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 <br><br>Elephants can be the most traditional and interesting animal in the world. Elephants can be symbolized as god. Also, elephants have eating and diet habits. Lastly, the size of an elephant can be very surprising.
 <br><br>To begin with, Elephants can mean many things. Also, elephants can be named as god. Lord Ganesha, the elephant god is the ,most universally worship hindu cleity. He is exalted by devotes believed to respect "perfect wisdom" and be the "remover of obstacles". To Buddhists the elephant represents mental strength. The gray elephant symbolizes someone first learning Buddhism whose mind can run wild and wreak havoc at any time. This means that elephants be god.

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 <br><br>Furthermore, An elephant can be very fat of very heavy. The elephants length is about 18-21 ft. This means that an elephant is tall. It can weigh about 13,000 lbs or 8,800 lbs or 6,000 lbs. It's height is about 10 ft or 9 ft.
 <br><br>In conclusion, elephant can be the most tradition and interesting animal in world. Elephant can mean many things. also, can be god. Elephants can contain many eating and diet habits. An elephant can very heavy very fat.
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	<br><br>In conclusion, out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly, aquatic, and interesting mammal. This essay is about how whales can gain weight and can breathe through their holes which are located in the top of their body. Also, whales have o come up to the oceans surface to the breathe at time to time and whales lived in salt water for millions of years. People hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. Japan people also hunt whales for their food.		<br><br>In conclusion, out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly, aquatic, and interesting mammal. This essay is about how whales can gain weight and can breathe through their holes which are located in the top of their body. Also, whales have o come up to the oceans surface to the breathe at time to time and whales lived in salt water for millions of years. People hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. Japan people also hunt whales for their food.

		+	Out of all the creatures on the Earth, none can compare to amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammal. <br>
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		+	This essay will address the size, habitat, endangered status, and hunting of whales. <br>
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		+	To begin, of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on Earth compares to the size of a whale. <br>
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		+	The size of a whale can be shocking. <br>
		+	'''***Good!''''
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		+	The size of a whale is 82 ft and about 330,000 lbs. <br>
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		+	A whale can eat many krill in one day. <br>
		+	'''***Good!'''
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		+	A whale can eat about 6,000 lbs of krill in one day. <br>
		+	'''***Good!'''
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		+	Also, whales breathe through holes located on the top of their bodies. <br>
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		+	Furthermore, the whale has been on the endangered watch list since 1987. <br>
		+	'''***Good!'''
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		+	This means that whales might be extinct animals soon. <br>
		+	'''***Edited for word choice. If an animal no longer exist they are extinct, but if there are a few of them left they are endangered.''''
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		+	To add on, people from all over the world hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. <br>
		+	'''***Good!'''
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		+	Currently, Japanese people hunt whales for whale meat. <br>
		+	'''***Edited for punctuation'''
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		+	This shows that whales are dying to become food. <br>
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		+	In conclusion, out of all the creatures on the Earth, none can compare to amazingly, aquatic, and interesting mammal known as the whale. <br>
		+	'''***Edited for punctuation and clarity.'''
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		+	This essay is about how whales can gain weight and can breathe through the holes located on the top of their body. <br>
		+	'''***Edited for fluency and word choice.'''
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		+	Also, whales have to come up to the ocean's surface to the breathe from time to time and whales have lived in salt water for millions of years. <br>
		+	'''***Edited for fluency and punctuation.'''
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		+	People hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. <br>
		+	'''***Good!'''
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		+	Japanese people also hunt whales for their food. <br>
		+	'''***Edited for word choice.'''
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		+	Out of all the creatures on the Earth, none can compare to amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammal. This essay will address the size, habitat, endangered status, and hunting of whales.
		+	To begin, of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on Earth compares to the size of a whale. The size of a whale can be shocking. The size of a whale is 82 ft and about 330,000 lbs. A whale can eat many krill in one day. A whale can eat about 6,000 lbs of krill in one day. Also, whales breathe through holes located on the top of their bodies.
		+	Furthermore, the whale has been on the endangered watch list since 1987. This means that whales might be extinct animals soon. To add on, people from all over the world hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. Currently, Japanese people hunt whales for whale meat. This shows that whales are dying to become food.
		+	In conclusion, out of all the creatures on the Earth, none can compare to amazingly, aquatic, and interesting mammal known as the whale. This essay is about how whales can gain weight and can breathe through the holes located on the top of their body. Also, whales have to come up to the ocean's surface to the breathe from time to time and whales have lived in salt water for millions of years. People hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. Japanese people also hunt whales for their food. <br>
		+	'''***This is the best essay you've written yet! Great job using transitions and including a variety of facts to support your topic sentence.'''
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		+	'''***Edited by Nicole Glidden'''
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 <br><br>Furthermore, An elephant can be very fat of very heavy. The elephants length is about 18-21 ft. This means that an elephant is tall. It can weigh about 13,000 lbs or 8,800 lbs or 6,000 lbs. It's height is about 10 ft or 9 ft.
 <br><br>In conclusion, elephant can be the most tradition and interesting animal in world. Elephant can mean many things. also, can be god. Elephants can contain many eating and diet habits. An elephant can very heavy very fat.
 <br><br> Out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammal. It’s about size, habitat, endangered, and hunted down.

