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−	The event that allowed the young man think of a plan in "SCHIPPEITARO" was when people talked about the dog schippeitaro. The text says,"' After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone. " To clarify, When the cats were talking about Schippeitaro the young man heard. In the text it also says," As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’ This shows the young man is now looking for the dog so he can save the maiden.	+	The event that allowed the young man think of a plan in "SCHIPPEITARO" was when people talked about the dog schippeitaro. The text says,"' After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone. " To clarify, When the cats were talking about Schippeitaro the young man heard. In the text it also says," As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’ This shows the young man is now looking for the dog so he can save the maiden.

		+	'''Corrections'''
		+	SCHIPPEITARO
		+	<br> ****"'I kept this the same."'
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		+	The event that allowed the young man think of a plan in "SCHIPPEITARO" was when people talked about the dog schippeitaro.
		+	<br> ****"'Since the actual title of this story is not in all caps in places other than the GoodToKnow website, I capitalized the first letter but had the rest lowercase. I also elaborated on this more to add more context since this is the intro sentence."'
		+	<br> In the story "Schippeitaro", the event that allowed the young man to think of a plan to catch the Cat King was when the people talked about the dog named Schippeitaro.
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		+	The text says,"' After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone. "
		+	<br> ****"'All I did here was changed the quotation marks so there wasn't space between them and the actual words inside of them."'
		+	<br> The text says, "After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone."
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		+	To clarify, When the cats were talking about Schippeitaro the young man heard.
		+	<br> ****"'All I did here was remove 'To clarify, When'."'
		+	<br> The cats were talking about Schippeitaro at night and the young man heard.
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		+	In the text it also says," As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’
		+	<br> ****"'Again, all I did here was remove the space between the quotation marks and the words inside of them and also added double quotation marks to the very end."'
		+	<br> In the text it also says, "As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’"
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		+	This shows the young man is now looking for the dog so he can save the maiden.
		+	<br> ****"'I only slightly modified this sentence as well to make the sentence flow better."'
		+	<br> After the young man heard about the dog, he wanted to find him so he could save the maiden.
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		+	'''Final Draft'''
		+	SCHIPPEITARO
		+	In the story "Schippeitaro", the event that allowed the young man to think of a plan to catch the Cat King was when the people talked about the dog named Schippeitaro. The text says, "After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone." The cats were talking about Schippeitaro at night and the young man heard. In the text it also says, "As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’" After the young man heard about the dog, he wanted to find him so he could save the maiden.
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		+	This paragraph was sort of difficult to edit because you didn't add very much to it at all. Please put in some more effort and your own words into your paragaphs.
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	The event that allowed the young man think of a plan in "SCHIPPEITARO" was when people talked about the dog schippeitaro. The text says,"' After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone. " To clarify, When the cats were talking about Schippeitaro the young man heard. In the text it also says," As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’ This shows the young man is now looking for the dog so he can save the maiden.		The event that allowed the young man think of a plan in "SCHIPPEITARO" was when people talked about the dog schippeitaro. The text says,"' After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone. " To clarify, When the cats were talking about Schippeitaro the young man heard. In the text it also says," As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’ This shows the young man is now looking for the dog so he can save the maiden.

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		+	The event that allowed the young man think of a plan in "SCHIPPEITARO" was when people talked about the dog schippeitaro. The text says,"' After some time he thought that in the midst of all their shrieks he could make out the words, ‘Do not tell Schippeitaro! Keep it hidden and secret! Do not tell Schippeitaro!’ Then, the midnight hour having passed, they all vanished, and the youth was left alone. " To clarify, When the cats were talking about Schippeitaro the young man heard. In the text it also says," As he listened to this story, the young man was filled with a great longing to rescue the maiden from her dreadful fate. The mention of the chapel set him thinking of the scene of the previous night, and he went over all the details again in his mind. ‘Who is Schippeitaro?’ he suddenly asked; ‘can any of you tell me?’ ‘Schippeitaro is the great dog that belongs to the overseer of our prince,’ said they; ‘and he lives not far away.’ This shows the young man is now looking for the dog so he can save the maiden.
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	Affection		Affection

