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    Researchers could lead to a stable and peaceful co-existence between the roaming animals - which its number is more than millions worldwide- and human. We all know that dogs had developed a domestic relationship with human since 15,000 years ago, but the stray dogs seem different from those dwell under the same roof as human. However, as researches were conducted, scientists derived a conclusion that stray dogs can read human gesture, due to the their conflicts and tension with humans, especially in India where more than 30 millions of 300 millions of stray dogs roam around the place, they were not respect by the local communities. Stray dogs will bite the one who trying to contact with them because they don't know if the person is a foe or friend that will hurt them or give them food, this lead a public risk in India, dogs carried rabies, a disease that kills up to 20,000 people in a year in India, most were children. Now, we know these free-ranging dogs understand the human gesture, we can develop a co-existence with them and educate adults and children- we often shared their food with them- how to interact with stray dogs. Strays dogs are just like those who lived with us, they don't deserve such discrimination; they deserve our respects.
 Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/animals/2020/01/stray-dogs-communication-rabies-health/
 ——- Is It Really Human Error?——-

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 ----- Prove of Evolution-----
    Researchers could lead to a stable and peaceful co-existence between the roaming animals - which its number is more than millions worldwide- and human. We all know that dogs had developed a domestic relationship with human since 15,000 years ago, but the stray dogs seem different from those dwell under the same roof as human. However, as researches were conducted, scientists derived a conclusion that stray dogs can read human gesture, due to the their conflicts and tension with humans, especially in India where more than 30 millions of 300 millions of stray dogs roam around the place, they were not respect by the local communities. Stray dogs will bite the one who trying to contact with them because they don't know if the person is a foe or friend that will hurt them or give them food, this lead a public risk in India, dogs carried rabies, a disease that kills up to 20,000 people in a year in India, most were children. Now, we know these free-ranging dogs understand the human gesture, we can develop a co-existence with them and educate adults and children- we often shared their food with them- how to interact with stray dogs. Strays dogs are just like those who lived with us, they don't deserve such discrimination; they deserve our respects.
 ——- Is It Really Human Error?——-

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 ——- Is It Really Human Error?——-
    As we all know, United States has recently declared war with Iran due the goal of eliminating the world’s top terrorist. However, the aggression between the two countries has involved other nations: one Ukrainian International Airlines plane has got crashed shortly after the Iran fires a missile at U.S. force. The tension has escalated between the two nations and caused the deaths of 176 innocent passengers’ lives. In response to the airplane crash, Iranian president Hassan Rouhani states that “it was a human error at this time of crisis caused by U.S. adventurism,” this demonstrates a vibe of intimidation and aggression of the United States regimes. As events like this will slowly accumulate, eventually the battle between Iran and United States will involved all the nations; no one can escape such fate.

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 ----- Ice isn't slippery-----
    The matter "ice" is not slippery, the reason why the nature of ice （Slippery） is because a film of water generated by friction. But we know little about this liquid film, its properties and thickness, we don't know much about it except the fact it causes ice to be slippery. Researchers formed into small teams to solve the mystery using a device that can precisely measure the forces during ice gliding; ever though, its size limit the area it can measure, few centimeters is enough to measure an analysis and conclusion of properties of friction. From the experiment, scientists derived the friction indeed generated from the film liquid. This liquid does not only consist of water, but also oil with complex properties, this suggested the surface ice does not transform into water ( even though it suppose to) end up as a mixture. This will us understand the properties of melted ice, ice gliding and solutions to solve skidding on icy road.

