's second-largest volcano, Llullaillaco, is the most inhospitable place to live on earth. The soil there is similar to the surface of our close neighbor Mars. The air temperature rarely reaches above freezing and the soil can not get above 90 degrees Fahrenheit under the sun glare. Even though this place seems inhospitable, in 2013 scientists found many mammal-dwellers. One of these mammal-dwellers was a species called Phyllotis xanthophylls, a yellow-rumped leaf-eared mouse that lives on the foothill and Andes and can be found living on a low sea level, which means that this species of mice can withstand a wide range of elevation. Scientists have also found  Large-ear pikas, yaks, and blue sheep.
 <br> Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2019/07/highest-dwelling-mammal-mouse-volcano/
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 <br> A lot of people are wondering if some standardized tests are unfair. For example, in the article, it states "This is not a story unique to Texas, nor are the consequences of poorly worded, culturally biased or otherwise inappropriate questions on high-stakes tests". This is important because poorly worded, and culturally biased questions don't aren't fair to the examinees because it's not their fault that they might have gotten the question wrong. Additionally, the article also states "Testing companies are not usually required by states to provide extensive data to the public about their exam programs and are not required to seek or even allow an independent review of its questions". This is relevant because since test companies are required to review the tests that means that there are more mistakes in the questions.
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 <br> The new outbreak of measles is very dangerous.
-<br>There has been a new outbreak of measles. UNICEF states that there are reported cases of measles in 98 more countries than in 2018. Measles is very contagious since they are airborne (they spread through the air) and the virus can stay in a room for more than 2 hours after the infected person leaves. Before 1963 (the year that the vaccine was created) it was almost certain that every child would catch measles. But now there is a 97% protection rate.
+<br>During recent times, there has been a new outbreak of measles. UNICEF claims that there are reported cases of measles in 98 more countries compared to 2018. Measles is very dangerous because it is contagious and harmful to the body. Measles are airborne (they spread through the air) and can stay in a room for more than 2 hours after the infected person leaves. Before 1963 (the year that the vaccine was created) it was almost certain that every child would catch measles. But now there is a 97% protection rate. The disease itself is very dangerous, after catching measles the immune system's "memory" is wiped and diseases that the immune system used to know how to fight are like brand new in the body, this amnesia might last for more than 2 years. Measles has become widespread again but it's unclear why. Before 1963 (the year that the vaccine was created) it was almost certain that every child would catch measles but after there was a 97% protection rate. Not only did the Measles vaccine stop measles it also stopped other diseases like pneumococcus, and even diarrhea became less common.
 <br>Therefore the occurrence of widespread measles is, unfortunately, coming back.
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-<br> The onion is a multi-purpose food that can help a lot and has very unique features.
+<br> The onion is a multi-purpose food that can help a lot and has very unique past.
-<br> The onion is apart of the odoriferous Allium genus, which is infamous for having many chemicals that are disgusting, in fact, because of the onion's unique smell people though the onion could repel evil or bad things away like demons, tigers, plagues, and the cold.
+<br> The onion used to be known for a lot of crazy stuff for example, since the onion is apart of the odoriferous Allium genus, which is infamous for having many chemicals that are disgusting, in fact, because of the onion's unique smell people though the onion could repel evil or bad things away like demons, tigers, plagues, and the cold. Additionally the onions were thought to be a food that could improve yourself. For example in Greece Olympians would eat onions. The Romans would bring onions with them because people believed they could strengthen the army. Not only do onions have a cool past they are also very helpful. For example, the onions could heal gunshot wounds and people, in fact, during the Civil War, a general stopped because he didn't have any onions and when hearing the War Department sent him 3 cartloads of onions. Additionally Onions have been showed to help with allergies and asthma and even diabetes this is because and onions are full of vitamins and minerals.
 <br> Overall onions are a helpful food that has to be famous throughout history for making good things happen.
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