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		+	<br><br>Elephants can be the most traditional and interesting animal in the world. Elephants can be symbolized as god. Also, elephants have eating and diet habits. Lastly, the size of an elephant can be very surprising.
		+	<br><br>To begin with, Elephants can mean many things. Also, elephants can be named as god. Lord Ganesha, the elephant god is the ,most universally worship hindu cleity. He is exalted by devotes believed to respect "perfect wisdom" and be the "remover of obstacles". To Buddhists the elephant represents mental strength. The gray elephant symbolizes someone first learning Buddhism whose mind can run wild and wreak havoc at any time. This means that elephants be god.
		+	<br><br>To add on, Elephants can contain many eating and diet habits. Elephants can eat a lot of food in one day. Sixteen to eighteen hours or nearly 80% of an elephant's day is spent feeding. This can mean that elephants can gain a lot of weight by eating the whole day. Elephants consume grasses, small plants, bushes, fruit, twigs, tree barks, and roots. tree bark contains calcium and roughage which aids digestion.
		+	<br><br>Furthermore, An elephant can be very fat of very heavy. The elephants length is about 18-21 ft. This means that an elephant is tall. It can weigh about 13,000 lbs or 8,800 lbs or 6,000 lbs. It's height is about 10 ft or 9 ft.
		+	<br><br>In conclusion, elephant can be the most tradition and interesting animal in world. Elephant can mean many things. also, can be god. Elephants can contain many eating and diet habits. An elephant can very heavy very fat.

	<br><br> Out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammal. It’s about size, habitat, endangered, and hunted down.		<br><br> Out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammal. It’s about size, habitat, endangered, and hunted down.

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 <br><br> Out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammal. It’s about size, habitat, endangered, and hunted down.
 <br><br>To begin with, Of all the fish, birds, and mammals nothing currently on earth compares to the size of a whale. The size of a whale can be shocking. The size of a whale is 82 ft, 8,000-12,000 lbs, and can weigh about 330,000 lbs. A whale can eat many krill in one day. A whale can eat about 6,000 lbs of krill in one day. Also, The whale has to breathe through their holes which is located on the top of their body.
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 <br><br>Furthermore, has been on the endangered watch list since 1987. This means that whales might be endangered animals soon. To add on, people from all over the world hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. Currently Japanese people hunt whales for whale meat. This shows that whales are dying for whales meat to eat.
 <br><br>In conclusion, out of all the creatures on the earth, none can compare to amazingly, aquatic, and interesting mammal. This essay is about how whales can gain weight and can breathe through their holes which are located in the top of their body. Also, whales have o come up to the oceans surface to the breathe at time to time and whales lived in salt water for millions of years. People hunt whales for their bubbler and oil. Japan people also hunt whales for their food.
 <br><br>The soldier mice were able to get away successfully unlike their leaders. To add on, the soldier mice were able to get away because the soldier mice weren’t wearing any clothing. Furthermore, their leaders were wearing hats so they were stuck in between the hole.
 <br><br>To begin with, the soldier mice were able to get away successfully unlike their leaders. To add on, the soldier mice were able to get away successfully without any problem. Based on the text it states “The privates easily slipped into their holes.” This means that the soldier mice were able to get away successfully. Also, the leaders were not able to escape because of there head dresses. According to the text it states “but the Mouse leaders could not squeeze through the narrow openings because of their head-dresses.” This shows that the leaders were not able to get way successfully.
 <br><br>In conclusion, this is why the soldier mice were able to get away but not the leaders. If i was the soldier mice i would not follow what the leader does. Also, if i was the leaders I would not wear anything fancy just for this one thing i would would wear nothing. In my opinion, i think the leaders should not be leaders and should be taught how to dress.
 <br><br>The two soldiers and the robber are two different people. The soldiers are very determined. The robber is more violent and is willing to kill people.