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	The matter "ice" is not slippery, the reason why the nature of ice （Slippery） is because a film of water generated by friction. But we know little about this liquid film, its properties and thickness, we don't know much about it except the fact it causes ice to be slippery. Researchers formed into small teams to solve the mystery using a device that can precisely measure the forces during ice gliding; ever though, its size limit the area it can measure, few centimeters is enough to measure an analysis and conclusion of properties of friction. From the experiment, scientists derived the friction indeed generated from the film liquid. This liquid does not only consist of water, but also oil with complex properties, this suggested the surface ice does not transform into water ( even though it suppose to) end up as a mixture. This will us understand the properties of melted ice, ice gliding and solutions to solve skidding on icy road.		The matter "ice" is not slippery, the reason why the nature of ice （Slippery） is because a film of water generated by friction. But we know little about this liquid film, its properties and thickness, we don't know much about it except the fact it causes ice to be slippery. Researchers formed into small teams to solve the mystery using a device that can precisely measure the forces during ice gliding; ever though, its size limit the area it can measure, few centimeters is enough to measure an analysis and conclusion of properties of friction. From the experiment, scientists derived the friction indeed generated from the film liquid. This liquid does not only consist of water, but also oil with complex properties, this suggested the surface ice does not transform into water ( even though it suppose to) end up as a mixture. This will us understand the properties of melted ice, ice gliding and solutions to solve skidding on icy road.
	Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191105104416.htm		Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191105104416.htm
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		+	'''*The Mystery Behind 'Slippery' Ice*'''
		+	- Your title is too direct; we want something to grab our attention, not just a simple statement.
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		+	'''* The slipperiness of ice doesn't come from the matter itself, but from a film of water generated by friction.*'''
		+	- The parenthetical elements in this sentence are not complete; it's like you have two starts to the sentence.
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		+	'''* We know very little about this liquid film, besides its basic properties and thickness, which causes ice to be slippery.*'''
		+	- "Very" and "besides" gives direction to your sentence. Do not start the sentence with a conjunction-- this makes the sentence seem incomplete.
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		+	'''*Researchers use a device that can precisely measure the influence of friction on ice, through measurement, analysis and an understanding of the properties of friction.*'''
		+	- Some phrasing in this sentence is too closely connected to the original text; when you do this, your writing can sound false and mismatched. Instead, map out the sentence and use your own terms and ideas to support the sentence.
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		+	''''*From this experiment, scientists confirmed that the liquid film is indeed generated by friction. *'''
		+	- Use "this" to show directness, instead of "the" which is generalized. I also switched "liquid film" and "friction" for clarity.
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		+	'''*This liquid does not solely consist of water; oils with complex properties were also present, which suggests that surface ice does not melt to pure water, but instead ends up as a mixture of substances. *'''
		+	- Your sentence has good points but it is a run on sentence. Utalize semi-colons and conjunctions to help the sentence flow without making the reader out of breath.
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		+	'''*These discoveries help us understand the properties of melted ice, and can help us find solutions to gliding and icy roads.*'''
		+	- "This" is a bit too general. "These" is more direct, especially for a conclusion. "Skiddy" is also too colloquial.
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		+	EDITED VERSION
		+	The Mystery Behind 'Slippery' Ice
		+	The slipperiness of ice doesn't come from the matter itself, but from a film of water generated by friction. We know very little about this liquid film, besides its basic properties and thickness, which causes ice to be slippery. Researchers use a device that can precisely measure the influence of friction on ice, through measurement, analysis and an understanding of the properties of friction. From this experiment, scientists confirmed that the liquid film is indeed generated by friction. This liquid does not solely consist of water; oils with complex properties were also present, which suggests that surface ice does not melt to pure water, but instead ends up as a mixture of substances. These discoveries help us understand the properties of melted ice, and can help us find solutions to gliding and icy roads.
		+	https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191105104416.htm

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 '''*** However, scientists have noted the distinctions between different kinds of noises.***'''
-Your use of "there" is incorrect. You must break the contraction
+Your use of "there" is incorrect. You must break the contraction. Sometimes, contractions can make the writing too colloquial.
 ——- Myth Buster ———

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    We often think the noise we hear from one place is just the same exact voice we hear from any other place. However, there're some differences and distinctions scientists had made about different kinds of noises. "White noise," a noise that's beneficial to us, this noise contributes to the hearing of pure sounds becoming more precise, it may apply to other further development of cochlear implants. Our brain subtle different environments, so we can recognize the tone of noise and recognize it easier with white noise in the background. As the data showed, the white noise inhibited the activity of the nerve cells and more of these neutrons overlap creating a more distinct tone, which increases the precision of the noise. Understanding these matters help us reach the truth one step closer.
 Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/11/191107093927.htm
 ——- Myth Buster ———

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 Source: https://www.nationalgeographic.com/science/2019/11/houseplants-dont-purify-indoor-air/
 -----Needs to Evolve-----***
      -Sounds incomplete. Let's change by keeping the same meaning but, with different words. Possibly "Adapting to Environments" or "Adapting Animals" or "Food Storage in Animals";

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    In 1935, Erwin Schrodinger has conduct an experiment about quantum cat, in which the cat enclosed in a box together with radioactive material, a detector and a lethal amount of poison. During this time, the cat remain in a condition that in which it is alive and dead the same time. In this experiment, the state of the cat is extremely sensitive where a little thermal interactions with the environment cause them to collapse, this is the reason why it is only possible to realize significantly few quantum bits of what Schrodinger cat depict. Scientists are not able to control the whole experiment, but only more than 50 in laboratory experiment. In addition, the process is complicated and usually takes too much time and the result can be measure before it has been destroyed. This advances in quantum research were complemented by efforts of a Chinese group and the researchers succeeded in new record for experiment approach.
 Source: https://www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2019/08/190813102023.htm
 -----Influence of arctic sea-ice loss-----