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 Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale." Further more,people seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site. Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest. The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet. Those are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated.
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 There are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated. Earth day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.It usually has many outdoor  activities that helps our Earth. Some activities are, planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.
 Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale." Further more,people seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site. Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest. The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet. Those are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated.
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 There are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated. Earth day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.It usually has many outdoor  activities that helps our Earth. Some activities are, planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.
 Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale." Further more,people seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site. Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest. The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet. Those are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated.
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	There are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated. Earth day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.It usually has many outdoor activities that helps our Earth. Some activities are, planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.		There are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated. Earth day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.It usually has many outdoor activities that helps our Earth. Some activities are, planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.

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 <br>The Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic. To begin with, the robotic dog "Spot" can let doctors talk to patients without coming close to them. The text states, "In response, the company reconfigured the 3-foot tall, 70-pound robot to operate as a mobile telemedicine platform, enabling healthcare providers to determine a patient's condition remotely. The first four-legged 'medical practitioner' was deployed to the Brigham and Women’s Hospital of Harvard University on April 9, 2020. Equipped with an iPad 'face' and a two-way radio that allows for real-time conversation, Spot helps doctors to speak to patients without coming in contact with them." To clarify, Spot is useful for talking to patients without making contact with them. To add on, Spot can help get rid of the virus. According to the text it states, "'By attaching a UV-C light to the robot’s back, Spot could use the device to kill virus particles and disinfect surfaces in any unstructured space that needs support in decontamination — be it hospital tents or metro stations,' the company says." This shows Spot can kill virus particles when the company attaches the UV-C light onto its back. To sum up, this is how the Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.<br />
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 <br>Washing hands is very important because it can kill all the viruses on a person’s hands. Washing hands is like a weapon that can be used to kill the virus. If a person doesn’t wash their hands, that can lead them to have a fever, a cold, and more viruses that are bad for the body. Since COVID-19 first came from China, there have been 100,000 confirmed cases worldwide. Whenever a person touches someone that has sneezed or coughed on their hands, that person should never touch their face until their hands are washed. But water and soap aren’t the only tools that can help kill the virus — an alcohol-based sanitizer can also help kill the virus. These two methods can help prevent people from getting the virus, because SARS-CoV-2 is very easily transmitted to other people. If a person coughs or sneezes on their hands and touches other people, they can give the other people a virus and make them sick, which is why washing hands is very important.<br />
 <br>Source: https://www.smithsonianmag.com/science-nature/why-washing-your-hands-so-important-anyway-180974355/<br />
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		+	There are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated. Earth day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.It usually has many outdoor activities that helps our Earth. Some activities are, planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.
		+	Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale." Further more,people seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site. Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest. The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet. Those are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated.
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		+	<br>There are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated.<br />
		+	<br>*** This sentence can start with “The story reports two ways…”<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: The story reports two ways that Earth Day is being celebrated.<br />
		+	<br>Earth day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.<br />
		+	<br>*** Capitalize “day.”<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: Earth Day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22.<br />
		+	<br>It usually has many outdoor activities that helps our Earth.<br />
		+	<br>*** Change “It” to “There are.” Remove the “s” at the end of “help.” Avoid first person point of view (“our”) and use third person point of view only. <br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: There are usually many outdoor activities that help the Earth.<br />
		+	<br>Some activities are, planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.<br />
		+	<br>*** Change “are” to “include.” Use quotation marks around phrases from the article.<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: Some activities include “planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.”<br />
		+	<br>Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale."<br />
		+	<br>*** Add “According to the article” at the beginning of this sentence.<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: According to the article, Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale."<br />
		+	<br>Further more,people seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site.<br />
		+	<br>*** Add a space after the comma. “Further more” should be spelled as one word, as in “Furthermore.” Use quotation marks around phrases from the article.<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: Furthermore, people “seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site.”<br />
		+	<br>Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest.<br />
		+	<br>*** Add “According to the article” at the beginning of this sentence. Use quotation marks around phrases from the article.<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: According to the article, “Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest.”<br />
		+	<br>The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet. <br />
		+	<br>*** Add “The article adds” at the beginning of this sentence. Use quotation marks around phrases from the article.<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: The article adds, “The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet.”<br />
		+	<br>Those are two ways the story reports that Earth Day is being celebrated.<br />
		+	<br>*** You can move “that Earth Day is being celebrated” after “Those are the two ways.”<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: Those are the two ways that Earth Day is being celebrated, as reported in the story.<br />
		+	<br>*** After quoting from the article, explain what each quote means in your own words. Put quotation marks around phrases that are from the article. Avoid first person point of view (“our”) and use third person point of view only. <br />
		+	<br>Edited paragraph:<br />
		+	<br>The story reports two ways that Earth Day is being celebrated. Earth Day is celebrated tomorrow on April 22. There are usually many outdoor activities that help the Earth. Some activities include “planting trees, collecting roadside or beach trash, and conducting, or participating in, recycling and conservation programs.” According to the article, Ingmar Rentzhog, the founder and CEO of We Don't Have Time, said, "The current pandemic of coronavirus has harmed lives, livelihoods, and economies. It has also triggered the postponement of the crucial UK-hosted, UN climate conference, where climate action was meant to rise to the next level towards meeting the landmark Paris Agreement. The world must clearly lift the threat of the current pandemic, but we cannot lose sight of the even bigger crisis facing our planet and its people." He hopes the online conference will "inspire everyone to get the climate job done at speed and at scale." Furthermore, people “seeking Earth Day digital events closer to home can check out the interactive map on the Earth Day Network site.” According to the article, “Updated regularly, the comprehensive list, neatly classified in categories ranging from conservation to artists for Earth Day to citizen science, has something to suit every environmentalist's interest.” The article adds, “The non-profit organization has also put together a 22-day challenge that families can undertake to protect the planet.” Those are the two ways that Earth Day is being celebrated, as reported in the story.<br />
		+	<br>Edited by Penny Yagake<br />