	Both Captain Crewe and Sara IN Part 3 of "Little Princess" both show their affection for each other by spending lots of time together and buying stuff. First off, Sara stays with her dad until he leaves. The text says, '" Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India." This shows Sara loves her father very much and stays with him when she can. Additionally, Her father buys sara a lot of stuff. It says, " They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah." To enumerate, Sara's dad shows affection to his daughter by buying her things. In conclusion, They both show affection to each other in different ways.		Both Captain Crewe and Sara IN Part 3 of "Little Princess" both show their affection for each other by spending lots of time together and buying stuff. First off, Sara stays with her dad until he leaves. The text says, '" Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India." This shows Sara loves her father very much and stays with him when she can. Additionally, Her father buys sara a lot of stuff. It says, " They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah." To enumerate, Sara's dad shows affection to his daughter by buying her things. In conclusion, They both show affection to each other in different ways.

		+	'''Corrections'''
		+	Affection
		+	<br> ****"'I kept this title."'
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		+	Both Captain Crewe and Sara IN Part 3 of "Little Princess" both show their affection for each other by spending lots of time together and buying stuff.
		+	<br> ****"'For this part, I put the part about the title at the beginning and then added Captain Crewe and Sara (I flipped it). Saying 'buying stuff' makes it sound like Sara also bought her dad stuff, which she didn't. Instead, I changed 'by spending lots of time together and buying stuff' to 'in different ways'. That way, you are able to show the reader that you're going to talk about more than one thing without confusing them or accidentally misleading them. I also changed the title from "Little Princess" to "A Little Princess"."'
		+	<br> In part three of "A Little Princess", both Captain Crewe and Sara show their affection for each other in different ways.
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		+	First off, Sara stays with her dad until he leaves.
		+	<br> ****"'Here, I changed 'stays with her dad until he leaves' to 'stays with her dad in London until he goes home'. Before, the reader could get confused - where did Sara stay with him? Why did he leave? Where did he go? Slightly changing the sentence to add more detail is a good way to go ahead and answer those questions."'
		+	<br> First off, Sara stays with her dad in London until he goes home.
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		+	The text says, '" Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India."
		+	<br> ****"'All I did here was change the quotation marks in front of the quote from '" to " because it only needs the double (")."'
		+	<br> The text says, "Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India."
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		+	This shows Sara loves her father very much and stays with him when she can.
		+	<br> ****"'Here, I just added 'how' after 'This shows' to make the sentence read more smoothly. I also changed 'and stays with him when she can' to 'so she wanted to spend as much time with him as she could before he left'. Adding 'before he left' emphasizes how spending time with him in this context shows her love for him."'
		+	<br> This shows how Sara loves her father very much, so she wanted to spend as much time with him as she could before he left.
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		+	Additionally, Her father buys sara a lot of stuff.
		+	<br> ****"'Good transition word here! In this part, I changed 'Her' to 'her' since it isn't a proper noun. I ended up taking Sara's name out of this part since we said it in the last sentence, but be sure that you're capitalizing names! I added 'when they're out in London together' to the end of the sentence to be more specific provide the reader with more context."'
		+	<br> Additionally, her father buys her a lot of stuff when they're out in London together.
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		+	It says, " They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah."
		+	<br> ****"'The reader might not know what 'it' is, so I changed that to 'The text', and then I changed 'says' to 'states' since we already said 'The text says,' a little bit earlier. I also removed the space between the first quotation marks (") and the beginning of the quote."'
		+	<br> The text states, "They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah."
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		+	To enumerate, Sara's dad shows affection to his daughter by buying her things.
		+	<br> ****"''''Megu, I have told you three times now: enumerate is not the word you're looking for. 'Enumerate' means to mention a number of things one by one, like reading off a list.''' The word you're thinking of is 'elaborate', which means 'to develop or present in detail'. For example, I could tell you that a book is about a tree and a boy, and then ''elaborate'' by adding more details about it. However, you didn't elaborate in this sentence either, you just summarized the quote. I removed the word completely and said 'Here,' at the beginning instead. Then, I changed 'to his daughter' to 'for her'. Saying Sara's name but then saying 'his daughter' makes it seem like you're talking about two different people."'
		+	<br> Here, Sara's dad showed affection for her by buying her things.
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		+	In conclusion, They both show affection to each other in different ways.
		+	<br> ****"All I did here was change 'They' to 'they' since it isn't a proper noun and 'to each other' to 'for each other'."'
		+	<br> In conclusion, they both show affection for each other in different ways.
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		+	'''Final Draft'''
		+	Affection
		+	In part three of "A Little Princess", both Captain Crewe and Sara show their affection for each other in different ways. First off, Sara stays with her dad in London until he goes home. The text says, "Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India." This shows how Sara loves her father very much, so she wanted to spend as much time with him as she could before he left. Additionally, her father buys her a lot of stuff when they're out in London together. The text states, "They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah." Here, Sara's dad showed affection for her by buying her things. In conclusion, they both show affection for each other in different ways.

