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It's Raining Crystals in Hawaii

      • I removed It's because you should write more to the point. "It's" takes away from the title.

Kilauea is the most active volcano in the island of Hawaii.

On May 3, Kilauea began to erupt again and residents have been dealing with all the things that have been coming out of the volcano. One of those things includes green crystals, also known as olivine crystals. These crystals are very common, but it's unusual to find them as a result of a volcanic eruption. Geologists claim that during the volcanic eruption, the green crystals are carried out with the lava into the sky. Some of the lava cools instantly in the air, forming pumice. This sudden change traps gasses in the pumice which force themselves out, creating holes.

      • "Force" is the verb being acted by the "pumice". Pumice is a collective/singular noun. When we use singular nouns, the verbs must have an "s" at the end as in this sentence "The gas sprays out of the hose." Also, "Pumice" is not multiple things so we cannot use "themselves". We must use itself.

These holes are where the olivine crystals come out from, making it seem as if it's raining crystals. The volcano Kilauea has impacted Hawaii greatly, but the residents of Hawaii are hoping to take a break from all the eruptions. https://www.popularmechanics.com/science/environment/a21527670/kilauea-hawaii-volcano-crystals-olivine-green/

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Raining Crystals in Hawaii Kilauea is the most active volcano in the island of Hawaii. On May 3, Kilauea began to erupt again and residents have been dealing with all the things that have been coming out of the volcano. One of those things includes green crystals, also known as olivine crystals. These crystals are very common, but it's unusual to find them as a result of a volcanic eruption. Geologists claim that during the volcanic eruption, the green crystals are carried out with the lava into the sky. Some of the lava cools instantly in the air, forming pumice. This sudden change traps gasses in the pumice which forces itself out, creating holes. These holes are where the olivine crystals come out from, making it seem as if it's raining crystals. The volcano Kilauea has impacted Hawaii greatly, but the residents of Hawaii are hoping to take a break from all the eruptions. https://www.popularmechanics.com/science/environment/a21527670/kilauea-hawaii-volcano-crystals-olivine-green/