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 Source: https://www.dogonews.com/2019/8/7/the-bottle-cap-challenge-is-taking-the-internet-by-storm ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
-Informative Dinosaur Egg Fossils
+'''Informative Dinosaur Egg Fossils'''
-Newly discovered dinosaur egg fossils have given researchers information about how the dinosaurs looked and acted.
+'''Newly discovered dinosaur egg fossils have given researchers information about how the dinosaurs looked and acted.'''
 -Added “newly discovered...have given researchers” to provide more context for the reader; The dinosaur egg fossils gave information about how the dinosaur looked and acted.
-For example, groups of fossilized eggs found in Mongolia showed how dinosaurs cared for their young.
+'''For example, groups of fossilized eggs found in Mongolia showed how dinosaurs cared for their young.'''
 -Removed “when” and the semicolon for clarity and coherence; For example, when groups of fossilized eggs were found in Mongolia; it showed how dinosaurs cared for the young.
-More information showed that dinosaurs were born and nurtured in colonies.
+'''More information showed that dinosaurs were born and nurtured in colonies.'''
 -Changed “would be” to “were.” Because you’re describing a past occurrence, the past tense is a better fit here.
 -Changed “nurtured and born” to “born and nurtured.” The dinosaurs were born first and then nurtured, so I changed the phrasing to reflect that; More information showed that dinosaurs would be nurtured and born in colonies.
-Dinosaur hunters and researchers proved that dinosaurs took care of their babies as a bunch, not individually.
+'''Dinosaur hunters and researchers proved that dinosaurs took care of their babies as a bunch, not individually.'''
 -Changed “take” to “took” to keep the past tense consistent; Dinosaur hunters and researchers proved that dinosaurs take care of their babies as a bunch, not individually.
-The babies were strong enough to support themselves right after they hatched.
+'''The babies were strong enough to support themselves right after they hatched.'''
 -Deleted “dinosaurs.”
 -Changed “are” to “were.” Be careful to watch your tenses; The dinosaurs' babies are strong enough to support themselves right after they hatch.
-There is much information we can learn through these fossils.
+'''There is much information we can learn through these fossils.'''
 -Changed the wording of the sentence. This is to emphasize the fact that the researchers are learning more about the dinosaurs because of these fossils, not just learning about the fossils themselves; There is much information about these fossils we can learn about.
-Informative Dinosaur Egg Fossils (completely edited article)
+'''Informative Dinosaur Egg Fossils''' (completely edited article)
 Newly discovered dinosaur egg fossils have given researchers information about how the dinosaurs looked and acted. For example, groups of fossilized eggs found in Mongolia showed how dinosaurs cared for their young. More information showed that dinosaurs were born and nurtured in colonies. Dinosaur hunters and researchers proved that dinosaurs took care of their babies as a bunch, not individually. The babies were strong enough to support themselves right after they hatched. There is much information we can learn through these fossils.
-Informative Dinosaur Egg Fossils (unedited article)
+'''Informative Dinosaur Egg Fossils''' (unedited article)
 The dinosaur egg fossils gave information about how the dinosaur looked and acted. For example, when groups of fossilized eggs were found in Mongolia; it showed how dinosaurs cared for the young. More information showed that dinosaurs would be nurtured and born in colonies. Dinosaur hunters and researchers proved that dinosaurs take care of their babies as a bunch, not individually. The dinosaurs' babies are strong enough to support themselves right after they hatch. There is much information about these fossils we can learn about.

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 -Changed "this" to "the" to make it more general; The latest to join this eternal trend of viral competitions is the Bottle Cap Challenge.
-This challenge requires the challenger to take off the cap with a roundhouse kick.
+'''This challenge requires the challenger to take off the cap with a roundhouse kick.'''
-In late June 2019, Taekwondo instructor and fighter Farabi Davletchin started the challenge, and American musician John Mayer succeed the task in early July.
+'''In late June 2019, Taekwondo instructor and fighter Farabi Davletchin started the challenge, and American musician John Mayer succeed the task in early July.'''
 -Rephrased the sentence to make it a little less confusing. Before, the wording made it seem like the two events were flipped---John Mayer did the challenge first and then Davletchin created it. I changed some wording to clarify the chronological order of the challenge; Taekwondo instructor and fighter Farabi Davletchin in late June 2019, started the challenge after American musician John Mayer succeed the task in early July.
-The challengers show off their talent through Instagram, YouTube, and other social media sites.
+'''The challengers show off their talent through Instagram, YouTube, and other social media sites.'''
-An extreme, cool challenge was “German automobile manufacturer BMW, used the challenge to showcase their vehicles and the driving skills of the company's head instructor Claudia Hürtgen.”
+'''An extreme, cool challenge was “German automobile manufacturer BMW, used the challenge to showcase their vehicles and the driving skills of the company's head instructor Claudia Hürtgen.”'''
 -Deleted this sentence. Please don't directly quote from the source article.
-This challenge is dangerous, yet exciting.
+'''This challenge is dangerous, yet exciting.'''
-Bottle Cap Challenge (completely edited article)
+'''Bottle Cap Challenge''' (completely edited article)
 The latest to join the eternal trend of viral competitions is the Bottle Cap Challenge. This challenge requires the challenger to take off the cap with a roundhouse kick. In late June 2019, Taekwondo instructor and fighter Farabi Davletchin started the challenge, and American musician John Mayer succeed the task in early July. The challengers show off their talent through Instagram, YouTube, and other social media sites. This challenge is dangerous, yet exciting.
-Bottle Cap Challenge (unedited article)
+'''Bottle Cap Challenge''' (unedited article)
 The latest to join this eternal trend of viral competitions is the Bottle Cap Challenge. This challenge requires the challenger to take off the cap with a roundhouse kick. Taekwondo instructor and fighter Farabi Davletchin in late June 2019, started the challenge after American musician John Mayer succeed the task in early July. The challengers show off their talent through Instagram, YouTube, and other social media sites. An extreme, cool challenge was “German automobile manufacturer BMW, used the challenge to showcase their vehicles and the driving skills of the company's head instructor Claudia Hürtgen.” This challenge is dangerous, yet exciting.