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−	~~'''How the Rainbow Flag Became the LGBT Symbol'''~~
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−	~~During June, gay pride month, many rainbow flags are held in honor of gay and LGBT pride.~~
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−	~~The rainbow flag came to be what it is now when Harvey Milk, one of the first openly gay elected officials of the U.S., urged Gilbert Baker, an openly gay drag queen, to design a symbol for gay pride.~~
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−	Baker chose the symbol to be a flag because he thought a flag would suit gays the most since a flag "proclaimed [the gays'] visibility or saying, 'This is who I am!'" Baker thought the rainbow was a natural flag from the sky, so he designed the gay pride flag from a rainbow.
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−	The flag had 8 colors, hot pink for sex, red for life, orange for healing, yellow for sunlight, green for nature, turquoise for art, indigo for harmony, and violet for spirit. The first version of the flag was first flown on June 25, 1978, during the San Francisco Gay Freedom Day Parade.
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−	The flags were manually made, but because of production issues, the pink and turquoise stripes were removed and indigo was replaced wit basic blue to soon form the modern LGBT flag with 6 colors in the form of a rainbow.
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−	~~Until 1994, the flag was not the official symbol of LGBT pride, but after the LGBT flag can be seen waving high in the sky with a lot of pride.~~
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−	~~'''How the Rainbow Flag Became the LGBT Symbol'''~~
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−	During June, gay pride month, many rainbow flags are held in honor of gay and LGBT pride. The rainbow flag came to be what it is now when Harvey Milk, one of the first openly gay elected officials of the U.S., urged Gilbert Baker, an openly gay drag queen, to design a symbol for gay pride. Baker chose the symbol to be a flag because he thought a flag would suit gays the most since a flag "proclaimed [the gays'] visibility or saying, 'This is who I am!'" Baker thought the rainbow was a natural flag from the sky, so he designed the gay pride flag from a rainbow. The flag had 8 colors, hot pink for sex, red for life, orange for healing, yellow for sunlight, green for nature, turquoise for art, indigo for harmony, and violet for spirit. The first version of the flag was first flown on June 25, 1978 during the San Francisco Gay Freedom Day Parade. The flags were manually made, but because of production issues, the pink and turquoise stripes were removed and indigo was replaced wit basic blue to soon form the modern LGBT flag with 6 colors in the form of a rainbow. Until 1994, the flag was not the official symbol of LGBT pride, but after the LGBT flag can be seen waving high in the sky with a lot of pride.
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−	During June, LGBT Pride Month, many rainbow flags are flown in honor of LGBT pride. The rainbow flag originated when Harvey Milk, one of the first openly gay elected officials in the United States, urged Gilbert Baker, an openly gay drag queen, to design a symbol for gay pride. Baker chose the symbol to be a flag because he thought it would suit the LGBT community since a flag "proclaimed visibility, or saying 'This is who I am'" and because he thought the rainbow was natural flag from the sky. The flag had 8 colors, hot pink for sex, red for life, orange for healing, yellow for sunlight, green for nature, turquoise for art, indigo for harmony, and violet for spirit. The first version of the flag was first flown on June 25, 1978, during the San Francisco Gay Freedom Day Parade. The flags were manually made, but because of production issues, the pink and turquoise stripes were removed and indigo was replaced with basic blue to soon form the modern LGBT flag with 6 colors in the form of a rainbow. The flag was not the official symbol of LGBT pride until 1994 when it could be seen waving high in the sky with a lot of pride.
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−	~~Source: https://www.britannica.com/story/how-did-the-rainbow-flag-become-a-symbol-of-lgbt-pride~~
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	'''Why Are Oceans Salty?'''		'''Why Are Oceans Salty?'''
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