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		+	The Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during COVID-19 pandemic. To begin with, the robotic dog "Spot" can let doctors talk to patients without coming close to them. The text states, "In response, the company reconfigured the 3-foot tall, 70-pound robot to operate as a mobile telemedicine platform, enabling healthcare providers to determine a patient's condition remotely. The first four-legged 'medical practitioner' was deployed to the Brigham and Women’s Hospital of Harvard University on April 9, 2020. Equipped with an iPad 'face' and a two-way radio that allows for real-time conversation, Spot helps doctors to speak to patients without coming in contact with them." To clarify, Spot is useful to contacting patients without contacting them. To add on, Spot can help get rid of the virus. According to the text it states, "'By attaching a UV-C light to the robot’s back, Spot could use the device to kill virus particles and disinfect surfaces in any unstructured space that needs support in decontamination — be it hospital tents or metro stations,'the company says." This shows Spot can kill virus particles when the company attaches the UV-C light onto it's back. To sum up, this is how the Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.
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		+	<br>The Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during COVID-19 pandemic. <br />
		+	<br>*** Add “the” before “COVID-19 pandemic.”<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: The Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.<br />
		+	<br>To begin with, the robotic dog "Spot" can let doctors talk to patients without coming close to them. <br />
		+	<br>*** Good.<br />
		+	<br>The text states, "In response, the company reconfigured the 3-foot tall, 70-pound robot to operate as a mobile telemedicine platform, enabling healthcare providers to determine a patient's condition remotely. The first four-legged 'medical practitioner' was deployed to the Brigham and Women’s Hospital of Harvard University on April 9, 2020. Equipped with an iPad 'face' and a two-way radio that allows for real-time conversation, Spot helps doctors to speak to patients without coming in contact with them." <br />
		+	<br>*** Good.<br />
		+	<br>To clarify, Spot is useful to contacting patients without contacting them. <br />
		+	<br>*** To make the sentence clearer, “to contacting” can be changed to “for talking to.” Change “contacting them” to “making contact with them.”<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: To clarify, Spot is useful for talking to patients without making contact with them. <br />
		+	<br>To add on, Spot can help get rid of the virus. <br />
		+	<br>*** Good.<br />
		+	<br>According to the text it states, "'By attaching a UV-C light to the robot’s back, Spot could use the device to kill virus particles and disinfect surfaces in any unstructured space that needs support in decontamination — be it hospital tents or metro stations,'the company says." <br />
		+	<br>*** Add a space before “the company says.”<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: According to the text it states, "'By attaching a UV-C light to the robot’s back, Spot could use the device to kill virus particles and disinfect surfaces in any unstructured space that needs support in decontamination — be it hospital tents or metro stations,' the company says." <br />
		+	<br>This shows Spot can kill virus particles when the company attaches the UV-C light onto it's back. <br />
		+	<br>*** Remove the apostrophe in “it’s.” The word “it’s” means “it is” while “its” indicates an object belongs to a person or in this case, the robot.<br />
		+	<br>Edited sentence: This shows Spot can kill virus particles when the company attaches the UV-C light onto its back. <br />
		+	<br>To sum up, this is how the Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.<br />
		+	<br>*** Good.<br />
		+	<br>Edited paragraph:<br />
		+	<br>The Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic. To begin with, the robotic dog "Spot" can let doctors talk to patients without coming close to them. The text states, "In response, the company reconfigured the 3-foot tall, 70-pound robot to operate as a mobile telemedicine platform, enabling healthcare providers to determine a patient's condition remotely. The first four-legged 'medical practitioner' was deployed to the Brigham and Women’s Hospital of Harvard University on April 9, 2020. Equipped with an iPad 'face' and a two-way radio that allows for real-time conversation, Spot helps doctors to speak to patients without coming in contact with them." To clarify, Spot is useful for talking to patients without making contact with them. To add on, Spot can help get rid of the virus. According to the text it states, "'By attaching a UV-C light to the robot’s back, Spot could use the device to kill virus particles and disinfect surfaces in any unstructured space that needs support in decontamination — be it hospital tents or metro stations,' the company says." This shows Spot can kill virus particles when the company attaches the UV-C light onto its back. To sum up, this is how the Boston Dynamics' robot is assisting during the COVID-19 pandemic.<br />
		+	<br>Edited by Penny Yagake<br />

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