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	<br><br>In my final analysis, this is why the two soldiers and the robber are different. If i was the two soldiers i would be determined every time. If i was the robber I would not attack people and be kind.		<br><br>In my final analysis, this is why the two soldiers and the robber are different. If i was the two soldiers i would be determined every time. If i was the robber I would not attack people and be kind.

		+	The two soldiers and the Robber have different characteristics. <br>
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		+	The soldiers are very determined. <br>
		+	'''***Good!'''
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		+	The Robber is more violent and is willing to kill people. <br>
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		+	To begin, the two soldiers are more determined than the Robber. <br>
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		+	To add on, one of the soldiers confronted the Robber face to face and was killed. <br>
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		+	The text states, "The one fled away; the other stood his ground and defended himself with his stout right hand." <br>
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		+	This means that the soldier defended himself. <br>
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		+	Also, the other soldier wanted to fight the Robber and avenge his friend's death. <br>
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		+	According to the text, "'I’ll at him, and I’ll take care he shall learn whom he has attacked.'” <br>
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		+	This shows that the other soldier wanted to seek justice against the Robber. <br>
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		+	To add on, the Robber is more violent than the two soldiers. <br>
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		+	Furthermore, the Robber attacked one of the soldiers. <br>
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		+	The text states, "The Robber being slain, the timid companion ran up and drew his sword." <br>
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		+	This means that the Robber attacked one of the soldiers. <br>
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		+	Also, the Robber was willing to kill the other soldier. <br>
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		+	According to the text , “On this, he who had fought with the Robber made answer, 'I only wish that you had helped me just now, even if it had been only with those words, for I should have been the more encouraged, believing them to be true; but now put up your sword in its sheath and hold your equally useless tongue.'” <br>
		+	'''***Edited for fluency and punctuation.'''
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		+	This shows that the Robber was willing to kill him. <br>
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		+	In conclusion, this is why the two soldiers and the Robber are different. <br>
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		+	If I was one of the two soldiers I would be determined every time. <br>
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		+	If I was the Robber I would not attack people and would be kind. <br>
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		+	The two soldiers and the Robber have different characteristics. The soldiers are very determined. The Robber is more violent and is willing to kill people.
		+	To begin, the two soldiers are more determined than the Robber. To add on, one of the soldiers confronted the Robber face to face and was killed. The text states, "The one fled away; the other stood his ground and defended himself with his stout right hand." This means that the soldier defended himself. Also, the other soldier wanted to fight the Robber and avenge his friend's death. According to the text, "'I’ll at him, and I’ll take care he shall learn whom he has attacked.'” This shows that the other soldier wanted to seek justice against the Robber.
		+	To add on, the Robber is more violent than the two soldiers. Furthermore, the Robber attacked one of the soldiers. The text states, "The Robber being slain, the timid companion ran up and drew his sword." This means that the Robber attacked one of the soldiers. According to the text , “On this, he who had fought with the Robber made answer, 'I only wish that you had helped me just now, even if it had been only with those words, for I should have been the more encouraged, believing them to be true; but now put up your sword in its sheath and hold your equally useless tongue.'” This shows that the Robber was willing to kill him.
		+	In conclusion, this is why the two soldiers and the Robber are different. If I was one of the two soldiers I would be determined every time. If I was the Robber I would not attack people and would be kind. <br>
		+	'''***Overall, you used strong evidence to support your claims! Good job crafting a well explained argument.'''
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		+	'''Edited by Nicole Glidden'''
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