		+	Megu, I have now had to explain to you why 'enumerate' is not the correct word choice four times now. I've even spoken with your teacher about it, but you continue to use it. It seems like you aren't reading my comments. I can't help you if you don't read my comments and corrections. Other than that, this paragraph was good. Please make sure you're reading my comments, though. Please let me know if you need help.
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	Affection		Affection

−	Both Captain Crewe and Sara show their affection for each other by spending lots of time together and buying stuff. First off, Sara stays with her dad until he leaves. The text says, '" Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India." This shows Sara loves her father very much and stays with him when she can. Additionally, Her father buys sara a lot of stuff. It says, " They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah." To enumerate, Sara's dad shows affection to his daughter by buying her things. In conclusion, They both show affection to each other in different ways.	+	Both Captain Crewe and Sara IN Part 3 of "Little Princess" both show their affection for each other by spending lots of time together and buying stuff. First off, Sara stays with her dad until he leaves. The text says, '" Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India." This shows Sara loves her father very much and stays with him when she can. Additionally, Her father buys sara a lot of stuff. It says, " They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah." To enumerate, Sara's dad shows affection to his daughter by buying her things. In conclusion, They both show affection to each other in different ways.

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		+	Both Captain Crewe and Sara show their affection for each other by spending lots of time together and buying stuff. First off, Sara stays with her dad until he leaves. The text says, '" Sara stayed with her father at his hotel for several days; in fact, she remained with him until he sailed away again to India." This shows Sara loves her father very much and stays with him when she can. Additionally, Her father buys sara a lot of stuff. It says, " They went out and visited many big shops together, and bought a great many things. They bought, indeed, a great many more things than Sara needed; but Captain Crewe was a rash, innocent young man and wanted his little girl to have everything she admired and everything he admired himself, so between them, they collected a wardrobe much too grand for a child of seven. There were velvet dresses trimmed with costly furs, and lace dresses, and embroidered ones, and hats with great, soft ostrich feathers, and ermine coats and muffs, and boxes of tiny gloves and handkerchiefs and silk stockings in such abundant supplies that the polite young women behind the counters whispered to each other that the odd little girl with the big, solemn eyes must be at least some foreign princess—perhaps the little daughter of an Indian rajah." To enumerate, Sara's dad shows affection to his daughter by buying her things. In conclusion, They both show affection to each other in different ways.
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	BOOKS		BOOKS
	The books that sara are into are smart stuff. The text says," She is always starving for new books to gobble, and she wants grown-up books—great, big, fat ones—French and German as well as English—history and biography and poets, and all sorts of things."		The books that sara are into are smart stuff. The text says," She is always starving for new books to gobble, and she wants grown-up books—great, big, fat ones—French and German as well as English—history and biography and poets, and all sorts of things."

