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← Older revision		Revision as of 05:17, 3 June 2020
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−	Sala ~~page~~:	+	Sala's Writing Page: <br><br>

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- It possible to know that the princess was a real princess.
+It possible to know that the princess was a real princess.
 One thing  is ". So he traveled all around the world, seeking such a one, but everywhere something was in the way. "
 Another thing is "that there was any lack of princesses, but he could not seem to make out whether they were real princesses; there was always something not quite satisfactory. "
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- I And the sink agreed with the pea.
+I And the sink agreed with the pea.
 But the young girl, with sparkling eyes and the rosy hue of health upon her cheeks, stood at the open garret window and, folding her thin hands over the pea blossom, thanked God for what He had done.
 One thing is "THERE were once five peas in one shell; they were green, and the shell was green, and so they believed that the whole world must be green also, which was a very natural conclusion."

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 One thing  is ". So he traveled all around the world, seeking such a one, but everywhere something was in the way. "
 Another thing is "that there was any lack of princesses, but he could not seem to make out whether they were real princesses; there was always something not quite satisfactory. "
 Therefore it possible to know that the princess was a real princess.
 The author's purpose in writing the story.
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 Therefore the author's purpose in writing the story.
 You think was the author's purpose in writing the story.
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 Another thing is " In this bed grew a large cucumber, which was fully aware that it was a plant that should be reared in a hotbed."
 Therefore you think was the author's purpose in writing the story.

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	Another thing is "It must look very grand for my wife to have a sentinel to guard her nest," he thought. "They can't know that I am her husband and will, of course, conclude that I am commanded to stand here by her nest. It looks aristocratic!"		Another thing is "It must look very grand for my wife to have a sentinel to guard her nest," he thought. "They can't know that I am her husband and will, of course, conclude that I am commanded to stand here by her nest. It looks aristocratic!"
	Therefore the mother stork want for her children to learn how to fly.		Therefore the mother stork want for her children to learn how to fly.
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		+	'''Corrections:'''
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		+	The mother stork want for her children to learn how to fly.
		+	*** "The mother stork wants her children to learn how to fly."
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		+	One thing is "At a little distance, on the top of the roof, stood the father stork, bolt upright and as stiff as could be. That he might not appear quite idle while standing sentry, he had drawn one leg up under him, as is the manner of storks. One might have taken him to be carved in marble, so still did he stand."
		+	*** This quote is too long. Keep in mind that it is supposed to be a summary in your own words. You don't need to use so many sentences from the article. Change "One thing is..." to "One quote from the story is..."
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		+	Another thing is "It must look very grand for my wife to have a sentinel to guard her nest," he thought. "They can't know that I am her husband and will, of course, conclude that I am commanded to stand here by her nest. It looks aristocratic!"
		+	*** Change this to: "Another quote from the story is..."
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		+	Therefore the mother stork want for her children to learn how to fly.
		+	*** This should be: "Therefore the mother stork wants her children to learn to fly." Remember that the first and last sentences don't need to be identical.
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		+	'''Fully Edited Version:'''
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		+	The mother stark wants her children to learn how to fly. One quote from the story is: "At a little distance, on the top of the roof, stood the father stork, bolt upright and as stiff as could be. That he might not appear quite idle while standing sentry, he had drawn one leg up under him, as is the manner of storks. One might have taken him to be carved in marble, so still did he stand." Another quote from the story is: ""It must look very grand for my wife to have a sentinel to guard her nest," he thought. "They can't know that I am her husband and will, of course, conclude that I am commanded to stand here by her nest. It looks aristocratic!"
		+	Therefore it is clear that the mother stork wants her children to learn how to fly.
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+'''Original:"''
 The mother stork want for her children to learn how to fly.
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+'''Original:'''
   I And the sink agreed with the pea.
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 But the young girl, with sparkling eyes and the rosy hue of health upon her cheeks, stood at the open garret window and, folding her thin hands over the pea blossom, thanked God for what He had done."
 Therefore  And the sink agreed with the pea.
 You can tell that the Baron was not a good person.
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 Another thing is " As soon as the baron, with his company and his dogs, had disappeared through the castle gate, she tried to raise herself by her own exertions; but the bough broke off at the top, and she would have fallen backwards among the reeds if a strong hand had not at that moment seized her from above."
 Therefore you can  tell that Baron is not a good person.

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 Ali baba able to know how to get into the cave.
 One thing is "Their father divided a small inheritance equally between them. Cassim married a very rich wife, and became a wealthy merchant."
   Another thing is " Ali Baba married a woman as poor as himself, and lived by cutting wood, and bringing it upon three asses into the town, to sell."
 Therefore Ail baba adle to know how to get into the cave.

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+'''Original:'''
 Ali baba able to know how to get into the cave.
 One thing is "Their father divided a small inheritance equally between them. Cassim married a very rich wife, and became a wealthy merchant."
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 The fern sing the song.
 One thing is "The sun shone on it and the showers watered it; and this was as good for the flax as it is for little children to be washed and then kissed by their mothers.
 Another thing is" They look much prettier for it, and so did the flax."
 Therefore the fern sing the song.

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 The main characters of the story.
 One thing is "There were once 5 and 20 tin soldiers."
 Anoyher thing is " They were brothers, for they had all been made out of the same old tin spoon."
 Therefore the main characters the 5 and 20 soldiers and their brothers.

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 The way that the treasure can be gained.
 One thing is "The Grasshopper sat without on a green bank and reflected on the world and its ways; and he too said, "Yes, dullness and heaviness win the day; a fine exterior is what people care for nowadays."
 Another thing is "is own peculiar way—and it is from his song that we have taken this little piece of history, which may very possibly be all untrue, although it does stand printed here in black and white."
 Therefore that is the way that the treasure can be gained.
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 Therefore  the soapsuds used for in the story.
-*** This is the exact same sentence as your first sentence. While it's good to conclude your summary, perhaps consider changing it to: "Therefore the soapsuds are used in the story."
+*** This is the exact same sentence as your first sentence. While it's good to conclude your summary, perhaps consider changing it to: "As evident in the story, the soapsuds have many uses."
 "'Fully Edited Version:"'
-The soapsuds have several uses in the story. One quote from the story is: "Men! you who look at us with your severe, soapsud eyes, think a moment what our place in nature is: we are born upon the roses, we die in roses—our whole life is a rose poem." Another quote from the story is: "Do not, I beg you, give us a name which you yourselves think so despicable—the name I cannot bear to pronounce. If you wish to speak of us, call us 'the ants' milch cows—the rose-tree regiment—the little green things.'' Therefore the soapsuds are used in the story.
+The soapsuds have several uses in the story. One quote from the story is: "Men! you who look at us with your severe, soapsud eyes, think a moment what our place in nature is: we are born upon the roses, we die in roses—our whole life is a rose poem." Another quote from the story is: "Do not, I beg you, give us a name which you yourselves think so despicable—the name I cannot bear to pronounce. If you wish to speak of us, call us 'the ants' milch cows—the rose-tree regiment—the little green things.'' As evident in the story, the soapsuds have several uses.