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	<br>Humans can distinguish many things by their smell. When our sensory neurons detect a smell, our brain receives a message on what the smell is coming from. This recognizing pattern of the notes of a song are just like how we recognize objects with our brain. When you see something, your brain will most likely remember it in the future. If you smell something, the aroma will also be easy to recall. Scientists have done studies on mice by observing how they reacted to the smells of the substances. This experiment allowed them to figure out if animals had similar sensory reactions to us. The similarities of the human brain and nature are can be astonishing.		<br>Humans can distinguish many things by their smell. When our sensory neurons detect a smell, our brain receives a message on what the smell is coming from. This recognizing pattern of the notes of a song are just like how we recognize objects with our brain. When you see something, your brain will most likely remember it in the future. If you smell something, the aroma will also be easy to recall. Scientists have done studies on mice by observing how they reacted to the smells of the substances. This experiment allowed them to figure out if animals had similar sensory reactions to us. The similarities of the human brain and nature are can be astonishing.

−	<br>6/24/2020 https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/the-brain-interprets-smell-like-the-notes-of-a-song/	+	<br>6/25/2020 https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/the-brain-interprets-smell-like-the-notes-of-a-song/

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		+	<br>The Brain Interprets Smell Like Notes of a Song
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		+	<br>Humans can distinguish many things by their smell. When our sensory neurons detect a smell, our brain receives a message on what the smell is coming from. This recognizing pattern of the notes of a song are just like how we recognize objects with our brain. When you see something, your brain will most likely remember it in the future. If you smell something, the aroma will also be easy to recall. Scientists have done studies on mice by observing how they reacted to the smells of the substances. This experiment allowed them to figure out if animals had similar sensory reactions to us. The similarities of the human brain and nature are can be astonishing.
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		+	<br>6/24/2020 https://www.scientificamerican.com/article/the-brain-interprets-smell-like-the-notes-of-a-song/
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 Opinion Writing
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 Police brutality is a major subject that has been going on in the past weeks.  My opinion about it is that it is an unacceptable form of power and these corrupt cops are taking advantage of their power.  For example, the recent death of George Flyod was most likely the result of a police officer with personal grudges against the black community and he let his feelings control him.   Many other criminals have been detained and arrested things much worse than his criminal background.  This was an unfair act of justice and many other police officers have been abusing their power.  Cops have been doing very foolish acts to citizens.
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 The children were trying to take on the role of making sure nothing messes up in the evening.
-*** The children took on the role of making sure nothin messed up the evening.
+*** The children took on the role of making sure nothing messed up the evening.
 They wanted to help out make the day better.
-*** They wanted to help make the day better.
+*** There's a simple mistake here. Change the sentence to: "They wanted to help make the day better."

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	The children are getting ready and preparing for the event.		The children are getting ready and preparing for the event.
−	*** Try: "In the novel, children are getting ready for the event." It's a little vague otherwise.	+	*** Try: "In the novel, the children are getting ready and preparing for the event." It's a little vague otherwise.
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		+	According to the text, "The rest of the day was devoted to preparations for the evening festivities."
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		+	This shows that they were busy making sure that everything would go out as planned.
		+	*** "This shows" shouldn't be used if you can avoid it. It's choppy and very nonspecific. Let's instead try: "The previous quote illustrates that the children were busy making sure that everything would go as planned.
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		+	The children were trying to take on the role of making sure nothing messes up in the evening.
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		+	<br>Title: A Little Princess: Sara Part 2
		+	<br>What kind of reading does Sara like? Use at least two details from the passage to support your response.
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		+	Sara likes reading books that are beyond her age level. According to the texts, "She is always starving for new books to gobble, and she wants grown-up books." Sara's interest in reading is incredible and she loves reading big, long books. The text also states that, "great, big, fat ones—French and German as well as English—history and biography and poets, and all sorts of things." She reads hefty books with a long story or a lot of information to keep her busy. Sara likes reading large books.
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 <br>Title: Little Women Part 7
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 The children are getting ready and preparing for the event.  According to the text, "The rest of the day was devoted to preparations for the evening festivities."  This shows that they were busy making sure that everything would go out as planned.  The text also states that, "...the girls put their wits to work, and necessity being the mother of invention, made whatever they needed. "  The children were trying to take on the role of making sure nothing messes up in the evening.  They wanted to help out make the day better.
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 <br> What is the atmosphere (feeling of the people) described in home with Mrs. March?  Use at least two details from the passage to support your response.
-The atmosphere described in home with Ms. March is comfortable.  According to the text, "Mrs. March gave the mother tea and gruel, and comforted her with promises of help, while she dressed the little baby as tenderly as if it had been her own. "  Ms. March wants to make sure that the children are being cared for as if they were her own.  A lot of people would find that comforting.  The text also states that, "Beth played her happiest march, Amy threw open the door, and Meg enacted escort with great dignity. Mrs. March was both surprised and touched, and smiled with her eyes full as she examined her presents and read the little notes which accompanied them."  Ms. March was rewarded for her caring skills and the moment was very heartwarming.  This shows that the family was feeling better with Ms. March.
+The atmosphere described in home with Ms. March is comfortable.  According to the text, "Mrs. March gave the mother tea and gruel, and comforted her with promises of help, while she dressed the little baby as tenderly as if it had been her own. "  Ms. March wants to make sure that the children are being cared for as if they were her own.  A lot of people would find that comforting.  The text also states that "Beth played her happiest march, Amy threw open the door, and Meg enacted escort with great dignity. Mrs. March was both surprised and touched, and smiled with her eyes full as she examined her presents and read the little notes which accompanied them."  Ms. March was rewarded for her caring skills and the moment was very heartwarming.  This shows that the family was feeling better with Ms. March.
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	<br>Title: Little Women Part 6		<br>Title: Little Women Part 6

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-Title: A Little Princess: Sara Part 1
+<br>Title: A Little Princess: Sara Part 1
-What worried Sara?  Use at least two details from the passage to support your response.
+<br>What worried Sara?  Use at least two details from the passage to support your response.
 Her father's absence worried Sara.  She didn't want to be alone but her father had to leave her at the school.  According to the text, "Couldn't you go to that place with me, papa?" she had asked when she was five years old. "Couldn't you go to school, too? I would help you with your lessons."  Sara wanted to stay with her father and help out.  The text also states that, "You will go to a nice house where there will be a lot of little girls, and you will play together, and I will send you plenty of books, and you will grow so fast that it will seem scarcely a year before you are big enough and clever enough to come back and take care of papa."  Papa has to leave Sara because he can't take care of both of them.  Sara doesn't want to leave her dad alone and wants to be together.