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 In the story " THE MICE AND THE WEASELS", the the soldier mice were able to get away, but the leaders didn't because they cared about their appearances only. The leaders only cared about how they will look except for the battle. The clothing that they wore was not good for the fight.
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	In conclusion, the leader mice wasn't able to escape, but the soldiers were able to escape. The leadership for the leaders were not as good because the only thought about how they looked. Also the leaders were suborn of how they thought of fighting with the weasles.		In conclusion, the leader mice wasn't able to escape, but the soldiers were able to escape. The leadership for the leaders were not as good because the only thought about how they looked. Also the leaders were suborn of how they thought of fighting with the weasles.
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-In the story " THE MICE AND THE WEASELS", the the soilder mice were able to get away, but the leaders didn't because they cared about their apperences only. The
+In the story " THE MICE AND THE WEASELS", the the soldier mice were able to get away, but the leaders didn't because they cared about their appearances only. The leaders only cared about how they will look except for the battle. The clothing that they wore was not good for the fight.

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 Of all land animals, the elephant is the largest living land animal. Elephants have different types of body features, sizes, and habitats.
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 In conclusion elephants are the largest land animal. Elephants have different body features like trunks for cooling, body hair, and a huge head. It has physical characteristics like elephants weighing up to 9 ton, stands 3-4 meters, and females are smaller than male elephants. Also elephant's habitats are savannas, grasland, tropical and subtropical regions of Africa and Asia, in deserts, and swamps.

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 Of all the creatures on earth, none can compare to the amazingly humongous, aquatic, and interesting mammals. The whales have physical characteristics, habits, and are endangered and hunted down.
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	*** We can also cut the net two paragraphs. All four paragraphs say essentially the same thing. All we have to do is find a way to combine them, and then you will have a great summary!		*** We can also cut the net two paragraphs. All four paragraphs say essentially the same thing. All we have to do is find a way to combine them, and then you will have a great summary!

−		+	The story, that the 2 soldiers and the robber had similarities and differences for the 2 soldiers. The soldiers hi a similarity that that the soldiers of both soldiers. They are different is that one of the soldiers had ran away and the other soldier stayed and stayed brave.
		+	*** It is evident in the story that the two soldiers have both similarities and differences.

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	In the story, to the two soldiers and the robber, there are differences in there. One difference is that one soldier in the story one did not leave, the other soldier ran away. In the text it states that, "... one soldier ran away, but the other soldier thought he was strong and stayed." The first soldier and and the other soldier was different in many ways.		In the story, to the two soldiers and the robber, there are differences in there. One difference is that one soldier in the story one did not leave, the other soldier ran away. In the text it states that, "... one soldier ran away, but the other soldier thought he was strong and stayed." The first soldier and and the other soldier was different in many ways.
−	*** This entire paragraph can be cut. It is good that your writing is detailed, but this is supposed to be a summary ~~anddoes~~ not need to be this long.	+	*** This entire paragraph can be cut. It is good that your writing is detailed, but this is supposed to be a summary and does not need to be this long.
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		+	*** We can also cut the net two paragraphs. All four paragraphs say essentially the same thing. All we have to do is find a way to combine them, and then you will have a great summary!

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	The story, that the 2 soldiers and the robber had similarities and differences for the 2 soldiers. The soldiers hi a similarity that that the soldiers of both soldiers. They are different is that one of the soldiers had ran away and the other soldier stayed and stayed brave.		The story, that the 2 soldiers and the robber had similarities and differences for the 2 soldiers. The soldiers hi a similarity that that the soldiers of both soldiers. They are different is that one of the soldiers had ran away and the other soldier stayed and stayed brave.

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		+	According to the story the the characters in, the two soldiers and the robber, there are similarities and differences.
		+	*** In the story, the characters of the soldier and the robber have both similarities and differences.

		+	The similarity in the story is that both of the soldiers are our soldiers. A difference in the story is that the the soldier one soldier was very scared and ran away, but the other soldier was strong and did not leave.
		+	*** The soldiers have similarities because they are both soldiers. However, these soldiers are different because one got very scared and ran away, whereas the other soldier did not leave at all.
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		+	In the text it states that, "... one soldier ran away, but the other soldier thought he was strong and stayed."
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		+	In the story, to the two soldiers and the robber, there are differences in there. One difference is that one soldier in the story one did not leave, the other soldier ran away. In the text it states that, "... one soldier ran away, but the other soldier thought he was strong and stayed." The first soldier and and the other soldier was different in many ways.
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		+	***One thing to consider "right off the bat" is that you do not need to

	According to the story, the donkey and the lap dog has similarities and differences. One similar is that the donkey and the lap dog both have the same owner. A difference is that the donkey had to work and the lap dog didn't.		According to the story, the donkey and the lap dog has similarities and differences. One similar is that the donkey and the lap dog both have the same owner. A difference is that the donkey had to work and the lap dog didn't.