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 The books that sara are into are smart stuff. The text says," She is always starving for new books to gobble, and she wants grown-up books—great, big, fat ones—French and German as well as English—history and biography and poets, and all sorts of things."
 The Place
 The thing that worried Sara was "the place". In the text it states, " During her short life, only one thing had troubled her, and that thing was "the place" she was to be taken to some day. The climate of India was very bad for children, and as soon as possible they were sent away from it—generally to England and to school. She had seen other children go away and had heard their fathers and mothers talk about the letters they received from them. She had known that she would be obliged to go also, and though sometimes her father's stories of the voyage and the new country had attracted her, she had been troubled by the thought that he could not stay with her." This means "the place" has troubled sara throughout most of her life. In short, "The place" gets Sara worried.
+''Megu, this is not enough for me to edit. You wrote three sentences and the rest was a quote from the story. I don't want to write your paragraph for you, because that's your job. I'm here to edit what you write and explain why I edit how I do, but there isn't enough here for me to do that. Please put in some more effort next time. You can do it!
+- Lainey Morris''
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		+	The books that sara are into are smart stuff. The text says," She is always starving for new books to gobble, and she wants grown-up books—great, big, fat ones—French and German as well as English—history and biography and poets, and all sorts of things."
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	The Place		The Place
	The thing that worried Sara was "the place". In the text it states, " During her short life, only one thing had troubled her, and that thing was "the place" she was to be taken to some day. The climate of India was very bad for children, and as soon as possible they were sent away from it—generally to England and to school. She had seen other children go away and had heard their fathers and mothers talk about the letters they received from them. She had known that she would be obliged to go also, and though sometimes her father's stories of the voyage and the new country had attracted her, she had been troubled by the thought that he could not stay with her." This means "the place" has troubled sara throughout most of her life. In short, "The place" gets Sara worried.		The thing that worried Sara was "the place". In the text it states, " During her short life, only one thing had troubled her, and that thing was "the place" she was to be taken to some day. The climate of India was very bad for children, and as soon as possible they were sent away from it—generally to England and to school. She had seen other children go away and had heard their fathers and mothers talk about the letters they received from them. She had known that she would be obliged to go also, and though sometimes her father's stories of the voyage and the new country had attracted her, she had been troubled by the thought that he could not stay with her." This means "the place" has troubled sara throughout most of her life. In short, "The place" gets Sara worried.

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		+	The thing that worried Sara was "the place". In the text it states, " During her short life, only one thing had troubled her, and that thing was "the place" she was to be taken to some day. The climate of India was very bad for children, and as soon as possible they were sent away from it—generally to England and to school. She had seen other children go away and had heard their fathers and mothers talk about the letters they received from them. She had known that she would be obliged to go also, and though sometimes her father's stories of the voyage and the new country had attracted her, she had been troubled by the thought that he could not stay with her." This means "the place" has troubled sara throughout most of her life. In short, "The place" gets Sara worried.
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 The Performance
 In part seven of "Little Women", the kids are performing a show.  The story states,"' Very clever were some of their productions, pasteboard guitars, antique lamps made of old-fashioned butter boats covered with silver paper, gorgeous robes of old cotton, glittering with tin spangles from a pickle factory, and armor covered with the same useful diamond shaped bits left in sheets when the lids of preserve pots were cut out. The big chamber was the scene of many innocent revels." To clarify, the kids are setting up for the performance. The story continues and says," There was a good deal of rustling and whispering behind the curtain, a trifle of lamp smoke, and an occasional giggle from Amy, who was apt to get hysterical in the excitement of the moment. Presently a bell sounded, the curtains flew apart, and the operatic tragedy began..."Then the curtain fell, and the audience reposed and ate candy while discussing the merits of the play." This shows the performance starting and ending. To conclude, The kids in "Little Women" are performing a show.
-Again in my second quote There was a good deal of rustling and whispering behind the curtain, a trifle of lamp smoke, and an occasional giggle from Amy, who was apt to get hysterical in the excitement of the moment. Presently a bell sounded, the curtains flew apart, and the operatic tragedy began..."Then the curtain fell, and the audience reposed and ate candy while discussing the merits of the play." my teacher told me to put... three dots when you want to put two quotes in so thats why i did that. ^^)-(sideways smile)  ok thank you
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