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− | How to Protect Yourself When Protesting in 2020 <br>
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− | With the rise of protests in support of the Black Lives Matter Movement, more and more police are being deployed to control crowds. <br>
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− | However, not all of the methods used by the police to disperse crowds are safe for the protesters themselves, as it can hurt them. <br>
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− | There a few methods for protecting oneself when protesting. <br>
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− | '''***Edited for tone to avoid using second person "you."'''
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− | Police will throw chemical irritants, flash grenades and shoot rubber bullets, so it is best to wear some sort of protective eyewear such as goggles (swimming, skiing, or construction) to avoid unwanted things from getting in one's eyes. <br>
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− | '''***Edited for punctuation to remove oxford comma and tone.'''
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− | It is also advised to wear some earplugs in case the police throw a stun grenade. They can create a loud noise and can cause temporary deafness. <br>
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− | Masks are highly encouraged, as the world is still in the midst of the coronavirus. Additionally, it can provide a way to remain anonymous, as police wouldn't be able to easily identify who those with masks are. <br>
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− | Last but not least, individuals should wear long-sleeved shirts and/or pants so their skin won't be heavily affected by the tear gas or pepper spray. <br>
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− | How to Protect Yourself When Protesting in 2020 <br>
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− | With the rise of protests in support of the Black Lives Matter Movement, more and more police are being deployed to control crowds. However, not all of the methods used by the police to disperse crowds are safe for the protesters themselves, as it can hurt them. There a few methods for protecting oneself when protesting. Police will throw chemical irritants, flash grenades and shoot rubber bullets, so it is best to wear some sort of protective eyewear such as goggles (swimming, skiing, or construction) to avoid unwanted things from getting in one's eyes. It is also advised to wear some earplugs in case the police throw a stun grenade. They can create a loud noise and can cause temporary deafness. Masks are highly encouraged, as the world is still in the midst of the coronavirus. Additionally, it can provide a way to remain anonymous, as police wouldn't be able to easily identify who those with masks are. Last but not least, individuals should wear long-sleeved shirts and/or pants so their skin won't be heavily affected by the tear gas or pepper spray. <br>
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− | '''***Try to avoid using "you" as it makes the article sound less formal and this is a more serious topic. Good job overall!'''
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− | Edited by Nicole Glidden
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