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Irvingwash at 05:26, 2 June 2020

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45.50.193.152 at 09:09, 29 May 2020

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68.174.204.188 at 06:43, 29 May 2020

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68.174.204.188 at 06:43, 29 May 2020

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	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.		What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
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		+	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin.
		+	***Edited for punctuation: What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said “Teddy is right: there's something in the child” is that Nat, "the child," is really talented at playing the violin.
		+	***Since your sentence does not end with the quote, don't put the period. You can directly remove the comma and period around the quote. Add commas around "the child."
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		+	<br>I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin.
		+	***Edited for punctuation and fludiity: I say this because when Nat played the violin, everybody in the room stopped talking to listen to Nat play.
		+	***Add a comma after "violin." Condense some repetitive parts.
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		+	<br>Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
		+	***Edited for fluidity: After Nat played for a while, the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
		+	***Replace "a little violin" ith "for a while" (since you're talking about time). Remove "Then."
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		+	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said “Teddy is right: there's something in the child” is that Nat, "the child," is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin, everybody in the room stopped talking to listen to Nat play. After Nat played for a while, the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.
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		+	***Overall, good job! Please focus on your punctuation (comma/periods).
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   What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.”  is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin.  I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin.  Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.

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	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.		What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.

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	What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.		What Mrs. Bhaer meant when she said, “Teddy is right: there's something in the child.” is that Nat "the child" is really talented at playing the violin. I say this because when Nat played the violin everybody in the room who were talking stopped talking to listen to Nat play his violin. Then after the Nat played a little violin the children and Ms. Bhaer all went to the piano room to play a song together.